When storm clouds gather
A Sedoka Poem for the club challenge13 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your club challenge poem. I enjoyed reading it. The syllable count is correct, the image is beautiful, the two viewpoints are clear, and the message is each one is loud and clear. I like the color change of the fonts. Your words are well thought out and create great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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You did a great job with your club challenge poem. I enjoyed reading it. The syllable count is correct, the image is beautiful, the two viewpoints are clear, and the message is each one is loud and clear. I like the color change of the fonts. Your words are well thought out and create great imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 17-May-2021
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Thank you very much, it took a few goes but I got somewhere near it, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
When storm clouds gather
by kahpot
I love your pair of haiku but they are not sedoka. Your syllables count is 5/7/5--5/7/5;. It should be 5/7/7--5/7/7. It should be easy to fix.
I like what you did with the different kind of font color for each katauta. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Well done!!!
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reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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When storm clouds gather
by kahpot
I love your pair of haiku but they are not sedoka. Your syllables count is 5/7/5--5/7/5;. It should be 5/7/7--5/7/7. It should be easy to fix.
I like what you did with the different kind of font color for each katauta. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Well done!!!
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Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Sorry coach, I was not paying attention, I was concentrating on the wonderful image you provided, all fixed and many, many thanks, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Your sedoka is well crafted as it shows us two very clear pictures the hope of the storm clouds over the dry land and the weary farmer yearning for the rains that would ensure the happy future of his children.
I hope Australia will fully recover from the droughts and fires. I also heard you had floods, too.
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reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Your sedoka is well crafted as it shows us two very clear pictures the hope of the storm clouds over the dry land and the weary farmer yearning for the rains that would ensure the happy future of his children.
I hope Australia will fully recover from the droughts and fires. I also heard you had floods, too.
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Comment Written 16-May-2021
reply by the author on 16-May-2021
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging comments, yes we have had it all here lately, apparently we are a hardy bunch down here and recover we shall, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
