Up in Smoke
21 syllable naani8 total reviews
Comment from patricia dillon
A pithy illustration of the power of words. "The tongue is a small member, yet it boasts of great exploits. How great a forest is set ablaze by a small fire! And the tongue is a fire."
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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A pithy illustration of the power of words. "The tongue is a small member, yet it boasts of great exploits. How great a forest is set ablaze by a small fire! And the tongue is a fire."
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for this Great review
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You're welcome
Comment from Gert sherwood
Val Crisson 21 syllable naani
Angry emotions tumble from loose lips and your words is a good example of a naani.
Gert
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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Val Crisson 21 syllable naani
Angry emotions tumble from loose lips and your words is a good example of a naani.
Gert
Comment Written 10-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2021
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Thank you, Gert
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You are welcome Val Crisson
Gert
Comment from LisaMay
I agree with you that naani should not rhyme. To me (uneducated) it feels like a naani is the Indian equivalent of a Japanese Haiku, and as such rhyming is a distraction rather than an enhancement.
I think your naani is a very good summation of how impetuous angry outbursts can have lingering effects.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I agree with you that naani should not rhyme. To me (uneducated) it feels like a naani is the Indian equivalent of a Japanese Haiku, and as such rhyming is a distraction rather than an enhancement.
I think your naani is a very good summation of how impetuous angry outbursts can have lingering effects.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the review, and I totally agree with your observation regarding no rhyming in naani.
Comment from T B Botts
Thanks for sharing what a naani is. Personally I doubt that I would ever attempt one, but you seemed to have perfected it. Truer words were never spoken. Once a word has escaped our lips, we can't retract them. To quote scripture- Out of the heart the mouth speaks. There are times when it's best to bite our tongues. Well done. Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thanks for sharing what a naani is. Personally I doubt that I would ever attempt one, but you seemed to have perfected it. Truer words were never spoken. Once a word has escaped our lips, we can't retract them. To quote scripture- Out of the heart the mouth speaks. There are times when it's best to bite our tongues. Well done. Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the fabulous review. Yes, naani is a very interesting write, and I am sure you could do it.
Comment from zanya
Yes anger is such a powerful almost overwhelming emotion at times, all consuming- well portrayed here with its potential lasting impact' loose lips' such an effective image
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Yes anger is such a powerful almost overwhelming emotion at times, all consuming- well portrayed here with its potential lasting impact' loose lips' such an effective image
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this insightful review
Comment from Sugarray77
A very good write, mystery author. I was also taught to write Naani in an unrhymed fashion, although the instructions do not give guidance on it. An extremely well written verse. Good luck.
Melissa
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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A very good write, mystery author. I was also taught to write Naani in an unrhymed fashion, although the instructions do not give guidance on it. An extremely well written verse. Good luck.
Melissa
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your lovely review. Rhyming ruins naani, but if the instructions don't make it clear??????
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I'm no poet so I don't know if your form is right but your vision of life is certainly perfect. How often we say things that destroy relationships or trust. I really like this poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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I'm no poet so I don't know if your form is right but your vision of life is certainly perfect. How often we say things that destroy relationships or trust. I really like this poem.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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I really like your reply. Thank you for your supporting review.
Comment from equestrik
A well composed write for the naani contest, this speaks a stark truth. When people don't learn to keep their mouths shut when they should, many hurtful and disastrous things can happen.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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A well composed write for the naani contest, this speaks a stark truth. When people don't learn to keep their mouths shut when they should, many hurtful and disastrous things can happen.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful review. Unfortunately, "loose" lips can cause so much pain.
