Comment from writer723

Excellent

This story is very interesting. It has a sad, yet sweet twist. The ghosts are the former owners of the house, who are witnessing the agent's attempts to sell it. I could sense the despair in the couple's voices. And there was a certain desperation in their wanting to be together for as long as possible. You set a very poignant scene and painted a sentimental picture. Nice job!

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021

Thanks for the insightful review, cheers, j

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

What a twist! Wasn't expecting that. Did you see the movie Beetlejuice--the theme was similar--the newleyweds were killed when the bridge collapsed and didn't realize they'd died. Fine work in a flash.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Daaayo. haha, I wasn't sure how to end it and yeah I did think of beetlejuice ..(save that one for later)
Thanks for the review, cheers, j

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 05-Jun-2021

That daaayo scene was priceless!

Comment from Sharon Davis

Excellent

Well done.

This flash fiction is a creative and well composed story.

The haunted Beach house theme has been well articulated and the ending of the piece adds the additional element of humor.

Great job.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021

Thanks for the encouraging review Sharon, it was a fun write, cheers,j