Milk, Bread, and Eggs
A trip to the grocery store.53 total reviews
Comment from JennaG
Oh, how true this story is! I bet a lot of people are able to relate to this one. It's so frustrating when you get home from the store and realize you didn't get what you went there for in the first place. As I get older, I'm finding this happens more and more often. Ugh!
And all the quirky/nosey people he encountered along the way! All the snoopiness and gossip. No wonder he forgot what he was shopping for!
Your stories always hold my attention from beginning to end. This one was no exception. Your dialog is always entertaining and your character descriptions are so creative and skillful that I can easily picture them in my mind. I thoroughly enjoyed the read! Well done! :)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
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Oh, how true this story is! I bet a lot of people are able to relate to this one. It's so frustrating when you get home from the store and realize you didn't get what you went there for in the first place. As I get older, I'm finding this happens more and more often. Ugh!
And all the quirky/nosey people he encountered along the way! All the snoopiness and gossip. No wonder he forgot what he was shopping for!
Your stories always hold my attention from beginning to end. This one was no exception. Your dialog is always entertaining and your character descriptions are so creative and skillful that I can easily picture them in my mind. I thoroughly enjoyed the read! Well done! :)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2021
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Wow, it's almost like Christmas morning, three big packages from a special friend that I haven't had the please of seeing around for a while. Four giant blessings. There is more truth to this story than I care to admit. Makes me truly wish there was a vaccine for gossipers. And no, I didn't forget all three things, just the eggs. LOL. I can't think you enough for making my week! And I hope everything is good with you!
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Yes! A vaccine for gossipers! Wouldn't that be nice!? And one for snoopiness, too! I think you're on to something here! Lol ;)
Comment from Susan Newell
I loved this one. I'm generally not a fan of sentence fragments, but you used them so strategically that I'm sure they're intentional and not casual errors. There are so many circumstances and people in here that are true to life, that I could easily put myself in a similar position.
As to the milk, bread and eggs: I guess there is a price to be paid for shopping while distracted.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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I loved this one. I'm generally not a fan of sentence fragments, but you used them so strategically that I'm sure they're intentional and not casual errors. There are so many circumstances and people in here that are true to life, that I could easily put myself in a similar position.
As to the milk, bread and eggs: I guess there is a price to be paid for shopping while distracted.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Susan, for your extra-special six-star review. But mostly, for your kind words and the pleasure of knowing you enjoyed the story. There is more truth to this story than I care to admit. And no, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. I do wish there was a vaccine for gossipers, as this day began a frustrating morning. So, I decided to twist it another way to try and make it fun. I appreciate your encouraging review!
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You are welcome. We need more humor around here!
Comment from Tpa
A nicely done story, using mostly the theme, gossiping. I also like, near the end, your thoughts on the vaccine and its effects on others. You also had good metaphors like the donkey...... GOOD JOB
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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A nicely done story, using mostly the theme, gossiping. I also like, near the end, your thoughts on the vaccine and its effects on others. You also had good metaphors like the donkey...... GOOD JOB
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Tpa, for your kind words and encouraging review. There is more truth in this story than I care to admit. But no, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. It's a pleasure to know you liked my story. And I appreciate the generous review.
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, they are the staples and the most perishable of all items, sometimes needed more than once a week! But I've tried to define what a gossip is, apart from friendly conversation, it's usually what gossips make up, or assume what has transpired, like, "They say he's a foreign spy" or "He's running a brothel for underage prostitutes," beautifully written Ric, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Heh heh, they are the staples and the most perishable of all items, sometimes needed more than once a week! But I've tried to define what a gossip is, apart from friendly conversation, it's usually what gossips make up, or assume what has transpired, like, "They say he's a foreign spy" or "He's running a brothel for underage prostitutes," beautifully written Ric, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy, for your kind words and encouraging review. There is more truth in this story than I care to admit. The day began as a frustrating morning. So, I decided to twist it into something fun and hope it would put a smile on someone's face. Your reviews are a pleasure that I always look forward to. I appreciate you!
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Well done
Comment from Senyai
HimRic,
Hahahah! Milk, bread and eggs ... isn't that always the way? What a funny write, I enjoyed all the way through. We have a few Bills, Mildreds, Loises and well, not many Monas or Summers over our way. I got a kick out of the asides your mind kept ticking off lol. This poem was right up my ally to be sure.
Great beginning, gotta go get milk, bread and eggs and ending - forgot the milk, bread and eggs.
Excellent fun read!
Senyai
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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HimRic,
Hahahah! Milk, bread and eggs ... isn't that always the way? What a funny write, I enjoyed all the way through. We have a few Bills, Mildreds, Loises and well, not many Monas or Summers over our way. I got a kick out of the asides your mind kept ticking off lol. This poem was right up my ally to be sure.
Great beginning, gotta go get milk, bread and eggs and ending - forgot the milk, bread and eggs.
Excellent fun read!
Senyai
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Senyai, for your kind words and generous review. There is more truth in this story than I care to admit. No, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Much appreciated! Ric
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Hmm, just forgot the eggs? You?re doing better than me these days.
Take care:-)
Comment from Ritasher
I really giggled at some parts - you capture the trip to any small town shop perfectly. I love your humorous, condemning, yet forgiving tone of a story. So many idiots out there not taking their FREE vaccinations to save THEIR dumb asses, really!
Great to see you writing things here, as I know you do it rarely. I'd read your book - better write more! Haha.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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I really giggled at some parts - you capture the trip to any small town shop perfectly. I love your humorous, condemning, yet forgiving tone of a story. So many idiots out there not taking their FREE vaccinations to save THEIR dumb asses, really!
Great to see you writing things here, as I know you do it rarely. I'd read your book - better write more! Haha.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Rita, for your extra-special six-star review. But most of all, for enjoying the story. There is more truth to this story than I care to admit. But no, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. I appreciate YOU! And hope you're having a wonderful summer trip. Be careful and have fun! Ric
Comment from JennStar
I liked the story overall the tone was humorous. I might suggest adding a bit more description to the story but that is more of my personal preference.
I noticed a couple grammar things:
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The temperature(,) already 87 blazing-hot degrees
This might be a style choice but it really doesn't need the comma after So, you could just write- So, muggy . . . I as So muggy, I
here {hesitated and then,} I don't think the comma is needed here either but then again the ... might be throwing me off but
the comma isn't needed Can't mind their own business and(,)
I think this is a comma splice: gagging on my good wishes(,) "Have a great day, Bill." to gagging on my good wishes. "Have a great day, Bill."
(The boys gathering up stray carts, were griping, and sauntering along joking about old people) I think this might read better as (The boys gathering up stray carts, were griping and sauntering along, joking about old people
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I smiled, threw up my hand(,) and hurried off, ready to dislodge myself from the absurd accusations.
"I'll be back out soon(,) and
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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I liked the story overall the tone was humorous. I might suggest adding a bit more description to the story but that is more of my personal preference.
I noticed a couple grammar things:
add
The temperature(,) already 87 blazing-hot degrees
This might be a style choice but it really doesn't need the comma after So, you could just write- So, muggy . . . I as So muggy, I
here {hesitated and then,} I don't think the comma is needed here either but then again the ... might be throwing me off but
the comma isn't needed Can't mind their own business and(,)
I think this is a comma splice: gagging on my good wishes(,) "Have a great day, Bill." to gagging on my good wishes. "Have a great day, Bill."
(The boys gathering up stray carts, were griping, and sauntering along joking about old people) I think this might read better as (The boys gathering up stray carts, were griping and sauntering along, joking about old people
add
I smiled, threw up my hand(,) and hurried off, ready to dislodge myself from the absurd accusations.
"I'll be back out soon(,) and
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thanks for taking time to read and offer your suggestions. Although I don't agree with all of them, there are a couple of the changes I'll make. I appreciate the time you spent. Have a wonderful week!
Comment from LisaMay
You write well, most entertainingly, and have probably embroidered this story for maximum humor. Many will relate, being subjected to gossip, avoiding nosey opinionated neighbours, memory lapses on items at the supermarket. Your story is very human, laugh out loud funny, while also carrying a message about gossip... when people blindly repeat what they hear, it snowballs (even in extreme heat). I hope you continue to enjoy your professional massages. It is a most beneficial skill.
I think perhaps you don't need the last line. To me it feels obvious and unnecessary, a big dose of 'telling'. Your story has those 3 things in the title and you begin your story with those essentials. The last sentence could be amended to:
Then, realized I'd failed to get the three essentials . . . milk, bread, and eggs.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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You write well, most entertainingly, and have probably embroidered this story for maximum humor. Many will relate, being subjected to gossip, avoiding nosey opinionated neighbours, memory lapses on items at the supermarket. Your story is very human, laugh out loud funny, while also carrying a message about gossip... when people blindly repeat what they hear, it snowballs (even in extreme heat). I hope you continue to enjoy your professional massages. It is a most beneficial skill.
I think perhaps you don't need the last line. To me it feels obvious and unnecessary, a big dose of 'telling'. Your story has those 3 things in the title and you begin your story with those essentials. The last sentence could be amended to:
Then, realized I'd failed to get the three essentials . . . milk, bread, and eggs.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Lisa May, for your kind words and generous review. But most of all, for understanding and enjoying my intended humor. Although, being honest, there this more truth in this story than fiction. No, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. I appreciate your suggestion on the ending sentence and agree with your concept. I have deleted it. Re-wrote it. Then, I wrote it almost identically to your choice of sentence. But after much thought, I put it back like I had it originally. No, the line is redundant and isn't needed. But it completes the full circle, like a circuit of electricity, so I left it. LOL. Thanks again, for the suggestion and great review!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so funny, Ric, I laughed my socks off. I'd have said a lot more to my nosey-parker neighbour! What a cheek, and it's sounds like Mrs Bigmouth has been spreading vicious lies! Your trip to the shops to get your bread, milk and eggs, is just what happens when I shop. I forget the very things I went for. But, you did have a lot of things on your mind, lol. This was a terrific story, and I just hate it that I haven't a six for you. So, about your new busty girlfriend..... ð???ð?¤£ :)) Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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That was so funny, Ric, I laughed my socks off. I'd have said a lot more to my nosey-parker neighbour! What a cheek, and it's sounds like Mrs Bigmouth has been spreading vicious lies! Your trip to the shops to get your bread, milk and eggs, is just what happens when I shop. I forget the very things I went for. But, you did have a lot of things on your mind, lol. This was a terrific story, and I just hate it that I haven't a six for you. So, about your new busty girlfriend..... ð???ð?¤£ :)) Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for your kinds words and encouragement. And most of all, for taking time to read my foolishness. Although, there is more truth to this story than fiction. No, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. I've had four more people ask me about my new girlfriend since this happened, and I can't for the life of me figure where they are getting the information. I don't have any girlfriends . . . well, maybe you. But, it's all innocent, since you're married, and we're 4,000 miles apart. LOL. I appreciate your review!
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LOL, I'll take that as a compliment, we can have a sneaky affair, lol. I won't tell. Can you get over here twice a week?? xxx
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Strictly meant as a compliment, I promise. "Twice a week" -- I've done crazier things -- even spent over 10 to 12 hours flying every week. But these days, I'd have so little energy left, I'd be a bore. LOL. Have a wonderful rest of your week!
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Likewise. That's the worst thing about the years rushing ahead of the mind, leaving the body in confusion!! That was a lot of flying, but how wonderful! You have a lovely week, too. xx
Comment from MAMONIA
This is a great little story and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I also got a laugh out of the thoughts you were having.
This is a realistic piece. How many people I have been in contact with who never had the vaccination. What's going on? Do I have to get Covid to be convinced.
And don't let me start about the gossipers. They have nothing else to keep them interested. You must be interesting.
I've had to misfortune to miss a few things at the grocery store, but have to admit you had a lot of distractions.
Got a real kick out of this.
My best,
Marie
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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This is a great little story and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I also got a laugh out of the thoughts you were having.
This is a realistic piece. How many people I have been in contact with who never had the vaccination. What's going on? Do I have to get Covid to be convinced.
And don't let me start about the gossipers. They have nothing else to keep them interested. You must be interesting.
I've had to misfortune to miss a few things at the grocery store, but have to admit you had a lot of distractions.
Got a real kick out of this.
My best,
Marie
Comment Written 20-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Marie, for your extra-special six-star review. But, most of all, for your kind and encouraging words are what keeps this ol' hack still plugging and scratching out my foolishness. There is more truth in this story than I care to admit. No, I didn't forget all three items, just the eggs. LOL. I can't thank you enough for this warm and delightful review that has made my week! Much appreciated!
