~Praying for winds of Change~
A Puente Poem for the club challenge15 total reviews
Comment from Ginnygray
A great poem, a puente. From the first stanza and the drought with crops not yielding to the change so wished for and connected by the bridge. The crops are now bearing fruit. The only thing is he hoped to change his age!
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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A great poem, a puente. From the first stanza and the drought with crops not yielding to the change so wished for and connected by the bridge. The crops are now bearing fruit. The only thing is he hoped to change his age!
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comments, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for the well written puente poem! I like how you show us the farmer seeing the dusty, drought-plagued land and with the bridge line of praying for change, we move on the the farmer continuing to labor, but this time, not alone, but with the aid of his farming children.
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you for the well written puente poem! I like how you show us the farmer seeing the dusty, drought-plagued land and with the bridge line of praying for change, we move on the the farmer continuing to labor, but this time, not alone, but with the aid of his farming children.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you for your very understanding comments, I enjoyed this challenge, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your Potlatch Club challenge poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your poem's two POV's are clearly evident. Your rhymes are super, the image is perfect, and your message is clear. The 'bridge' is excellent as it fits smoothly with both verses. Farmers are dependent on the weather as the first verse shows as the farmer feels depressed by the drought. In the second verse, the farmer is one with the land and proud to be passing his land down to his children.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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You did a great job with your Potlatch Club challenge poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your poem's two POV's are clearly evident. Your rhymes are super, the image is perfect, and your message is clear. The 'bridge' is excellent as it fits smoothly with both verses. Farmers are dependent on the weather as the first verse shows as the farmer feels depressed by the drought. In the second verse, the farmer is one with the land and proud to be passing his land down to his children.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Wow! what a very encouraging review, the way you have dissected and understood what I was trying to say, is so very inspiring to me, thank you very much, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A perfect pairing of your Puente poem and this picture and your puente line works well, as I'm sure many farmers would agree.I like your end line, with the changing og the guard to his children. Nicely done , cheers valda
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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A perfect pairing of your Puente poem and this picture and your puente line works well, as I'm sure many farmers would agree.I like your end line, with the changing og the guard to his children. Nicely done , cheers valda
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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Thank you very much, I enjoyed this challenge trying to combine different views, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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~Praying for winds of Change~
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I like your Puente Poem for the club challenge. Great imagery and presentation. It's easy to visualize good descriptive words.
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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~Praying for winds of Change~
by kahpot
I like your Puente Poem for the club challenge. Great imagery and presentation. It's easy to visualize good descriptive words.
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you very much, I am slowly getting the hang of new forms, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Wendy G
This harsh landscape resonates with me as an Australian. We have had the worst drought ever recently, and your poem would have been the heart-felt expression of all our farmers. Well written.
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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This harsh landscape resonates with me as an Australian. We have had the worst drought ever recently, and your poem would have been the heart-felt expression of all our farmers. Well written.
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you for your excellent review, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gloria ....
While that makes for a pleasing to the eye picture that is a dry land that would be hard to scratch a living out of. I watched a documentary on the dust bowls of the 30s, and it was horrifyingly awful. Truly frightening, smothered in dust.
Excellent puente poem, showing the arcing between the two, and a fine contribution to the Potlatch Club.
Gloria
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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While that makes for a pleasing to the eye picture that is a dry land that would be hard to scratch a living out of. I watched a documentary on the dust bowls of the 30s, and it was horrifyingly awful. Truly frightening, smothered in dust.
Excellent puente poem, showing the arcing between the two, and a fine contribution to the Potlatch Club.
Gloria
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you very much, I know drought is never a good thing and as you say horrifying, I enjoyed trying this one, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have never come across this form before so well done for giving it a try and I enjoyed the sentiments here, drought can indeed be a challenge as we pass the problems down the generations, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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I have never come across this form before so well done for giving it a try and I enjoyed the sentiments here, drought can indeed be a challenge as we pass the problems down the generations, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you Dolly, yes this is an interesting form and I enjoyed trying this one, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Janetsue
You are saying so much in this posting that you have done such a good job in writing. The imagery is excellent, especially the first line: walking through a paddock of drought
there is also strong emotion, such as: vacant eyes feel dust uncaring
and the concluding line is a memorable one: my children now my farming peers Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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You are saying so much in this posting that you have done such a good job in writing. The imagery is excellent, especially the first line: walking through a paddock of drought
there is also strong emotion, such as: vacant eyes feel dust uncaring
and the concluding line is a memorable one: my children now my farming peers Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful and very encouraging comments, I enjoyed trying this form, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from AnnaLinda
Kym,
That seems like a complicated form. I like how you pulled the title from the center of your poem.
I see you chose rhyme over free verse. This is almost prophetic considering the drought in our country.
Awesome mention of your family in the end.
AnnaLinda
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Kym,
That seems like a complicated form. I like how you pulled the title from the center of your poem.
I see you chose rhyme over free verse. This is almost prophetic considering the drought in our country.
Awesome mention of your family in the end.
AnnaLinda
Comment Written 17-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful review, yes free verse and stories I can't seem to get the hang of yet, I do try sometimes, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
