Leave of Absence
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Pressure Wash"Troopers life spins out of control over his family
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Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
SSSSSStunning. Gripping and heartrending--suspense is excruciating--a narrative tour de force--brilliant dialog and character development. SSSSSStupendous. Cheers. LIZ
duffle=>duffel
where Hodges=>HODGES' or HODGES'S] daughter grew up
one instance of YOU'RE=>YOUR
make him lay=>LIE down (keep as is if you want to convey his common misusage) two other instances of lay vs. lie in text
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
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SSSSSStunning. Gripping and heartrending--suspense is excruciating--a narrative tour de force--brilliant dialog and character development. SSSSSStupendous. Cheers. LIZ
duffle=>duffel
where Hodges=>HODGES' or HODGES'S] daughter grew up
one instance of YOU'RE=>YOUR
make him lay=>LIE down (keep as is if you want to convey his common misusage) two other instances of lay vs. lie in text
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
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Thanks again, Liz for the golden plus.
Comment from siais
"Slipping onto the freeway, Luke knew he'd likely never see his neighborhood again, least not in the same way. He laughed at himself over how he was bound to get arrested when it was Hodges who should have done the time. But it was liberating."
Tightly woven exciting story, best wishes thanks for sharing.Good one, take care!
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
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"Slipping onto the freeway, Luke knew he'd likely never see his neighborhood again, least not in the same way. He laughed at himself over how he was bound to get arrested when it was Hodges who should have done the time. But it was liberating."
Tightly woven exciting story, best wishes thanks for sharing.Good one, take care!
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much for pulling that paragraph out and the mention of it feeling tightly strung together. Appreciated.
Comment from BethShelby
Well as much trouble as this is likely to cause for Luke, I guess it did temporarily make him feel better. It certainly scared his neighbor. I'm not sure I understand why his wife chose to blame him for the death of their child and why she chose to put a restraiiing order on him. I'm anxious to see how you work this out.
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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Well as much trouble as this is likely to cause for Luke, I guess it did temporarily make him feel better. It certainly scared his neighbor. I'm not sure I understand why his wife chose to blame him for the death of their child and why she chose to put a restraiiing order on him. I'm anxious to see how you work this out.
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Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Appreciate it Beth. There are some explanations that would give the story away too soon, but it will give you answers to what are some good questions!
