Light Through Window
4/7/5 Autumn Haiku32 total reviews
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A very pleasing nature poem. Also a celebration of serendipity. I have seen this, even with rainbows and written about it.
Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
  |
A very pleasing nature poem. Also a celebration of serendipity. I have seen this, even with rainbows and written about it.
Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from equestrik
I enjoyed this as the spiders around here can enjoy the same luxury as my cleaning is not so spiffy either. I think that the black and white format was well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
|
I enjoyed this as the spiders around here can enjoy the same luxury as my cleaning is not so spiffy either. I think that the black and white format was well done.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much for your review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from dragonpoet
I am glad you have a positivie view about having spiderwebs in your corners so you can see the beauty of the web in sunlight. Most would think negatively on this subject. Maybe looking for the spider that left the web or seeing their cleaning skills are lax.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
|
I am glad you have a positivie view about having spiderwebs in your corners so you can see the beauty of the web in sunlight. Most would think negatively on this subject. Maybe looking for the spider that left the web or seeing their cleaning skills are lax.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
-
Hello, Joan, the haiku is fictional, I'm a pretty good housekeeper LoL
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from robyn corum
M,
hahahahahaha! That spider picked the perfect home to live in. HAHA! But - oh, no. He should not move here. I hate spiders like I do flies. He would have to G. O. GOOOO!!!
I would like to make a couple of suggestions, if I may? You, of course, are welcome, as always, to ignore or dump them all. *smile*
light through window
shines on spider's diamond web --
lucky I don't clean
A couple of these lines sound a bit truncated and 'Tonto-ish'. I would like to suggest adding 'sun' to the opening line and, perhaps, 'he's' to the last one.
I'm still of the philosophy that the writer shouldn't often appear in the poems, so you could even disappear and just say, 'he's glad I don't clean' or something like that.
Just things to think about. None of them are big deals. Thanks a bunch. I got a giggle from this one.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
|
M,
hahahahahaha! That spider picked the perfect home to live in. HAHA! But - oh, no. He should not move here. I hate spiders like I do flies. He would have to G. O. GOOOO!!!
I would like to make a couple of suggestions, if I may? You, of course, are welcome, as always, to ignore or dump them all. *smile*
light through window
shines on spider's diamond web --
lucky I don't clean
A couple of these lines sound a bit truncated and 'Tonto-ish'. I would like to suggest adding 'sun' to the opening line and, perhaps, 'he's' to the last one.
I'm still of the philosophy that the writer shouldn't often appear in the poems, so you could even disappear and just say, 'he's glad I don't clean' or something like that.
Just things to think about. None of them are big deals. Thanks a bunch. I got a giggle from this one.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
-
Robyn, I like my haiku the way it is, it's getting excellent reviews... but thank you for the feedback. I will take a look, I may add sun to light. I remember Michael calling haiku tonto-ish LoL kind of offensive but all it's all good.
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy
-
Not Michael, it was my friend, Terri French, the editor of Frog Pond.
-
Yes but after you shared your friend review of our poems, Michael continued to use it in his notes, I know, I had to review them. Your friend was the first one ..though.
-
Ahhhhh... sorry about that.
-
No worries
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful images, quite stunning, and a very clever and humorous turn of phrase to conclude! I agree - just think what beauty would be missed! I am enjoying learning more about the Haiku format with its variations. Thanks for the notes.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
|
Beautiful images, quite stunning, and a very clever and humorous turn of phrase to conclude! I agree - just think what beauty would be missed! I am enjoying learning more about the Haiku format with its variations. Thanks for the notes.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much, Wendy, I appreciate your time and review. Have a great weekend my
Gypsy hugs
Comment from palmart
Great 4-7-5! Your explanation about Haiku help readers to praise better your writing, The artwork you decided to insert are very expressive and complements nicely your Haiku. You investigated interestingly the word "diamond" that enriches readers about it. Thank you!!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
|
Great 4-7-5! Your explanation about Haiku help readers to praise better your writing, The artwork you decided to insert are very expressive and complements nicely your Haiku. You investigated interestingly the word "diamond" that enriches readers about it. Thank you!!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
-
You are very welcome, Gypsy!!
Have a wonderful time!!
Comment from Gloria ....
Too funny, and I love it. So true that dew on a spider's web can indeed look like diamonds, and a glorious sight you would not be able to see if fastidious housekeeping were in order.
A fine job with this, and a pleasure to read and review today. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
 |
Too funny, and I love it. So true that dew on a spider's web can indeed look like diamonds, and a glorious sight you would not be able to see if fastidious housekeeping were in order.
A fine job with this, and a pleasure to read and review today. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much, Gloria, for taking the time to read and for the exceptional review. I appreciate the six stars and kind words!!
Gypsy
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent haiku poem.
Great subject. It seems the spiders where we are decided not to wait for the fall season. :))))
I love the satori line.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
|
Excellent haiku poem.
Great subject. It seems the spiders where we are decided not to wait for the fall season. :))))
I love the satori line.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate it.
Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, I loved this. Yes, because if you'd cleaned you would never had seen it and this love haiku would never have seen the light of the day.
I loved it. Thanks so much for sharing. Un abrazo, Ulla xx
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
|
Hahahaha, I loved this. Yes, because if you'd cleaned you would never had seen it and this love haiku would never have seen the light of the day.
I loved it. Thanks so much for sharing. Un abrazo, Ulla xx
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much, Ulla, for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate it.
Gypsy
Comment from Boogienights
Very lucky..just like me! I only clean once in a blue moon, so I have a lot of "artwork" to look at. I find spiders both fascinating and terrifying. A very nice Haiku, thank you for sharing.:)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
|
Very lucky..just like me! I only clean once in a blue moon, so I have a lot of "artwork" to look at. I find spiders both fascinating and terrifying. A very nice Haiku, thank you for sharing.:)
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
-
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate it.
Gypsy
