The Perfect Date
A Romantic Interlude34 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
In your poem this is a way of life. You just sit under the sun while enjoying the day. I like your poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest!
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In your poem this is a way of life. You just sit under the sun while enjoying the day. I like your poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment from Susan Larson
Oh, how artfully you slipped in the word Southern before Comfort. This could be about my dating days long ago, growing up on Lake Erie where the beach was far more preferable than a movie or a play.
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Oh, how artfully you slipped in the word Southern before Comfort. This could be about my dating days long ago, growing up on Lake Erie where the beach was far more preferable than a movie or a play.
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Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Branda, this is really very good. You have used the necessary words well without making the content of the verse sound contrived. Perhaps some punctuation would improve an otherwise great entry. eg -
Tea, sandwiches and Southern Comfort by the Water, while watching the Waves crash to the shore. The Sun sets and a gentle Breeze blows; Yeah!
Good Luck in the contest - warm regards Dorothy x
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Hello Branda, this is really very good. You have used the necessary words well without making the content of the verse sound contrived. Perhaps some punctuation would improve an otherwise great entry. eg -
Tea, sandwiches and Southern Comfort by the Water, while watching the Waves crash to the shore. The Sun sets and a gentle Breeze blows; Yeah!
Good Luck in the contest - warm regards Dorothy x
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Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written romance poem making good use of the required words. Very well done. Such a beautiful photo to compliment your words as well.
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This is a beautifully written romance poem making good use of the required words. Very well done. Such a beautiful photo to compliment your words as well.
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Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
You have painted romantic, jolly-good imagery with a few words. Well done. I love the accompanying picture is in sync with your poem. Good luck in the contest!
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You have painted romantic, jolly-good imagery with a few words. Well done. I love the accompanying picture is in sync with your poem. Good luck in the contest!
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your ultra-concise poem is vividly descriptive of a heavenly scene that makes me smile, say "ahhh," and want to be there drinking in the surroundings.
reply by the author on 30-May-2021
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Your ultra-concise poem is vividly descriptive of a heavenly scene that makes me smile, say "ahhh," and want to be there drinking in the surroundings.
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Comment from Alaskastory
"The Perfect Date" is delightfully romantic in the most scenic way possible. In such a short way, it is amusing that all six words could so poetically portray a true view of the sea. Well done.
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"The Perfect Date" is delightfully romantic in the most scenic way possible. In such a short way, it is amusing that all six words could so poetically portray a true view of the sea. Well done.
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Comment from LJbutterfly
The amazing thing is that you managed to use all six works in one remarkable sentence. I would have loved to go on the date you described. It sounds quite lovely. I especially liked "the sun sets and a gentle breeze blows. Great work.
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The amazing thing is that you managed to use all six works in one remarkable sentence. I would have loved to go on the date you described. It sounds quite lovely. I especially liked "the sun sets and a gentle breeze blows. Great work.
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Perfect! You used the words and described Heaven. What a lovely free verse poem, it said everything you wanted in so few words. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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Perfect! You used the words and described Heaven. What a lovely free verse poem, it said everything you wanted in so few words. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment from Aiste Radvilaviciute
You managed to put all key words into one sentence and you wrote exactly how I would describe the perfect date. And the final Yeah was great :) I give you 5*
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You managed to put all key words into one sentence and you wrote exactly how I would describe the perfect date. And the final Yeah was great :) I give you 5*
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