Loment
love and nature3 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
I had to read your notes about the loment and then I reread the poem so I could envision what you said. When love reaches that point of developing into something big then two and blossoms into one...
At least I hope that's what you meant.
smiles and hugs, Carol
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I had to read your notes about the loment and then I reread the poem so I could envision what you said. When love reaches that point of developing into something big then two and blossoms into one...
At least I hope that's what you meant.
smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Startling imagery!
Heads-up--last line has 10 syllables vs 9 per requirements
Sugg: delight vs happiness
sglimpes=>GLIMPSES of blue loments=>LAMENTS (?)
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Startling imagery!
Heads-up--last line has 10 syllables vs 9 per requirements
Sugg: delight vs happiness
sglimpes=>GLIMPSES of blue loments=>LAMENTS (?)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
Comment from lyenochka
I like the flow of your poem and how love seems to gather momentum and shimmers in those precious moments.
I'm not sure what a "loment" is. I looked it up and found it's a kind of fruit.
I think you meant "lament" in the title and in the last line:
"happiness waves sglimpes of blue loments (glimpses of blue laments)
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I like the flow of your poem and how love seems to gather momentum and shimmers in those precious moments.
I'm not sure what a "loment" is. I looked it up and found it's a kind of fruit.
I think you meant "lament" in the title and in the last line:
"happiness waves sglimpes of blue loments (glimpses of blue laments)
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
