Comment from royowen

Exceptional

So our company carries on in this pretty dangerous environment they find themselves in, after disposing of the first wave of creatures invented by Michaels who knows what the may face shortly. Great descriptive episode Shana, I wonder what lies beyond the door. Great job, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021

Thanks so much, Roy :)
The Breedline crew are not expecting what lies ahead. The door has something utterly unnatural that may give them a run for their money. Stay tuned my friend.

Thanks again for your generous review and encouraging words. I appreciate it!

How is your publishing process coming along? I would love to know when you get everything completed so I can purchase your beautiful work.

Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 29-Jun-2021

I?ll get there eventually, because I?ve written so many, selection is hard, bless you girl.

Comment from AJ McCall

Exceptional

UGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! I wish your posts were LONGER Shana!! I see how you baited me by adding the last chapter to most of this post and then ending it so ABRUPTLY!

And now I have to wait until Monday to know what they'll find behind that rusted door. I love the way you described their surroundings: the rats, the darkness, etc. Also, Manuel is a scardy-cat, lol. This grown man afraid of rats? He just needs to leave, lol. The way you delved into the guilt Jena was feeling (about those things she killed - those kids) is key to this post. I absolutely loved your choice of words.
I spotted one typo: It seemed to easy - It seemed too easy. Way too easy.
But please post soon! I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS! SIX STARS!!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021

Thanks so much, AJ :)
Sorry it was short. I actually had to divide this chapter into 3 parts so it wouldn't be too long here. I know it ends with a huge cliff hanger. But you'll eventually find out what happens.
Thanks for the gracious stars and encouraging review. And also for pointing out the typo. I can't believe I overlooked that. You are a big help my friend.
Stay tuned and have a great week.
Hugs,
Shana :)

reply by AJ McCall on 28-Jun-2021

Hey, the same to you Shana!!! You're very welcome!! (And thank you. :)

Comment from Stephanie Ricketson

Excellent

Okay... I am completely hooked! I love shapeshifters, and your story checks all the boxes! A bit "trope", but that's the point, right? I also appreciate that you gave the additional information below, defining the unfamiliar terms and the individuals - great for me, since this is the first chapter I have read! You definitely have a new fan!

As far as typos go...

Frank shuttered as he stared - Should be "shuddered"

a mouth chalked full - I would suggest eliminating "chalked"

lower, Jem accompanied in behind, leaving - I would change to "Jem followed behind,"

And that's when she recognized - Eliminate "And"

This had been the place - This "was" the place...

It seemed to easy. - "too easy"

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021

Thanks so much, Stephanie :)
So thrilled you enjoyed the chapter, and thanks for the awesome review. I also appreciate your help. A second pair of eyes is so helpful.
Hope to hear from you again.

Sincerely,
Shana :)