Milk, Bread, and Eggs
A trip to the grocery store.53 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
This may be fiction, but the story, circumstances, and dialog are so realistic that the entire thing could have really taken place. That was an interesting piece about getting Covid vaccinations. I am vaccinated but have two sisters who refuse (Mona and Summer), haha. Great story, and enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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This may be fiction, but the story, circumstances, and dialog are so realistic that the entire thing could have really taken place. That was an interesting piece about getting Covid vaccinations. I am vaccinated but have two sisters who refuse (Mona and Summer), haha. Great story, and enjoyable read.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, LJButterfly, for your kind words and generous review. There is a lot of truth in this fictional piece. Now, we just have to get a vaccine for gossips. LOL. And yes, a whole lot of people refuse to get the Covid19 vaccine. Including my brothers. But personally, I just don't understand the resistance. I'm glad you liked it. :-)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a great story that I can identify totally with. The style of writing is a bit shorty-handy for my taste, but each to his own, so I didn't let that fact affect my rating. I usually make a little list of what I've actually gone for, and check it before leaving the store. I am a great believer in lists.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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This is a great story that I can identify totally with. The style of writing is a bit shorty-handy for my taste, but each to his own, so I didn't let that fact affect my rating. I usually make a little list of what I've actually gone for, and check it before leaving the store. I am a great believer in lists.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Katherine, for your extra-special six-star review. It's reviews like this that keep old hacks like me struggling alone. LOL. I appreciate your encouragement and time. :-)
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hi Ric.
This is a funny story. A lot more goes on during your trips to the grocery store than mine. The dialogue with all the neighbors and encounters makes the story but I particularly like the "silent" dialogue. that's something we all do but when you put it into writing it pumps up the story.
Another thing that tickled me was the fact your neighbors all want to hang out with you on the spur of the moment visit. My neighbors usually asked me to move along quickly.
You need to post a sequel to this. It's when you go back for the milk, bread, and eggs.
You need to post more stories. You know how to write.
Robert
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Hi Ric.
This is a funny story. A lot more goes on during your trips to the grocery store than mine. The dialogue with all the neighbors and encounters makes the story but I particularly like the "silent" dialogue. that's something we all do but when you put it into writing it pumps up the story.
Another thing that tickled me was the fact your neighbors all want to hang out with you on the spur of the moment visit. My neighbors usually asked me to move along quickly.
You need to post a sequel to this. It's when you go back for the milk, bread, and eggs.
You need to post more stories. You know how to write.
Robert
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Robert, for your extra-special six-star review. There is more truth in this story than I'd really like to admit. But no, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. Now, we just have to come up with a vaccine for gossips. It's kind words of encouragement from outstanding writers like you that keeps an old hack like me scratching. I appreciate YOU!
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Hey Ric.
You are very welcome. I was happy to do it. it's a good story with several twists which keep it interesting all the way through the end. There's no cure for gossip. You did a great job.
Thank you for the compliment.
Robert
Comment from Rikki66
I like this very much for I often find myself in the same predicament, especially if I do not make a written list. I got my shots as soon as they were available, we at the VA are Quinny pigs for every new med.
RikkiLXVI
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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I like this very much for I often find myself in the same predicament, especially if I do not make a written list. I got my shots as soon as they were available, we at the VA are Quinny pigs for every new med.
RikkiLXVI
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Hello, Rikki66, and thank you so much for your kind words and generous review. There is more truth in this story than I'd like to admit. No, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. And whoever named this the Golden Years should be shot. Good for you on the vaccine! If we could get everyone else on the bandwagon we could put this pandemic behind us. I appreciate your encouragement and time.
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It is the golden years for the doctors and pharmacists that collect from us.
Rikki
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You've got that right, Rikki! LOL.
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, what a fun interpretation of a not so fun trip to the store. I like the way you formatted some of the lines with bold type. I like the inclusion of what the character was thinking. Your story highlights, too, the way gossip affects people--esp when it's lies. The ending was unexpected, but realistic. How many have been shopping for specific items and returned without any of them--many!
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Haha, what a fun interpretation of a not so fun trip to the store. I like the way you formatted some of the lines with bold type. I like the inclusion of what the character was thinking. Your story highlights, too, the way gossip affects people--esp when it's lies. The ending was unexpected, but realistic. How many have been shopping for specific items and returned without any of them--many!
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your kind words and generous review. There is a lot more truth in this story than I'd care to admit. No, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. And what's even worst is, I took a list. I appreciate your encouraging review!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
That is so typical of what happens when we only have a few things to pick up. We almost buy out the store and forget the items we came for. I love the way you segued into the stupid gossip, here and there. This is a fun read.
Ralf
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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That is so typical of what happens when we only have a few things to pick up. We almost buy out the store and forget the items we came for. I love the way you segued into the stupid gossip, here and there. This is a fun read.
Ralf
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Ralf, for your extra-special six-star review. It's reviews like yours that keep old hacks like me scratching. And the truth is, there is more truth in this story than I care to admit. I did forget the eggs, and I even had a list. Now, we just have to come up with a vaccine for the gossipers. I appreciate YOU! :-)
Comment from muffinmama
Just another day in the life of a gossip-plagued bachelor - LOL
If I had penny for every time I've gone to the supermarket for bread and milk, just to exit with five full bags...
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There are a few places where I can get picky about grammar or punctuation, but I'm chalking it up to the slightly rambling style you used here, very authentic.
Really enjoyable piece.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Just another day in the life of a gossip-plagued bachelor - LOL
If I had penny for every time I've gone to the supermarket for bread and milk, just to exit with five full bags...
Comments:
There are a few places where I can get picky about grammar or punctuation, but I'm chalking it up to the slightly rambling style you used here, very authentic.
Really enjoyable piece.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Muffinmama, for your kind words and generous review. There is more truth in this story than I care to admit. And yes, it is written in a rambling style for effect. Plus there can always be grammar and punctuation mistakes in everything I write. I write super fast and hate to edit and polish. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. Thanks, again.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Hilarious! I suspect your humor fiction is like mine--inspired by truth, vigorously massaged by imagination (or by that buxom brunette those gossips say is your hooker/girlfriend). This cast of characters is priceless, as are your snarky asides. So funny: how's it hanging--hoping not very far--reminds me of my reply when a guy at work or wherever says the usual "hi, what's up?" to which I answer "Nothing of mine." (I think it's witty but nobody seems to get it--possibly because it's a mindless query to which response they don't bother to listen.)
boys gathering up carts left everywhere, were gripping=>GRIPING (complaining--or do you mean they were grasping the cart handles?)
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Hilarious! I suspect your humor fiction is like mine--inspired by truth, vigorously massaged by imagination (or by that buxom brunette those gossips say is your hooker/girlfriend). This cast of characters is priceless, as are your snarky asides. So funny: how's it hanging--hoping not very far--reminds me of my reply when a guy at work or wherever says the usual "hi, what's up?" to which I answer "Nothing of mine." (I think it's witty but nobody seems to get it--possibly because it's a mindless query to which response they don't bother to listen.)
boys gathering up carts left everywhere, were gripping=>GRIPING (complaining--or do you mean they were grasping the cart handles?)
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Well, I'm extra glad you thought this was funny, since you are the main reason I wrote it. You're always saying that I should post some of my comebacks to you. Well, after my trip to the store the other day, I told it almost as it happened, but who the hell would ever believe this story is practically true. So, I wrote it as fiction. Besides, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. Now, we just need to find a vaccine for gossips. As for your "Nothing of mine," I think it's cute and witty. But, like everything I say and write, I never know how most will take my foolishness. But this piece was written strictly by your influence and my admiration for your talents. I appreciate YOU!
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Comment from Ulla
Hehehehe, Yeah, right. I know the feeling. You get everything else but what you needed. This sounds like the good old gossipy town to me. It's well written and it made me smile. Great write. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Hehehehe, Yeah, right. I know the feeling. You get everything else but what you needed. This sounds like the good old gossipy town to me. It's well written and it made me smile. Great write. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Hello, Ulla, and thanks for your kind words and generous review. I told this as fiction because I wouldn't want the world to know it's more truth than pretend. I sacrificed my privacy hoping it would cultivate a few smiles, and I'm especially glad it worked on you. Thanks for your encouraging remarks!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The temperature already 87 blazing-hot degrees, and the stifling humidity at 80 before 10:30 in the morning. (I have to ask - are you by any way from Texas? That's been our weather this summer and I don't understand it. Our part of Texas is usually well into the 100's and so dry that we're in drought conditions. Now, we're getting rain all the time. I can't breathe when I go outside with all the humidity.) I enjoyed reading and I do understand. I forget things all along.
Keep us posted on your new girlfriend. LOL
How are you dear? (comma needed after 'you')
Enjoy the rest of your day sweetheart (comma needed after 'day')
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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The temperature already 87 blazing-hot degrees, and the stifling humidity at 80 before 10:30 in the morning. (I have to ask - are you by any way from Texas? That's been our weather this summer and I don't understand it. Our part of Texas is usually well into the 100's and so dry that we're in drought conditions. Now, we're getting rain all the time. I can't breathe when I go outside with all the humidity.) I enjoyed reading and I do understand. I forget things all along.
Keep us posted on your new girlfriend. LOL
How are you dear? (comma needed after 'you')
Enjoy the rest of your day sweetheart (comma needed after 'day')
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Barbara, for your kind words, generous review, helpful tweaks. I write really fast and often make mistakes that I read right through. But, since I hate to edit and polish, I don't catch them. Which makes it all the nicer when friends catch them for me. I appreciate YOU!
