Football - A Novel
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Comment from royowen
I wonder how potential relationships have been destroyed by circumstance, and how hurt pride has ruined what would otherwise be a potentially brilliant relationship, this is a great episode, and a tribute to constant faithfulness and trust, well done Barbara, great episode, blessings Roy
Typo : Maybe when our (seasons end) season ends?
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I wonder how potential relationships have been destroyed by circumstance, and how hurt pride has ruined what would otherwise be a potentially brilliant relationship, this is a great episode, and a tribute to constant faithfulness and trust, well done Barbara, great episode, blessings Roy
Typo : Maybe when our (seasons end) season ends?
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I am wondering about that because I am talking about 2 different seasons. I think I need to research that one. Thank you for the help.
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Well done
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
There is always a tart about, isn't there? That Grace doesn't know that decent men don't want what they shamelessly offer every man. Katherine is perfect for Gab and they both know they love each other, regardless of not saying anything yet. With Katherines children around, she is not going to do anything that might upset them. This is a great chapter, Barbara, and I really enjoyed it. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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There is always a tart about, isn't there? That Grace doesn't know that decent men don't want what they shamelessly offer every man. Katherine is perfect for Gab and they both know they love each other, regardless of not saying anything yet. With Katherines children around, she is not going to do anything that might upset them. This is a great chapter, Barbara, and I really enjoyed it. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Nice chapter. I really liked the way Coach took a page from writers and chose to show, not tell. hehehe As always, that is much more effective.
Notes:
1.) "I'll make sure the judges are honest.(")
2.) and wiped his mouth. "What (are) you doing?"
I didn't understand why you added the note at the top about the teacher. Though it surprised me, I didn't understand why you put it with this. Note number two made me think you've evidently been getting some push to get these two moving closer quicker. hahaha That's the way of the world, I guess. I like your way better!
Thanks!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Barb,
Nice chapter. I really liked the way Coach took a page from writers and chose to show, not tell. hehehe As always, that is much more effective.
Notes:
1.) "I'll make sure the judges are honest.(")
2.) and wiped his mouth. "What (are) you doing?"
I didn't understand why you added the note at the top about the teacher. Though it surprised me, I didn't understand why you put it with this. Note number two made me think you've evidently been getting some push to get these two moving closer quicker. hahaha That's the way of the world, I guess. I like your way better!
Thanks!
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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The first is for the same reason. I am being questioned about the morality clause some teachers have. There's a reason I put them there. You have not questioned either, but some have. Thank you for the kind review. I have even got comments like, "Well in the perfect little world you have set up...."
Comment from Begin Again
It seems as if we don't live in a totally free country anymore...there are so many rules regarding your own home and your own life... it should not be anyone's concern as long as you aren't breaking a law or harming anyone. As for Gabriel and Katherine... why do people think the story has to be about sex... first of all, she has young children... I never even brought a guy to the house when my children were there umpteen years ago. And as for Grace... she can just move on down the line. I think Katherine will come to terms sooner than later...or at least I hope so. Love the story... You write it as you see it and not anyone else.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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It seems as if we don't live in a totally free country anymore...there are so many rules regarding your own home and your own life... it should not be anyone's concern as long as you aren't breaking a law or harming anyone. As for Gabriel and Katherine... why do people think the story has to be about sex... first of all, she has young children... I never even brought a guy to the house when my children were there umpteen years ago. And as for Grace... she can just move on down the line. I think Katherine will come to terms sooner than later...or at least I hope so. Love the story... You write it as you see it and not anyone else.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I will stick to my standards. I always do. I have to do me. Thank you for understanding.
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I do understand! And I am proud of you! Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Great, chapter, Barbara. Just what he needs to be kept in his place. And it seems to work. Well, too bad if some thinks the should already be sleeping together. We're all different and deal with it our own way. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Great, chapter, Barbara. Just what he needs to be kept in his place. And it seems to work. Well, too bad if some thinks the should already be sleeping together. We're all different and deal with it our own way. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Thank you for understanding and the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I appreciated what you said at the beginning and I appreciate you keeping your stoires clean. I hope people aren't upset because you haven't got them in bed yet. Apparently Grace is ready to get in bed with him. He put her in her place. I am enjoying the story. What he told Katherine should be enough to ease her mind.
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I appreciated what you said at the beginning and I appreciate you keeping your stoires clean. I hope people aren't upset because you haven't got them in bed yet. Apparently Grace is ready to get in bed with him. He put her in her place. I am enjoying the story. What he told Katherine should be enough to ease her mind.
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Yes, I have taken hits because I haven't had them jump into bed. You know what, I won't either. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I like the bit of tension that you created between Katherine and Gabriel. It has also forced them to acknowledge their feelings for each other. Well done.
A few little spags: "Gabriel grinned as he watched Katherine wave(d) her arms.."
"Katherine jogged in place at the entrance(d) of the track..."
"I'm sure you'll receive plenty(of) benefits."
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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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I like the bit of tension that you created between Katherine and Gabriel. It has also forced them to acknowledge their feelings for each other. Well done.
A few little spags: "Gabriel grinned as he watched Katherine wave(d) her arms.."
"Katherine jogged in place at the entrance(d) of the track..."
"I'm sure you'll receive plenty(of) benefits."
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Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the help. I have made the corrections.
Comment from judiverse
Just what Gabriel needs--for a former girlfriend to come waltzing in and start making demands. I don't think Katherine will worry about her for very long, though. She'll come to understand that Gabe was having no part of Grace. It seems that Rhonda had her big day won by Kenny shouting obscenities at her. I thought school officials were support incidents of assault to the authorities. He is still a problem because of the plan to put him on the football team instead. I suppose it depends on where you live, but the scrutiny given to teachers is probably greater in some places than others. I'd say people, including teachers, have a right to do as they please in their own homes as long as they aren't disturbing the peace. Great chapter. judi
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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Just what Gabriel needs--for a former girlfriend to come waltzing in and start making demands. I don't think Katherine will worry about her for very long, though. She'll come to understand that Gabe was having no part of Grace. It seems that Rhonda had her big day won by Kenny shouting obscenities at her. I thought school officials were support incidents of assault to the authorities. He is still a problem because of the plan to put him on the football team instead. I suppose it depends on where you live, but the scrutiny given to teachers is probably greater in some places than others. I'd say people, including teachers, have a right to do as they please in their own homes as long as they aren't disturbing the peace. Great chapter. judi
Comment Written 20-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2021
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One would think so, but not true everywhere. Thank you for the kind review.
