Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

This is a great entry for the cumulative Tale Contest. You have written a very interesting story that is easy and fun to read. I hope you do well in the contest.

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 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thank you for your nice review and great rating. Both are appreciated. Hugs.

reply by Anne Johnston on 23-May-2021

You are welcome

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I love this cumulative children's song, similar to "the girl who swallowed the fly", but the girl who kissed "Jake by the lake" wasn't in anywhere near the same trouble as the "fly girl." Beautifully written my friend, and a very good parody of the original. Clever and progressively articulate and nicely rhymed, well done, good luck, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 23-May-2021

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reply by the author on 23-May-2021

Thank you! I really never liked that lady who swallowed a fly. She also swallowed a spider, you know, and I could not even stomach that. :-) Thank you for your review and comments. Hugs.

reply by royowen on 23-May-2021

Heh heh, like that.