Football - A Novel
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Another great chapter to start off my week in Fantasy Land; although, every chapter of your stories are filled with real and believable, everyday, life. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Another great chapter to start off my week in Fantasy Land; although, every chapter of your stories are filled with real and believable, everyday, life. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your story is progressing so well, Barbara, the tension is rising, and I'm hoping that the former in-laws don't get a another dime out of the will. They are a couple of nasty people. That's why they had those boarding school pamphlets at their home. Get the boys, put them in boarding school, spend all their money. Hmm, not nice. This was a really good chapter, Barbara, it had a bit of everything in it. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Your story is progressing so well, Barbara, the tension is rising, and I'm hoping that the former in-laws don't get a another dime out of the will. They are a couple of nasty people. That's why they had those boarding school pamphlets at their home. Get the boys, put them in boarding school, spend all their money. Hmm, not nice. This was a really good chapter, Barbara, it had a bit of everything in it. Well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
The story is moving forward in an interesting way.
Gabriel and Katherine's conversation is particularly noteworthy.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end.
The story is moving forward in an interesting way.
Gabriel and Katherine's conversation is particularly noteworthy.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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B.W, Most Welcome! It's my pleasure!!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Wendy G
I do hope these in-laws are not planning to take the children and then get to gain the inheritance because the children have some sort of "accident". Or worse that they are planning to get rid of Katherine first, so the children will be taken over by the grandparents!!
You are writing it so well. Always interesting!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I do hope these in-laws are not planning to take the children and then get to gain the inheritance because the children have some sort of "accident". Or worse that they are planning to get rid of Katherine first, so the children will be taken over by the grandparents!!
You are writing it so well. Always interesting!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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You brought out some interesting points. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
It looks as if you have joined this couple together for now despite former inlaw problems. I was wondering about Frosty the snowman. He seems to be lurking, but where? Wedding bells in the distance. Good one Barb
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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It looks as if you have joined this couple together for now despite former inlaw problems. I was wondering about Frosty the snowman. He seems to be lurking, but where? Wedding bells in the distance. Good one Barb
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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We shall see. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a very good chapter, barbara.
-It flows well and fills us in on
a few different situations.
-I like the back and forth between
Gabe and Katherine, and how
the boys are accepting him,
and Katherine is warming up, too.
-It sounds like Katherine's in-laws
are real characters! They went
through all of that money
in a short period of time.
-They sound like the sort
that thinks the world owes
them everything.
-I am glad the lawyer told
her that her husband had
really good lawyers!
-Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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-This is a very good chapter, barbara.
-It flows well and fills us in on
a few different situations.
-I like the back and forth between
Gabe and Katherine, and how
the boys are accepting him,
and Katherine is warming up, too.
-It sounds like Katherine's in-laws
are real characters! They went
through all of that money
in a short period of time.
-They sound like the sort
that thinks the world owes
them everything.
-I am glad the lawyer told
her that her husband had
really good lawyers!
-Well done.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Let's hope the lawyer knew what he was talking about. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome. I hope he does, too, but I have a feeling it will be more complicated:):)
Comment from eliz100
This is a great installment. Now we see why the in-laws are acting squirrely. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next installment.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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This is a great installment. Now we see why the in-laws are acting squirrely. I do not see any room for improvement. I look forward to the next installment.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from royowen
I don't know how grandparents would want to rifle their grandchildren's estate nor be any part of anything like that, my grandchildren are the world to me, and anything that brings them joy. So apart from Frost hating here, she's up against her in laws too. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I don't know how grandparents would want to rifle their grandchildren's estate nor be any part of anything like that, my grandchildren are the world to me, and anything that brings them joy. So apart from Frost hating here, she's up against her in laws too. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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For some reason the in-laws are not nice people. I have actually seen it and don't understand it.
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Me neither
Comment from Sankey
We are really getting into the thick of things, now. This was, yet again, an excellent read. A couple of spags/suggestions for you.Are your linem[a](e?)n ready
"If the answer(')s no,
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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We are really getting into the thick of things, now. This was, yet again, an excellent read. A couple of spags/suggestions for you.Are your linem[a](e?)n ready
"If the answer(')s no,
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I will check those areas and fix it. Thank you.
Comment from Jay Squires
I only have one question. It may not even need attention. But the reader has no way of knowing that the conversation with the lawyer was on speakerphone until the conversation was over and you wrote: Personally, I believe I would have added at the beginning of her conversation with the lawyer that she put her cellphone on speaker. Just a thought.
Another well-written chapter. I especially liked Katherine's line when Gabriel asked her what he needs to do to win over the lady, "Everything you're already doing and remain patient."]
Their relationship when it's thoroughly established will be rock solid!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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I only have one question. It may not even need attention. But the reader has no way of knowing that the conversation with the lawyer was on speakerphone until the conversation was over and you wrote:
Another well-written chapter. I especially liked Katherine's line when Gabriel asked her what he needs to do to win over the lady, "Everything you're already doing and remain patient."]
Their relationship when it's thoroughly established will be rock solid!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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You're right about the speaker phone. I hadn't thought of it. I will make that correction. Thank you.
