Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Football Chapter 19 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Begin Again
Hurrah, Barbara... I believe they are ready to admit they are in a relationship... hush don't use the word love though.... What a struggle to get these two together. Could you refresh my memory about why the PI is always following them?
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Hurrah, Barbara... I believe they are ready to admit they are in a relationship... hush don't use the word love though.... What a struggle to get these two together. Could you refresh my memory about why the PI is always following them?
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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To prove Katherine's a slut, but a whole new reason will be coming forward. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
A great chapter once again. Good to see Gabriel and Katherine getting closer. Not a spag anywhere. Another great read. Keep it coming I am enjoying this.
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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A great chapter once again. Good to see Gabriel and Katherine getting closer. Not a spag anywhere. Another great read. Keep it coming I am enjoying this.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 31-May-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tfawcus
Congratulations on your retirement, Barbara. Stand by to discover what a truly fulfilling time it can be!
Loved the contrast in this chapter between the hesitantly developing love affair and the ebullient rivalry of the teams in the second half.
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Congratulations on your retirement, Barbara. Stand by to discover what a truly fulfilling time it can be!
Loved the contrast in this chapter between the hesitantly developing love affair and the ebullient rivalry of the teams in the second half.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Thank you for the generous support.
Comment from royowen
So finally Gabriel has admitted he's in love with Katherine, maybe not to her, but to Reggie at least. They are are gong to take it slow, maybe because of the PI. Frost must be disparate. The boys challenge the girls to a race, that will vie certainly interesting. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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So finally Gabriel has admitted he's in love with Katherine, maybe not to her, but to Reggie at least. They are are gong to take it slow, maybe because of the PI. Frost must be disparate. The boys challenge the girls to a race, that will vie certainly interesting. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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Most welcome
Comment from Gert sherwood
Football Chapter 19 part 1
Barb. I like how you have a two parts in this chapter that I believe draw readers to continue and find out of how the challenge goes (running) will go.
How clever you are to take time start a ( real) romance between Gabriel and Katherine.
Gert
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Football Chapter 19 part 1
Barb. I like how you have a two parts in this chapter that I believe draw readers to continue and find out of how the challenge goes (running) will go.
How clever you are to take time start a ( real) romance between Gabriel and Katherine.
Gert
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
I love how realistic and believable your dialogue and situations are. I feel like I am actually viewing and listening to a movie or TV show unfold right before my eyes, and I absolutely love it. You are doing a great job here.
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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I love how realistic and believable your dialogue and situations are. I feel like I am actually viewing and listening to a movie or TV show unfold right before my eyes, and I absolutely love it. You are doing a great job here.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Ben Colder
Look as if you are bringing this romance to the front burner. When reading the part about the girls' ball games, I had to ask about the Emily Wilkie's who plays for the Florida Gators. Pretty girl and a great ballplayer.
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Look as if you are bringing this romance to the front burner. When reading the part about the girls' ball games, I had to ask about the Emily Wilkie's who plays for the Florida Gators. Pretty girl and a great ballplayer.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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There are some great female athletes. They just don't get the recognition the boys athletes do. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
I love the running competition being set up between the girls and the male jocks. That should be interesting! It's also good that both Katherine and Gabriel have admitted their mutual attraction. Well written.
One grammatical issue in this sentence: "We've only ran(run) that hill four times and your team has ran(run) it for what, years?" - I know it seems strange, but when preceded by the past tense (have), the verb run remains in the present tense.
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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I love the running competition being set up between the girls and the male jocks. That should be interesting! It's also good that both Katherine and Gabriel have admitted their mutual attraction. Well written.
One grammatical issue in this sentence: "We've only ran(run) that hill four times and your team has ran(run) it for what, years?" - I know it seems strange, but when preceded by the past tense (have), the verb run remains in the present tense.
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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I made the changes. You're correct, I just forgot. LOL I appreciate the help.
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No problem.:)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Yes! Now the girls must win, and I have no doubt they will. Us females will not be put off a good challange, and one against the boys will definitely be one to win! I knew Gabriel was falling in love, and so is Kathering, you can tell that a mile off. That camera man needs a punch in the nose!! Well done, another great chapter. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Yes! Now the girls must win, and I have no doubt they will. Us females will not be put off a good challange, and one against the boys will definitely be one to win! I knew Gabriel was falling in love, and so is Kathering, you can tell that a mile off. That camera man needs a punch in the nose!! Well done, another great chapter. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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He will get his punch in the nose. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara. This is another great chapter and Gabriel's feelings come through loud and clear. I only found one thing:
I already have it figure out =figured out
All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Hi Barbara. This is another great chapter and Gabriel's feelings come through loud and clear. I only found one thing:
I already have it figure out =figured out
All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-May-2021
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I have made the correction.
