The Fae Nation
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "The Lamb is Raided"Still just a germ of an idea that the moment
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Comment from robyn corum
Bob,
Oh, my stars! I am arriving late. I happen to do that a lot around here because I have stupidly and foolishly fanned far too many people. --sigh-- But never fear I am following this story. This story that I pretty much demanded and still demand you FINISH. I am still CHALLENGING you to that. It's actually a double-dog dare, really. So, there.
But - my, darling. THIS is why!!!!! I loved, loved, loved this chapter. It is the pinnacle of why I adore your writing. From the second line - 'He had the look of someone who was so ahead of the trending curve he was virtually behind it again' I was smiling.
The verbal barrage and sparring had me giggling and even guffawing. Out loud. I'm so glad no one is here. They would have finally, once and for all, sent me on away. ha
I loved it. And now, I am on to the next. Be forewarned - from now on I shall not give every chapter a six regardless if they all deserve it. I will have to save a few. Onward!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Bob,
Oh, my stars! I am arriving late. I happen to do that a lot around here because I have stupidly and foolishly fanned far too many people. --sigh-- But never fear I am following this story. This story that I pretty much demanded and still demand you FINISH. I am still CHALLENGING you to that. It's actually a double-dog dare, really. So, there.
But - my, darling. THIS is why!!!!! I loved, loved, loved this chapter. It is the pinnacle of why I adore your writing. From the second line - 'He had the look of someone who was so ahead of the trending curve he was virtually behind it again' I was smiling.
The verbal barrage and sparring had me giggling and even guffawing. Out loud. I'm so glad no one is here. They would have finally, once and for all, sent me on away. ha
I loved it. And now, I am on to the next. Be forewarned - from now on I shall not give every chapter a six regardless if they all deserve it. I will have to save a few. Onward!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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OMG a six from my harshest critic? I'm flattered. Thank you
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hahaha AND biggest fan.
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I am genuinely flattered that you're a fan, and I always look forward to your reviews, but I look forward to your considered criticism more.
Comment from Adri7enne
Stirring up my imagined sense of justice and dignity! Lol! That's what it is about your writing. You stir emotions very well.
From the 'Background. "Bob RUNDS a pub there...." Typo.
"Talking of bad for business," muttered DAPHNE." Do you have Dawn and Daphne?
I never know at what point I should put the stuff from the box in the review. That's what happens when that stuff never becomes a second language. Yes, your story is starting to prod my sense of justice. What the hell! You can't treat people like that! Even if they are invented and hardly human... Good writing.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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Stirring up my imagined sense of justice and dignity! Lol! That's what it is about your writing. You stir emotions very well.
From the 'Background. "Bob RUNDS a pub there...." Typo.
"Talking of bad for business," muttered DAPHNE." Do you have Dawn and Daphne?
I never know at what point I should put the stuff from the box in the review. That's what happens when that stuff never becomes a second language. Yes, your story is starting to prod my sense of justice. What the hell! You can't treat people like that! Even if they are invented and hardly human... Good writing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2021
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Oops. Don't know where Daphne came from. I always had a thing for Velma. Sorry for prodding you without asking first.
Thanks for sticking with it
Comment from Leann DS
This is a good chapter, with great descriptions and very effective dialogue, as usual. :-) Well done. The ending is good, as it leads unanswered questions that the reader will want to find out in the following chapters. Have a great weekend and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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This is a good chapter, with great descriptions and very effective dialogue, as usual. :-) Well done. The ending is good, as it leads unanswered questions that the reader will want to find out in the following chapters. Have a great weekend and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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You're very kind, thank you
Comment from tfawcus
Your caricatures of the bully boys from the Ministry are chillingly real and I love the way in which Bob handles them - a delicate balancing act, stalling them until the cavalry arrives. The scotch egg was a nice touch of humour. You widen the scope with 'that had always been the way, whether it was kosher, halal or Fae you were after'. Discrimination applies to all minority groups in a police state.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Your caricatures of the bully boys from the Ministry are chillingly real and I love the way in which Bob handles them - a delicate balancing act, stalling them until the cavalry arrives. The scotch egg was a nice touch of humour. You widen the scope with 'that had always been the way, whether it was kosher, halal or Fae you were after'. Discrimination applies to all minority groups in a police state.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2021
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Sadly, not just a police state. That area of London has always been a ghetto, just the ethnicity changes.
Thanks for your review, and I'm chuffed you found no spag
