Lost In the Swing
50 word flash fiction25 total reviews
Comment from Anne Johnston
That is a sweet story, your memory of your childhood, mingling with the new memories you are making with your granddaughter. Very well written. Hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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That is a sweet story, your memory of your childhood, mingling with the new memories you are making with your granddaughter. Very well written. Hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Hugs.
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You are welcome
Comment from jenintorre
This is such a beautiful nostalgic 50 word flash fiction. I really enjoyed reading it and think it will do really well in the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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This is such a beautiful nostalgic 50 word flash fiction. I really enjoyed reading it and think it will do really well in the competition. Good luck and best wishes. Jen
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed it. Hugs.
Comment from tfawcus
How well you have used this intergenerational scene to bring back memories of your own childhood days. You have managed to tell a complete story with these few words - a rare occurrence and one taking skill.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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How well you have used this intergenerational scene to bring back memories of your own childhood days. You have managed to tell a complete story with these few words - a rare occurrence and one taking skill.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your complementary and kind review. It is appreciated.
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Thank you so much for your complementary and kind review. It is appreciated.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Took me a second read--then I got it--the grandmother had swung on that same tire as a child--brilliant twist--this is a fine entry for the flash contest!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Took me a second read--then I got it--the grandmother had swung on that same tire as a child--brilliant twist--this is a fine entry for the flash contest!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you. I was hoping my transition would have been effective. Fingers crossed. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
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Thank you. I was hoping my transition would have been effective. Fingers crossed. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review.
Comment from LisaMay
What a lovely story - I predict a win for you. You've captured so well the feeling of being on the tire swing, and then to discover it is grandma enjoying the pleasure is a nice little twist.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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What a lovely story - I predict a win for you. You've captured so well the feeling of being on the tire swing, and then to discover it is grandma enjoying the pleasure is a nice little twist.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review. I appreciate it.
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Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork to
go with your story.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the scene on the swing.
-It sounds like a pleasant day,
and a very enjoyable experience.
-I like the transition from your
experience to the different one at the end.
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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-Good artwork to
go with your story.
-You paint a vivid word
picture of the scene on the swing.
-It sounds like a pleasant day,
and a very enjoyable experience.
-I like the transition from your
experience to the different one at the end.
-Well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful and kind comments and review. Hugs.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from Alaskastory
"Lost In the Swing" done in so few words offers a really fun read and even more enjoyable than a poem. I like the surprise in the ending where we learn and see Grandma instead of a little kid in the tire. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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"Lost In the Swing" done in so few words offers a really fun read and even more enjoyable than a poem. I like the surprise in the ending where we learn and see Grandma instead of a little kid in the tire. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Hugs.
Comment from Begin Again
I have many memories of swinging in a tire swing by the river bank... a great childhood memory. Thanks for writing a story so it brought a smile to my face. Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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I have many memories of swinging in a tire swing by the river bank... a great childhood memory. Thanks for writing a story so it brought a smile to my face. Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Carol. I appreciate your thoughtful review and comments. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment from lancellot
Very nice. I think you have written a very sweet generational story with only fifty words. I haven't read all the entries but I'm willing to bet that this one will be at or near the top when the voting is over. Great work.
I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Very nice. I think you have written a very sweet generational story with only fifty words. I haven't read all the entries but I'm willing to bet that this one will be at or near the top when the voting is over. Great work.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your complementary comments and review. They are appreciated.
Comment from Sharon Davis
A lovely little story centered around the joy created by a tire swing...the joy of riding the swing oneself, and seeing the joy the same swing brings to others.
Well composed and presented.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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A lovely little story centered around the joy created by a tire swing...the joy of riding the swing oneself, and seeing the joy the same swing brings to others.
Well composed and presented.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you for your supportive and encouraging review. It is much appreciated. Hugs.
