THE CURSE
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "Safe and Sound/Part 2"The six book of the Novels of the Breedline
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Comment from AJ McCall
Experimenting on his children???!! That IS insane! Who would reveal the Covenant to the world??! If the government know about them, they'd use them for ALL kinds of stuff. Also, I loved how you added that part where the detective told them, they were created by God to make a difference. Isn't everyone? Ugh, I hate how I have to wait in order to see what happens... please post soon!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021
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Experimenting on his children???!! That IS insane! Who would reveal the Covenant to the world??! If the government know about them, they'd use them for ALL kinds of stuff. Also, I loved how you added that part where the detective told them, they were created by God to make a difference. Isn't everyone? Ugh, I hate how I have to wait in order to see what happens... please post soon!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021
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Thank you, AJ :)
Dr. Michaels needs to be put down along with the company he works for. Hopefully the Breedline can do the job.
Glad you mentioned the part about the detective. I wanted to add that scene so readers understand why I created the Breedline. And yes, I truly believe God created everyone for a special purpose. We are all unique in His eyes.
I created my fictional Breedline species for only good. They are protectors against the dark side.
Thanks for all your positive words. You made my day!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
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Aww, You're welcome, Shana!!! And yes, I agree, God has created all of us in HIS image but we all are unique in our own way!
Comment from royowen
Of course, why didn't I think of that? Yes, the police force, comprising human beings, couldn't possibly handle those creatures by themselves, they'd be bithchered. But the covenant could. So now they are hatching a plan to subdue and put out of business, Dr. Michaels and his hideous experiments. Beautifully written dear Shana, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021
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Of course, why didn't I think of that? Yes, the police force, comprising human beings, couldn't possibly handle those creatures by themselves, they'd be bithchered. But the covenant could. So now they are hatching a plan to subdue and put out of business, Dr. Michaels and his hideous experiments. Beautifully written dear Shana, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021
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Thanks Roy :)
There's always some kind of plan hatching when it comes to the Breedline and saving innocent lives.
Thanks for all your support! In today's times, it helps so much to hear positive words.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Bless you girl
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Safe and Sound/Part 2
scongrove,
what I like is how you gave an excellent description to each of your chacters in your book.
For now it looks like when Tim said" Okay everyone,"I am taking charge of the room. "Let's use our brains first, then our fists. Time is getting away from us.
And we've got to come up with a strategy.
So here I am waiting for the strategy of Tim has planed
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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Hello Safe and Sound/Part 2
scongrove,
what I like is how you gave an excellent description to each of your chacters in your book.
For now it looks like when Tim said" Okay everyone,"I am taking charge of the room. "Let's use our brains first, then our fists. Time is getting away from us.
And we've got to come up with a strategy.
So here I am waiting for the strategy of Tim has planed
Comment Written 01-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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Thanks Gert :)
Good to hear from you. Glad you enjoyed. My Breedline characters are plotting a plan to shut down A&E. All I can say is, it's going to be bloody.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
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You are welcome scongrove
Gert
Comment from amahra
So glad I got in on this story from chapter one even though it's part two. Will try to get back to part one. This is right down my alley; I love werewolf stories. They are my favorite supernatural creatures other than witches. Just had my own werewolf book narrated, but my covenant is among the witches. Anyway, I love this chapter and read your author notes about the Breeding Queen per 100 yrs. --Tessa, Breedline Bonding...the males, and Breedline Covenant. etc.. I love the name Adam and Eve Pharmaceuticals. Did you make that up...cool. Hope when they bust in to make the arrests, the sister is freed. Just one little thing to consider, below. My editor hipped me on to this.
It's ok to use different tag lines like the ones you used below"
"Are you proposing we handle this ordeal ourselves?" Manuel [queried].
"I don't see the problem," Drakon [commented.]
But these tags, especially close together can slow down the dialogue and bring too much attention to them by the reader. The reader is so used to the tag "said" that the word becomes invisible and doesn't distract from the ongoing dialogue. Again, it's ok to use different tag lines interchangeably, but not too often and not together. Great chapter!
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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So glad I got in on this story from chapter one even though it's part two. Will try to get back to part one. This is right down my alley; I love werewolf stories. They are my favorite supernatural creatures other than witches. Just had my own werewolf book narrated, but my covenant is among the witches. Anyway, I love this chapter and read your author notes about the Breeding Queen per 100 yrs. --Tessa, Breedline Bonding...the males, and Breedline Covenant. etc.. I love the name Adam and Eve Pharmaceuticals. Did you make that up...cool. Hope when they bust in to make the arrests, the sister is freed. Just one little thing to consider, below. My editor hipped me on to this.
It's ok to use different tag lines like the ones you used below"
"Are you proposing we handle this ordeal ourselves?" Manuel [queried].
"I don't see the problem," Drakon [commented.]
But these tags, especially close together can slow down the dialogue and bring too much attention to them by the reader. The reader is so used to the tag "said" that the word becomes invisible and doesn't distract from the ongoing dialogue. Again, it's ok to use different tag lines interchangeably, but not too often and not together. Great chapter!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2021
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Thanks so much, amahra :)
Glad you love the werewolf legends as well. I do like the witches too. I do have a few Wiccas in my storyline. They are fun to create.
Yes, I did come up with Adam and Eve. I don't know where that came from. It just popped up from something I heard somewhere. LOL!
Thanks for the helpful tip. I'm sure my editor will catch that. You saved me before it got to him. Less corrections I have to make, so thanks a lot. :)
BTW, what is your book called? Is it out for sale? Let me know because I will purchase it. I love to collect good werewolf, vampire stories.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
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Dark Covenant2: Dawn of a Werewolf. Amazon.com
Oh, dumb me. lol I mistaken June 1 with chapter one. Darn!
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Great! I will check it out!
