Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 10"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
18 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh my golly gee-willikers! I'm SO mad at myself for not picking up that Jon was the creepy priest in the courtroom! Duh on me! You did throw it out there that he'd been cremated...and wasn't it Cassidy who exposed that? So she knew her brother was in the courtroom as she was railroaded?? I'm steaming! Guess its a sign of a great story when I begin to get emotionally involved, right? Gold! Cynthia had this letter revealing gold to be mined beneath the vineyard! (No wonder she wanted to rush in and snatch it up--even though it was not for sale!) . Lot's and lots to absorb here... On other compliment if I may? Your descriptions are magnificent! I could "see" that Casino/Resort...all of the opulence in fine detail!--
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Oh my golly gee-willikers! I'm SO mad at myself for not picking up that Jon was the creepy priest in the courtroom! Duh on me! You did throw it out there that he'd been cremated...and wasn't it Cassidy who exposed that? So she knew her brother was in the courtroom as she was railroaded?? I'm steaming! Guess its a sign of a great story when I begin to get emotionally involved, right? Gold! Cynthia had this letter revealing gold to be mined beneath the vineyard! (No wonder she wanted to rush in and snatch it up--even though it was not for sale!) . Lot's and lots to absorb here... On other compliment if I may? Your descriptions are magnificent! I could "see" that Casino/Resort...all of the opulence in fine detail!--
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you...I know others get more into in depth detail...I prefer to set the scene and then let the reader imagine the rest. I hope it comes off that way.
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It's the "Hitchcock" method...
Which I've always admired...
What we "imagine" is ever so much more haunting and revealing!
It also makes us active readers--invested in your story and creating our own scenarios as to which way it will go!
Great authors do this! Great authors like you!
Karenina
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
So Mason is as wily as they come, and Jon is a traitor to the cloth (which makes it doubly sad, that he was forced into it). And Cynthia and Michael want Elizabeth's wine country, so they can tear it up and mine it for the gold. Lots of motives for murder there.
Very small spags and suggestions:
becoming a priest was my parent's idea, not mine.
becoming a priest was my parents' idea, not mine.
"Either you make her shut up or."
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"Either you make her shut up, or..."
"Enough of your dribble.
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"Enough of your drivel.
A symphony of colors, flaming red, ...
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A symphony of colors -- flaming red, ...
Michael - Realtor and Cynthia's nephew
Michael - Realtor and Cynthia's nephew [yes, Realtor is capitalized! I once "corrected" Sally Law on it, and she sweetly explained that the title is actually trademarked, or something to that effect]
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Both Elizabeth and Cassidy's lives are in danger.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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So Mason is as wily as they come, and Jon is a traitor to the cloth (which makes it doubly sad, that he was forced into it). And Cynthia and Michael want Elizabeth's wine country, so they can tear it up and mine it for the gold. Lots of motives for murder there.
Very small spags and suggestions:
becoming a priest was my parent's idea, not mine.
becoming a priest was my parents' idea, not mine.
"Either you make her shut up or."
-->
"Either you make her shut up, or..."
"Enough of your dribble.
-->
"Enough of your drivel.
A symphony of colors, flaming red, ...
-->
A symphony of colors -- flaming red, ...
Michael - Realtor and Cynthia's nephew
Michael - Realtor and Cynthia's nephew [yes, Realtor is capitalized! I once "corrected" Sally Law on it, and she sweetly explained that the title is actually trademarked, or something to that effect]
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Both Elizabeth and Cassidy's lives are in danger.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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I thank you so much, Mary Kay. Once again, I was forced to take a day off, and I am slammed with reviews and messages. (Not complaining, but I get so far behind) I have corrected things (I must get rid of that auto-correct..it changes after I change because it disagrees.)
Appreciate you as always. smiles and hugs, Carol
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You're very welcome, dear Carol.
Yes, that autocorrect is really a menace. Not only that, but it's very slow on the uptake -- I just got a new phone, and it's not making very obvious suggestions, based on things I've already written. I've also begun to suspect that this is a refurbished phone, because of some of the outlandish things it "wants" to substitute for my words.
But it can definitely cause trouble, too! I tried to send a note to my Dr. Ciccone, and it changed his name to Dr. Cyclone! I almost forgot to go back and fix it.
God bless you, Carol, and remember, one day at a time! Love, Mary Kay xoxo
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You're very welcome, dear Carol.
Yes, that autocorrect is really a menace. Not only that, but it's very slow on the uptake -- I just got a new phone, and it's not making very obvious suggestions, based on things I've already written. I've also begun to suspect that this is a refurbished phone, because of some of the outlandish things it "wants" to substitute for my words.
But it can definitely cause trouble, too! I tried to send a note to my Dr. Ciccone, and it changed his name to Dr. Cyclone! I almost forgot to go back and fix it.
God bless you, Carol, and remember, one day at a time! Love, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Patty Palmer
And the plot thickens.... The characters are lining up nicely as to who is what, when, and where. I have to laugh when I'm reading your mystery chapters, I talk to myself like keeping the characters straight. Your writing of crime mysteries amazes me.
HUGS
Patty
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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And the plot thickens.... The characters are lining up nicely as to who is what, when, and where. I have to laugh when I'm reading your mystery chapters, I talk to myself like keeping the characters straight. Your writing of crime mysteries amazes me.
HUGS
Patty
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Hello...
Sorry for my delay in responding. Had to take some time off and now I find myself far, far behind. I appreciate your time and your review. Only 40 more to go and I might be able to write again. LOL
smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
I really liked your sunset description. It's good that Jeremy overheard that conversation between Mason and Father Jon. I still am not sure about the Cynthia character. Seems like she and Michael want the property to get the gold.
Comments/Suggestion:
I'm late reviewing so you may have already corrected these:
was my parent's idea, not mine. (parents')
"That new friend of yours worries me. (hers?) I think she was taking about Liz's friend?
In my estimate, (estimation)
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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I really liked your sunset description. It's good that Jeremy overheard that conversation between Mason and Father Jon. I still am not sure about the Cynthia character. Seems like she and Michael want the property to get the gold.
Comments/Suggestion:
I'm late reviewing so you may have already corrected these:
was my parent's idea, not mine. (parents')
"That new friend of yours worries me. (hers?) I think she was taking about Liz's friend?
In my estimate, (estimation)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Hello...
Sorry for my delay in responding. Had to take some time off and now I find myself far, far behind. I appreciate your time and your review. Only 40 more to go and I might be able to write again. LOL
smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from ShirleyT1
You've written another great and intriguing chapter. Your characters continue to be fascinating and I find myself getting more and more involved in the unfolding story. I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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You've written another great and intriguing chapter. Your characters continue to be fascinating and I find myself getting more and more involved in the unfolding story. I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Hello...
Sorry for my delay in responding. Had to take some time off and now I find myself far, far behind. I appreciate your time and your review. Only 40 more to go and I might be able to write again. LOL
smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Another excellent chapter, Carol. Interesting things about the characters are being revealed and now a reason for the threats to Elizabeth. Well done.
One little thing: "landing, Carth headed to..." - should be Garth.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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Another excellent chapter, Carol. Interesting things about the characters are being revealed and now a reason for the threats to Elizabeth. Well done.
One little thing: "landing, Carth headed to..." - should be Garth.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2021
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corrected and thank you!
Forgive me ... I am 50 reviews behind and not a chance at writing till I read and thank everyone... Are you still with the girls? Hope the trip is everything you hoped for....Smiles, Carol
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No problem, Carol. I?m still in BC, at my daughter, Ann?s place until Thursday, then I have a twelve our bus ride to my other daughter?s, closer to the US border. Not looking forward to that ride.
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My thoughts are always with you!
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Thanks, Carol. Hugs.
Comment from Ric Myworld
There is a lot happening in this chapter, so it might seem idiotic that all my attentions were tied early on with the talk of class that referred to the concierge dressed in an expensive tux with a red cummerbund. Class, a word used lightly by most all, has nothing to do with fancy clothes, wealth, or status, and most considered to have it are seldom if ever deserving of the title. I once meet an old mountain man in Tennessee. The soles of his bare feet thick and blackened by the tar from the roadway he walked. His bibbed overalls tattered and torn, and his white beard stained brown from his slobbers of chewing tobacco. Not much to look at, but every night he walked 7 miles to the Esco Hankins record shop to watch the cloggers and pay his respects and support to their hard work and dance routines. No other reason, just to let them know they were appreciated. Now, that's a classy guy. LOL. Someone, I knew you would appreciate. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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There is a lot happening in this chapter, so it might seem idiotic that all my attentions were tied early on with the talk of class that referred to the concierge dressed in an expensive tux with a red cummerbund. Class, a word used lightly by most all, has nothing to do with fancy clothes, wealth, or status, and most considered to have it are seldom if ever deserving of the title. I once meet an old mountain man in Tennessee. The soles of his bare feet thick and blackened by the tar from the roadway he walked. His bibbed overalls tattered and torn, and his white beard stained brown from his slobbers of chewing tobacco. Not much to look at, but every night he walked 7 miles to the Esco Hankins record shop to watch the cloggers and pay his respects and support to their hard work and dance routines. No other reason, just to let them know they were appreciated. Now, that's a classy guy. LOL. Someone, I knew you would appreciate. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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You know me well... As I was reading and you were describing the mountain man, my brain was screaming (gave me a slight headache) that I wanted to tell you...yes, yes that's real class. then you "shut me up" (I know difficult to believe) by beating me to the punch. LOL You knew exactly how I would feel about that wonderful man.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Good people recognize good people!
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping! Brilliant confrontation between the priest and Mason--masterful character development--stunning narration rich in imagery. I peg this as book of the month!
my parent's=>PARENTS' idea
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Gripping! Brilliant confrontation between the priest and Mason--masterful character development--stunning narration rich in imagery. I peg this as book of the month!
my parent's=>PARENTS' idea
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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You flatter me and I LOVE IT!
Thanks, Liz. there's so much going on within each chapter and a lot hasn't even been revealed yet...I am thrilled you are enjoying it! i keep working on balancing the the dialogue with the settings, for fear I will do too much telling and not enough showing... My least favorite review but necessary. LOL
Thanks again! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Oh, a great deal of increasing complexity, as the plot rapidly thickens! The priest is evil, a disgrace to his profession, and I can't believe he would sacrifice his own sister, and allow her to be judged guilty! All the characters are developing well. Alyssa and Liz will have their work cut out to successfully untangle everything. Intriguing!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Oh, a great deal of increasing complexity, as the plot rapidly thickens! The priest is evil, a disgrace to his profession, and I can't believe he would sacrifice his own sister, and allow her to be judged guilty! All the characters are developing well. Alyssa and Liz will have their work cut out to successfully untangle everything. Intriguing!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Yes and so much more is hidden yet... I guess my past with a Catholic priest colors my viewpoint in this story (I know they aren't all like him). In this particular case, he thought of it as payback and saving his own skin, of course.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
Now we are learning more about the Priest. I was surpriesed to find that the lady on trial was the Priest' sister. I suspected theh Cynthia was interested in buying the vineyard. As year I don't know is putting lives in danger. You are excellent at developing a plot while keeping up in suspense until near the end.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Now we are learning more about the Priest. I was surpriesed to find that the lady on trial was the Priest' sister. I suspected theh Cynthia was interested in buying the vineyard. As year I don't know is putting lives in danger. You are excellent at developing a plot while keeping up in suspense until near the end.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Good morning, Beth
Just slipped that in there, didn't I? In the very first chapter, I wrote about Cassidy telling Mary that there family had cremated Jon's body and they were moving to Italy immediately. That was the only time the connection was casually mentioned. (A nugget of a clue). LOL
Smiles, Carol
