THE CURSE
Viewing comments for Chapter 69 "Safe and Sound/Part 3"The six book of the Novels of the Breedline
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Comment from AJ McCall
THIS IS AWESOMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
The way you described each of them transforming -, their muscles extending and elongated and the way you did it without repeating yourself -- this is the best I've ever read. (I'm taking notes.) Although I think it's a lot better for them to just rip through their clothes instead of taking them off. (Just my opinion.) But man, do I love giant werewolves fighting for the good side. And Frank and Manual? This is just normal business, right? But it is kinda of weird that these creatures seem to MAKE Jena and Drakon and Tim change. Very strange. But I can't wait to see what happens NEXT!!! I just love the whole plot and story.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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THIS IS AWESOMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
The way you described each of them transforming -, their muscles extending and elongated and the way you did it without repeating yourself -- this is the best I've ever read. (I'm taking notes.) Although I think it's a lot better for them to just rip through their clothes instead of taking them off. (Just my opinion.) But man, do I love giant werewolves fighting for the good side. And Frank and Manual? This is just normal business, right? But it is kinda of weird that these creatures seem to MAKE Jena and Drakon and Tim change. Very strange. But I can't wait to see what happens NEXT!!! I just love the whole plot and story.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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Aww... thanks AJ :)
I'm so happy you enjoyed this. Having so many of them shifting wasn't the easiest to come up with. LOL! And each one shifts into something different. I actually split most of my chapters up so they won't be so long here. The rest of this will be on next weeks post.
Yes, Detectives Manuel and Frank know all about the Breedline. They work with them to help crime.
Although I've had the worst case of writers block, it's still fun to write about all of them.
Thanks again for the positive review and the generous stars.
Hugs,
Shana :)
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You're very welcome!!! And aww, next week? Guess I'll have to wait, LOL.
Comment from Eunice Amero
wow very good story. I'm not sure if I could write as well as that. You did
a very good job. You have a great imagination. Keep up the good work. I'm glad I'm not with them. It's very scary. You held my attention. Good work
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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wow very good story. I'm not sure if I could write as well as that. You did
a very good job. You have a great imagination. Keep up the good work. I'm glad I'm not with them. It's very scary. You held my attention. Good work
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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Thanks! I appreciate it.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
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you are so welcome
Comment from royowen
Using your great powers of descriptive talents, although the covenant have decided not to shift, Jena has a overpowering desire to shift, and discovers its motivated from a voice within urging her to destroy this resident evil coming upon them. Great effort dear Shana, nobody writes the scenes better than you, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Using your great powers of descriptive talents, although the covenant have decided not to shift, Jena has a overpowering desire to shift, and discovers its motivated from a voice within urging her to destroy this resident evil coming upon them. Great effort dear Shana, nobody writes the scenes better than you, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you dear friend :)
I appreciate all your support and encouragement. I always look forward to hearing your positive words. I'm not sure how long I will continue to post here, but you make it all worthwhile.
Thanks my friend.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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I hope you don?t leave Shana
Comment from CP!
This chapter in a book is very good. It was a good and interesting read. I liked how you limited the word, "said," in your chapter. However, you did say what was happening a lot instead of showing it. You might want to delete, "Tim's transformation came next," and start the next line with, "Tim could suddenly feel the change rising fast too..."
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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This chapter in a book is very good. It was a good and interesting read. I liked how you limited the word, "said," in your chapter. However, you did say what was happening a lot instead of showing it. You might want to delete, "Tim's transformation came next," and start the next line with, "Tim could suddenly feel the change rising fast too..."
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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Thanks! I appreciate it!
Sincerely,
Shana:)
