Secrets in the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Secrets in the Wind - Chap 3"A story of loss, deceit, murder and crime
21 total reviews
Comment from Sherry Asbury
You write a lot like Stuart Woods, who is my favorite author. He writes of the wine biz and murder, mayhem, and Stone Barrington, my fave dumb blonde lawyer, and all-around lothario. This is a great chapter and I loved it!!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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You write a lot like Stuart Woods, who is my favorite author. He writes of the wine biz and murder, mayhem, and Stone Barrington, my fave dumb blonde lawyer, and all-around lothario. This is a great chapter and I loved it!!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2021
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Thank you for going back to the beginning and reading the chapters, Sherry. i hope that you enjoy the book.
Hugs, CArol
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Grabbed and held--chilling foreshadowing about the subtly menacing Miguel--stunning letter. Sugg: change both of their phone number area codes--800 is reserved for bureaucracies and big business orgs.
Elizabeth did not know how long she'd laid=>LAIN on the floor.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Grabbed and held--chilling foreshadowing about the subtly menacing Miguel--stunning letter. Sugg: change both of their phone number area codes--800 is reserved for bureaucracies and big business orgs.
Elizabeth did not know how long she'd laid=>LAIN on the floor.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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I was so afraid when I put phone numbers in that someone might decide to dial the number... why I don't know...that's why I used the 800. Guess I could make up an area code...
Thanks for stopping by and continuing to read and enjoy.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
Aha, Hank Armato to the rescue again! You've definitely caught my attention. This is very well written with lots of imagery and suspense. I hope I can keep up with this while I'm traveling. Today our internet was out all day and I'm sixteen reviews behind already! lol
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Aha, Hank Armato to the rescue again! You've definitely caught my attention. This is very well written with lots of imagery and suspense. I hope I can keep up with this while I'm traveling. Today our internet was out all day and I'm sixteen reviews behind already! lol
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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the same thing has been happening to me... I was three sentences short of finishing a chapter and the internet froze... I sat for over an hour waiting to type three sentences. Technology is so grand!
Smiles, Carol
PS... where are you traveling too?
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Going to British Columbia on Tuesday to spend a few weeks with my girls and their families. They live an eleven hour bus ride away from each other! Not looking forward to that part.
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Oh great... Have a great time with the family... and yes, an eleven hour bus ride would not be fun!! Take care and have a nice evening...Smiles, Carol
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Thanks, Carol. You too. Hugs.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Your story, along with the path of its mystery, is coming together. Elizabeth is in trouble, and now she knows it, and she has been informed, albeit in a post-mortem context, of the Cranston-Newton family, and Mary Hunter.
Minor grammatical suggestions:
It was harvest time before the barrels of Chardonnay would roll off the assembly line.
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It was harvest time, before the barrels of Chardonnay would roll off the assembly line.
My love is with you, and I'll be waiting at heaven's gates,
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My love is with you, and I'll be waiting at Heaven's gates, ("Heaven" is often capitalized, being a place)
as she screamed, "Jack, I need you."
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as she screamed, "Jack, I need you!"
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At first, when she passed out, I was afraid of foul play, but apparently she was just overcome by powerful emotions.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Your story, along with the path of its mystery, is coming together. Elizabeth is in trouble, and now she knows it, and she has been informed, albeit in a post-mortem context, of the Cranston-Newton family, and Mary Hunter.
Minor grammatical suggestions:
It was harvest time before the barrels of Chardonnay would roll off the assembly line.
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It was harvest time, before the barrels of Chardonnay would roll off the assembly line.
My love is with you, and I'll be waiting at heaven's gates,
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My love is with you, and I'll be waiting at Heaven's gates, ("Heaven" is often capitalized, being a place)
as she screamed, "Jack, I need you."
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as she screamed, "Jack, I need you!"
***
At first, when she passed out, I was afraid of foul play, but apparently she was just overcome by powerful emotions.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Yes, she was exhausted from the loss of her husband and all the investigations concerning the plane crash... and now the letter.
I was exhausted writing it. LOL
thanks for your help as always... smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from karenina
Oh my. Faith and Annie... Seems they are an integral plot of this intrigue. Something tells me it's not going to be so easy to connect the dots! I wonder what Jack really knew about them? Feels like more!--Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Oh my. Faith and Annie... Seems they are an integral plot of this intrigue. Something tells me it's not going to be so easy to connect the dots! I wonder what Jack really knew about them? Feels like more!--Karenina
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Aahh! Faith and Annie have a story to tell as do so many of the other characters... some don't even know it themselves. LOL
Glad you enjoyed the chapter, karenina.
Take care, Carol
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Love the wily twists and turns you come up with. It's like unwrapping a new gift every chapter!--Karenina
Comment from lyenochka
Oh yes! Hank is in this book! I hope you get his wife involved, too. I like the foreshadowing with the coldness and the eyes and insincerity of Miguel that gave Liz the gut-level reaction. I wonder how long she had passed out and if the office was safely locked.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Oh yes! Hank is in this book! I hope you get his wife involved, too. I like the foreshadowing with the coldness and the eyes and insincerity of Miguel that gave Liz the gut-level reaction. I wonder how long she had passed out and if the office was safely locked.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Of course, the office wasn't locked...she was too overwhelmed by the scent of Jack when she charged through the doors... but luckily no one else followed her.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
This is a very sinister chapter, and t seems that dark days are ahead. Your writing is gripping, and it is hard to wait for the next chapter. i didn't notice ant spelling or grammar errors, but then, I was absorbed in the story line, which was smoothly written. The characters seem real. Miguel's character will be further revealed as time goes on. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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This is a very sinister chapter, and t seems that dark days are ahead. Your writing is gripping, and it is hard to wait for the next chapter. i didn't notice ant spelling or grammar errors, but then, I was absorbed in the story line, which was smoothly written. The characters seem real. Miguel's character will be further revealed as time goes on. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Absorbed... that's my kind of talk, Wendy. Means you really were drawn into the story line and enjoyed it. Hurrah! Makes me happy!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
As Elizabeth familiarizes herself with the winery during her grieving, she meets the supervisor with whom she does not feel comfortable. She heads to Jack's office to see if there are any answers to some of her thoughts. The surprise here is a letter denoting the danger she is in as well as confirming what her friend had written, regarding his death. The revelation of Faith Cranston and her daughter is in the letter and instructions to contact Jack's PI, friend Hank Armato. She immediately phones him. This has caused her to be very seriously disturbed and more than a little frightened.
Ralf
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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As Elizabeth familiarizes herself with the winery during her grieving, she meets the supervisor with whom she does not feel comfortable. She heads to Jack's office to see if there are any answers to some of her thoughts. The surprise here is a letter denoting the danger she is in as well as confirming what her friend had written, regarding his death. The revelation of Faith Cranston and her daughter is in the letter and instructions to contact Jack's PI, friend Hank Armato. She immediately phones him. This has caused her to be very seriously disturbed and more than a little frightened.
Ralf
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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A busy bee you are today... Buzzed right through these chapters and hope you have found it entertaining and a story that will hold your attention throughout.
Smiles to you, Ralf Always, Carol
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It looks that way, Carol.
Comment from justafan
I was going to wait til Sunday to leave this but heck, I'll come back and leave the 6 then. This was an exciting chapter and I am so glad I went ahead and read it. You're such a gifted writer. Bravo my friend.
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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I was going to wait til Sunday to leave this but heck, I'll come back and leave the 6 then. This was an exciting chapter and I am so glad I went ahead and read it. You're such a gifted writer. Bravo my friend.
Always
Justafan of yours
Missy
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
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Bravo!
I am thrilled that you liked the story that much...When I start a new one, I always fear that the reader might not get it or enjoy it as much as the writer intends it to be. Your comments made my day!
Always, Carol
Comment from eliz100
I am glad to see there is another book coming. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture matches the story, of course. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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I am glad to see there is another book coming. I do not see any room for improvement. The picture matches the story, of course. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Hi there... thank you for the kind review. Just looked and Chapter 1 and 2 still have $$$$ on them and they give some much need information for later on in the story.... if you care to read them.
Smiles, Carol
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YES i WILL
