Twilight Comes
Twilight a most peaceful time.6 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have used several literary techniques. Your use of alliteration becomes onomatopoetic. The s's effect the quietude of the night, of the wind of the moment. It ends with personification. This will draw the reader in.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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You have used several literary techniques. Your use of alliteration becomes onomatopoetic. The s's effect the quietude of the night, of the wind of the moment. It ends with personification. This will draw the reader in.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2021
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Thank you much for your read and encouraging comments.
Comment from Karen Estep
I really enjoyed this piece as it flowed quite well, and the graphic certainly fit with what you wrote. Personally, I think it would have flowed better if at least two of the lines in each stanza rhymed. It was a little choppy. That being said, you have a wonderful way of telling a story. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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I really enjoyed this piece as it flowed quite well, and the graphic certainly fit with what you wrote. Personally, I think it would have flowed better if at least two of the lines in each stanza rhymed. It was a little choppy. That being said, you have a wonderful way of telling a story. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the feedback.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
This poem follows the contest requirements
It has a good theme which gives a romantic feeling
The art work is very attractive
Thank you for sharing
Best wishes for the contest
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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This poem follows the contest requirements
It has a good theme which gives a romantic feeling
The art work is very attractive
Thank you for sharing
Best wishes for the contest
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thanks for the feedback.
Comment from JennStar
Overall I find no fault with the poem but it fell a little flat for me. I think the simple images that the poem evokes are done so often that the poem isn't pulling me in or pushing emotions.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Overall I find no fault with the poem but it fell a little flat for me. I think the simple images that the poem evokes are done so often that the poem isn't pulling me in or pushing emotions.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thanks, I will have to work on being more creative.
Comment from Pantygynt
Urgent Warning! At the moment this will be disqualified from the contest because a minute poem has to be three stanzas long. Each stanza has twenty syllable and the syllables equate with seconds. 3x20=60 the number of seconds in a minute. Hence the name Minute Poem. This minute is only forty seconds long!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Urgent Warning! At the moment this will be disqualified from the contest because a minute poem has to be three stanzas long. Each stanza has twenty syllable and the syllables equate with seconds. 3x20=60 the number of seconds in a minute. Hence the name Minute Poem. This minute is only forty seconds long!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Please check: Directions say:
Minute Poem
For this contest, you are required to write a poem that has 8 syllables in the first line, then 4 syllables in the next three lines. This is one stanza. For this, you are also required to have two stanzas. In total, you should have 20 syllables in each stanza and 40 syllables in the poem.
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Directions are incorrect. A Minute poem has three stanzas as I stated. I suggest you contact the sponsor for the contest and point this out.
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See Shadow Poetry.
The Minute Poem is rhyming verse form consisting of 12 lines of 60 syllables written in strict iambic meter. The poem is formatted into 3 stanzas of 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4; 8,4,4,4 syllables. The rhyme scheme is as follows: aabb, ccdd, eeff
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The twilight is such a magical moment when either the dawn breaks or the sun fades, you captured the atmospherics here in your fine poem, much enjoyed, love Dollyx
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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The twilight is such a magical moment when either the dawn breaks or the sun fades, you captured the atmospherics here in your fine poem, much enjoyed, love Dollyx
Comment Written 13-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Dolly, for your read and review.
