Jake By the Lake
Children's Cumulative Rhyme Story22 total reviews
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Love this!! You are very good at childrens' poetry! I remember reciting a word song with that rhythm and meter. but can't remember - something about the spider that ate the fly...oh why did that spider eat the fly? Very entertaining even to very old children!
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Love this!! You are very good at childrens' poetry! I remember reciting a word song with that rhythm and meter. but can't remember - something about the spider that ate the fly...oh why did that spider eat the fly? Very entertaining even to very old children!
Comment Written 24-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked my children's poem. Hugs.
Comment from elchupakabra
I super enjoy this piece, it is whimsical and very well done - but the one thing throwing me off is splash splish - perhaps this is my North American culture but I can't help but want to say splish splash. Otherwise I very much enjoyed this. Great work and thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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I super enjoy this piece, it is whimsical and very well done - but the one thing throwing me off is splash splish - perhaps this is my North American culture but I can't help but want to say splish splash. Otherwise I very much enjoyed this. Great work and thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 24-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Thank you! I understand the phrase "splash Splish "throwing you off, as it threw me off at first too. But it had to rhyme with "fish. "I got used to it. :-) Thank you so much for your kind review and encouraging comments. Hugs.
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Maybe you could flip it back traditional if your fish was in a flash, or had some panache, or a great big moustache, or a top hat like Slash :P
Comment from Bill Schott
This cumulative tale, Jake by the Lake, is a fun progression, or digression, from one end to the other of this Jake kissing a girl by the lake. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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This cumulative tale, Jake by the Lake, is a fun progression, or digression, from one end to the other of this Jake kissing a girl by the lake. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 24-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Thank you, Bill. I'm glad you liked it. Hugs.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love this! This is extraordinary in its effectiveness in keeping a child's interest and attention or a rainy day when the children must stay inside and listen to wonderful poetry like this! I am blown away at the super rhymes, six in a row that rhyme with dell! I read it each time, as it added another lovely line, and enjoyed it immensely! Thank you for sharing this treat!
Have a great week!
Jesse
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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I love this! This is extraordinary in its effectiveness in keeping a child's interest and attention or a rainy day when the children must stay inside and listen to wonderful poetry like this! I am blown away at the super rhymes, six in a row that rhyme with dell! I read it each time, as it added another lovely line, and enjoyed it immensely! Thank you for sharing this treat!
Have a great week!
Jesse
Comment Written 24-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Jesse, for your kind and supportive review. I am very glad that you liked my poem. Hugs.
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You're very welcome.
Good luck with the contest!
Jesse
Comment from Wendy G
A clever entry ... I was wondering how exactly that Cumulative Tale worked in practice. I see this as a book for little children with beautiful illustrations. Well written.
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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A clever entry ... I was wondering how exactly that Cumulative Tale worked in practice. I see this as a book for little children with beautiful illustrations. Well written.
Comment Written 24-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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This is only one type of cumulative story. There are other styles as well, but this one is my favorite. Thank you for your review and comments. They are appreciated.
Comment from Light Magic
This perfect cumulative rhyme story had me smiling from the beginning to the end. I love the imagery and consider it to be well written. It was a pleasure to read.
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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This perfect cumulative rhyme story had me smiling from the beginning to the end. I love the imagery and consider it to be well written. It was a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 24-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Thank you so much! Your kind words have given me a smile and encouragement. also, I appreciate the six star rating very much! Hugs and blessings to you.
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You're welcome! Hugs and blessings to you also. I hope you have a lovely week.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is clever and a great entry for the contest, it is inventive and you told your story here with some style, much enjoyed and I reckon this could be a winner, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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This is clever and a great entry for the contest, it is inventive and you told your story here with some style, much enjoyed and I reckon this could be a winner, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 24-May-2021
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Thank you, dolly. I appreciate your support and encouraging review. Hugs.
Comment from Pj Dennison
This creative approach to the prompt to write a cumulative tale is outstanding. Not only is this a work cumulative is also has a very clever rhyme scheme and a consistent meter that can be read with slow beats or sped up. I can see children enjoying this story poem very much and speeding up the stanzas as they progress along. They would probably breakout into a giggling frenzy. I know I would. This is exceptional work. It is brilliant
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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This creative approach to the prompt to write a cumulative tale is outstanding. Not only is this a work cumulative is also has a very clever rhyme scheme and a consistent meter that can be read with slow beats or sped up. I can see children enjoying this story poem very much and speeding up the stanzas as they progress along. They would probably breakout into a giggling frenzy. I know I would. This is exceptional work. It is brilliant
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you so much! I am humbled by your kind compliments and your six star rating. It is so appreciated.
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You are welcome. I really do think it should be used in schools as it teaches several different things. The kids would love it. I hope you publish it and have really colorful artwork.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Best ditty since the Twelve Days of Christmas! Charming and whimsical verse, wondereful word choices, delighfully clever six-way rhymes. This may be a winner.
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Best ditty since the Twelve Days of Christmas! Charming and whimsical verse, wondereful word choices, delighfully clever six-way rhymes. This may be a winner.
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you very much. Your kind review and comments are appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from Begin Again
Thanks for the cute poem and for teaching me what a cumulative story poem was... I wasn't quite sure what or how it was written, but reading yours and enjoying... now I do! Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thanks for the cute poem and for teaching me what a cumulative story poem was... I wasn't quite sure what or how it was written, but reading yours and enjoying... now I do! Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thanks! This is just one example of a cumulative story. There are many different ways to write one. I appreciate your comments. :-) Hugs and blessings.
