~Praying for winds of Change~
A Puente Poem for the club challenge15 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your concise, skillfully-written, thoughtful poem conveys a moving message about generations--the older folks' hopes for their children. To me the poem says that the generations NEED each other to make life the best it can be. Good choice of setting
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Your concise, skillfully-written, thoughtful poem conveys a moving message about generations--the older folks' hopes for their children. To me the poem says that the generations NEED each other to make life the best it can be. Good choice of setting
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you very much, and yes exactly what I was trying to say, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from June Sargent
An excellent entry for the puente challenge. Two viewpoints that come together at the end with a solution -
the change I sought was in my years
my children now my farming peers
Help came not with the weather, but from the family.
You are mastering quite a few different formats - I find these club challenges are not only enjoyable, but also educational.
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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An excellent entry for the puente challenge. Two viewpoints that come together at the end with a solution -
the change I sought was in my years
my children now my farming peers
Help came not with the weather, but from the family.
You are mastering quite a few different formats - I find these club challenges are not only enjoyable, but also educational.
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you very much, I am enjoying these club challenges I think they attract my muse, and learning so much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from tfawcus
An interesting poem. Life can be extremely hard at times - especially for those who make a living from the land. Eventually, we are no longer equal to the struggle and younger hands must take our place.
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An interesting poem. Life can be extremely hard at times - especially for those who make a living from the land. Eventually, we are no longer equal to the struggle and younger hands must take our place.
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you for your very understanding comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is my first encounter with a puente poem. The farmer is struggling with land that is difficult to yield crops with. The first stanza concerns his trouble, but the last stanza reflects his hope in the next generation, his children, who are now there to help him, as well as in his own efforts and especially the transitional concept, his prayers, expressed in the middle stanza.
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reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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This is my first encounter with a puente poem. The farmer is struggling with land that is difficult to yield crops with. The first stanza concerns his trouble, but the last stanza reflects his hope in the next generation, his children, who are now there to help him, as well as in his own efforts and especially the transitional concept, his prayers, expressed in the middle stanza.
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Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you very much, this was my first attempt at this form, and I truly thank you for reading what I was trying to say, our first encounters are doing OK. very much appreciated****kahpot
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Dear kahpot, you're very welcome. God bless you. - Mary Kay
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very well written and talks about the drought once again. As you know, I live in a state in America that is facing a severe drought this year, and we are afraid of the summer months and how they may bring the fires too close for comfort.
I love your third verse the most...especially, the last two lines, which say, "the change I sought was in my years my children now my farming peers." Thank you for sharing your talent for this sort of poem and for letting me share as well!
Take care,
Jesse
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This is very well written and talks about the drought once again. As you know, I live in a state in America that is facing a severe drought this year, and we are afraid of the summer months and how they may bring the fires too close for comfort.
I love your third verse the most...especially, the last two lines, which say, "the change I sought was in my years my children now my farming peers." Thank you for sharing your talent for this sort of poem and for letting me share as well!
Take care,
Jesse
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Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you my friend, yes you could certainly use some rain, it was fun trying this form and I am glad you liked it, as always very much appreciated-stay safe****kahpot
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You're welcome, my friend! I am glad you enjoyed writing this piece...you certainly did a good job with it.
Let's both stay safe,
Jesse
