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In My Darkest Hour

A path is opened -

44 total reviews 
Comment from pharp
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Senyai,

Your faith shines through in this beautifully penned poem. Very few words say a lot. Congratulations on your first place win, well deserved.

Thanks for sharing; have a wonderful and blessed day.

Blessings...Portia

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
    Hi Portia,

    Thank you so much. Your sweet words are music to my ears, lol. I truly appreciate your thoughts and for sharing them with me ?.

    Your reviews mean so much, thank you again.

    Senyai
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2021
    Hi Portia,

    Thank you so much. Your sweet words are music to my ears, lol. I truly appreciate your thoughts and for sharing them with me ?.

    Your reviews mean so much, thank you again.

    Senyai
Comment from L. Kalere
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What a wonderfully uplifting poem, written so simply, yet elegant. The image is perfect...beautiful and calming. It's clear why you won the contest. Congratulations,
Linda

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
    Hi Linda,

    Thank you so much for your uplifting review and wonderful words that made my day actually!

    Have a great coming week :-)
    Senyai
Comment from nomi338
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The value of true faith is proven when given a chance to shine. I can say that I believe and have in this or that, but it is what I do under stress that I prove whether I have faith or I am simply fooling myself.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Nomi,

    Your wise words are truly appreciated! I couldn?t ask for a better review :-)
    Thank you.

    Have a great week,
    Senyai
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Nomi,

    Your wise words are truly appreciated! I couldn?t ask for a better review :-)
    Thank you.

    Have a great week,
    Senyai
Comment from DeboraDyess
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Hi ~
And if our faith doesn't prod us to action, what good is it, right? I love your simple 5-7-5 on your faith and its usefulness in times of trial.
Thank you for sharing,
Blessings,
Deb

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Deb,

    Thank you kindly for your super review and wise words.

    Have a great week!
    Senyai
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Deb,

    Thank you kindly for your super review and wise words.

    Have a great week!
    Senyai
Comment from Jill McCauslin
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I really like your poem using this 5-7-5 format. It works well. I'm not sure that Prodding needs to be capitalized but that might be your preference. The picture goes with this very well. I really like it. Congratulations on your awards!

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Jill,

    Thank you for a super review and helpful comments :-)

    Have a great week!
    Senyai
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Jill,

    Thank you for a super review and helpful comments :-)

    Have a great week!
    Senyai
Comment from Fred Berg
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Bot being a person of faith myself, I still thoroughly enjoyed the balance of the lines and the profound feelings being described. Sometimes I find this form of poem lacking something deeper, but you did a tremendous job packing every last word with depth. Very good!

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Fred,

    Thank you for such a lovely review and interesting comments! I appreciate your time to assess my work :-)

    Take care,
    Senyai
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Fred,

    Thank you for such a lovely review and interesting comments! I appreciate your time to assess my work :-)

    Take care,
    Senyai
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Very nice overall imagery in your verse and your accompanying artwork. One can feel why this is a FS favorite. Good luck in the voting.

IMHO you do not need to capitalize Faith or Prodding in your third line and/or consider putting a dash or squiggle after your middle line. You will add an extra oomph if you bold your text.

Mark

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Mark,

    Thanks for the suggestions ... I will consider. I appreciate your excellent review and thoughts, sir.

    Have a great week,
    Senyai
Comment from estory
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Nice job with the balance of this form, I liked the abrupt shock of the opening line especially. It kind of lacks the nature image and some colorful imagery in the language that haiku contains. The epiphany moment is there, the discovery of faith in an unexpected moment. You need to find an image, a poetic image, that captures that feeling. estory

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Estory,

    Thanks much for the suggestions. I will consider them. Also I appreciate your attention to detail on this. I was following my brief description of ... "a path is opened" with the photo of a path.

    Have a great week,
    Senyai
Comment from Gloria ....
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Congratulations on your most worthy win, Senyai. Yes, it is something quite precious when faith finds one in their darkest hour. The artwork you have selected is a perfect complement to illustrate visually the meaning of your words.

Congratulations again, and well, well done. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Gloria,

    Thank you, thank for a superb review and thoughts. It is always a treat when you review my work.

    Have a great week!
    Senyai
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hi Gloria,

    Thank you, thank for a superb review and thoughts. It is always a treat when you review my work.

    Have a great week!
    Senyai
Comment from kmoss
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I can see why this poem won the contest. It seems most find the faith while in their darkest hour, which leads to questions about why rock bottom? Why not before? Hmm.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
    Hi KMoss,
    Thank you for your kind words! Yes, it just works that way, as the children we are, it take us dragging and kicking to call out for help :-)

    I appreciate hearing from you.

    Have a great week,
    Senyai
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2021
    Hi KMoss,
    Thank you for your kind words! Yes, it just works that way, as the children we are, it take us dragging and kicking to call out for help :-)

    I appreciate hearing from you.

    Have a great week,
    Senyai