"Cup of Smiles"
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "God Bless My Soul?"Poetry at his finest.
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Comment from AliMom
Your poem sounds like an earnest prayer. It is a wonderful thing to be able to express your feelings and hope in passionate words that reveal the anguish and desires of your heart. It's hopeful in spite of the tragedies and treachery of which it speaks. Your metaphors don't seem to flow ('I'm up for review but I always seem to get bad views' - good line; Perhaps if I can shake this disease, there will no longer be a rash' - disconnectd) Sometimes you seem more preoccupied with the rhyme scheme than the true expression of what you're trying to say. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the passion of what you're saying. Please keep writing. Please keep hoping.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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Your poem sounds like an earnest prayer. It is a wonderful thing to be able to express your feelings and hope in passionate words that reveal the anguish and desires of your heart. It's hopeful in spite of the tragedies and treachery of which it speaks. Your metaphors don't seem to flow ('I'm up for review but I always seem to get bad views' - good line; Perhaps if I can shake this disease, there will no longer be a rash' - disconnectd) Sometimes you seem more preoccupied with the rhyme scheme than the true expression of what you're trying to say. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the passion of what you're saying. Please keep writing. Please keep hoping.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
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A good writer can bring their reviewer right into their heart and soul.
While there they can feel the pain much better of course!
Thanks for your wonderful review!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Sarah Jolicoeur
Wow! The amount of pain that was expressed was intense! My physical being reacted to these words. In just a few words, a short span of time, I was given access to the major events in the world that took you to where you are now. The flow of words painted a picture for me, however, I was thrown off course and unsure that the intended purpose was for the line about bad reviews.
Thank you for sharing and I hope you have a great week!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Wow! The amount of pain that was expressed was intense! My physical being reacted to these words. In just a few words, a short span of time, I was given access to the major events in the world that took you to where you are now. The flow of words painted a picture for me, however, I was thrown off course and unsure that the intended purpose was for the line about bad reviews.
Thank you for sharing and I hope you have a great week!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your time and review Sarah.
Doctor Ricky 1024
