To Carry
To find the truth we must journey into our hearts.25 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
to find the truth we must journey into our hearts.
To Carry
papa55mike What a beautiful poem and rhyming words along you wonderful story at the end. You left me saying, I will read more of your writings
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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to find the truth we must journey into our hearts.
To Carry
papa55mike What a beautiful poem and rhyming words along you wonderful story at the end. You left me saying, I will read more of your writings
Gert
Comment Written 29-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Hi, Gert. Thank you for your kind words. I just released another Haibun.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Versch
My eyes actually became moist after I read your post. It is so very touching, yet I can't describe in words how I feel. Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes!
Versch
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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My eyes actually became moist after I read your post. It is so very touching, yet I can't describe in words how I feel. Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes!
Versch
Comment Written 27-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for stopping by and sharing your kind words. Those six stars are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautiful poem like a parabole - I see their blank stares
burdens rend their hearts and souls
can I ease their pain?
- Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Beautiful poem like a parabole - I see their blank stares
burdens rend their hearts and souls
can I ease their pain?
- Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Thanks again, Iza!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Compelling and thought-provoking. Interesting tri-part form. Is this characteristic of haibun? Is the prose section part of the your work? Or is it a parable from the Bible? Or? Powerful piece regardless.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Compelling and thought-provoking. Interesting tri-part form. Is this characteristic of haibun? Is the prose section part of the your work? Or is it a parable from the Bible? Or? Powerful piece regardless.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hi, Elizabeth. I did write this in an old-style setting. What I've read about a Haibun this is close. I read an entry in the Haibun contest that was this style and loved it. I had to write one. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from amada
Oh, this is a haiburn! It is always a delight to read one of these special poems and prose, all of it very well combined in dialog. I think the dialog is a plus. There are beautiful nature descriptions that call to the senses. A pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Oh, this is a haiburn! It is always a delight to read one of these special poems and prose, all of it very well combined in dialog. I think the dialog is a plus. There are beautiful nature descriptions that call to the senses. A pleasure to read.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from June Sargent
This is a beautiful haibun that provides a lot of food for thought. Before we can walk in the shoes of another, we need to take off our own. We must be willing to step out of our comfort zone to feel another's burden. Then we can try to alleviate their pain and suffering - with deeper understanding. That is what Jesus did when he bore our sins and took them to the grave with him. Thank you for sharing this insightful and inspiring piece.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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This is a beautiful haibun that provides a lot of food for thought. Before we can walk in the shoes of another, we need to take off our own. We must be willing to step out of our comfort zone to feel another's burden. Then we can try to alleviate their pain and suffering - with deeper understanding. That is what Jesus did when he bore our sins and took them to the grave with him. Thank you for sharing this insightful and inspiring piece.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hi, June. Thank you for your kind words and shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated! This poem was fun to write.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Dear Papa,
I live the haiburn and have written some myself.
This is great as I've never seen a haiburn with dialogue in it.
I got a bug choked up in parts. You do an excellent job of bringing feelings to this poem.
Your summation haiku is very nice.
Never seen a biblical haiburn either.
Very uplifting read.
Take care,
Katiemae
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Dear Papa,
I live the haiburn and have written some myself.
This is great as I've never seen a haiburn with dialogue in it.
I got a bug choked up in parts. You do an excellent job of bringing feelings to this poem.
Your summation haiku is very nice.
Never seen a biblical haiburn either.
Very uplifting read.
Take care,
Katiemae
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hi, Katy Mae. Thank you for your kind words! I'll be by to read.
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from jake cosmos aller
Interesting take on the haibun poetry format. A bit long poem but that is fine as it works here. Your Christian faith shines through here. I can appreciate that although I am not a Christian, more of a Buddhist if anything at all.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Interesting take on the haibun poetry format. A bit long poem but that is fine as it works here. Your Christian faith shines through here. I can appreciate that although I am not a Christian, more of a Buddhist if anything at all.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hi, Jake. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
PAPASSMIKE:
You have written a beautiful Haibun. I keep saying I'm going to give it a try but haven't gotten around to it yet. You pose an awesome question. How often do any of us go the extra mile for anyone these days? Keep up the good work.
Rdfrdmom2
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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PAPASSMIKE:
You have written a beautiful Haibun. I keep saying I'm going to give it a try but haven't gotten around to it yet. You pose an awesome question. How often do any of us go the extra mile for anyone these days? Keep up the good work.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 02-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hello, my friend. Please try one, it was fun, but I love a challenge. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from nomi338
Man who is forced to labor complains about the burden he is forced to bear. That man gives little if any thought to the burden that Jesus bore, the full weight of the sin bequeathed to us through our fore father Adam. Jehovah God bore an even heavier burden, the knowledge that his son, his only begotten son would have to one day surrender his perfect human life for the sake of some who would not only deny him but ridicule his very mission to repurchase them from the hand of Satan the Devil.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Man who is forced to labor complains about the burden he is forced to bear. That man gives little if any thought to the burden that Jesus bore, the full weight of the sin bequeathed to us through our fore father Adam. Jehovah God bore an even heavier burden, the knowledge that his son, his only begotten son would have to one day surrender his perfect human life for the sake of some who would not only deny him but ridicule his very mission to repurchase them from the hand of Satan the Devil.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2021
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Hello, my friend. I am delighted that you read this poem. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
