Moody Clouds
a tanka12 total reviews
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
What a great tanka!
I had to look up mensch. You might want to put a definition in your author's notes.
You final 2 7-syllable lines are exceptional ...
these downpourings remind men
they await their fate from the clouds.
Your transition line is very effective and provides smooth transition to the 2 other lines.
Best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
What a great tanka!
I had to look up mensch. You might want to put a definition in your author's notes.
You final 2 7-syllable lines are exceptional ...
these downpourings remind men
they await their fate from the clouds.
Your transition line is very effective and provides smooth transition to the 2 other lines.
Best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Katiemae
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Thank you, Katiemae
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great artwork and
nice presentation.
-Great title that
draws the reader in.
-You wrote a good tanka
with correct syllable count.
-Effective opening lines,
followed by a good pivot line.
-A good reminder in the closing lines.
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
-Great artwork and
nice presentation.
-Great title that
draws the reader in.
-You wrote a good tanka
with correct syllable count.
-Effective opening lines,
followed by a good pivot line.
-A good reminder in the closing lines.
-Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Pam
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Thank you, Pam