Bye Bye Biggie
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Epilogue - Bye Bye Biggie"Young love and old wounds revisited.
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Comment from robyn corum
ZZ,
I'm sorry I missed the boat! But it looks like the party was fun and everyone ended up in pretty good places by looks of the epilogue. AND by looks of the epilogue, it looks like the writer has a fun sense of humor and I imagine the story must have been a hoot. Sorry I missed all but the tail end.
Some notes, if I may?
1.) Where did I go? What did I do? I did the right thing___I lied.
--> this confused me for a bit - I thought the 'I' was all the same - all Q. But it finally clicked that it's someone else who talked about the scene later. Maybe start a new paragraph with the new 'I' to show it's different
or :
-->Q asked (me all) the appropriate questions(: ')Where did I go?(' ')What did I do?(') I did the right thing___I lied.
--> so it shows that this is someone else retelling the events. Make sense?
2.) A currier presented Gladys with the keys, compliments of Publishers Clearinghouse. As instructed, the currier sent a picture of Gladys
--> I think these should be 'courier'?
Thanks so much!
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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ZZ,
I'm sorry I missed the boat! But it looks like the party was fun and everyone ended up in pretty good places by looks of the epilogue. AND by looks of the epilogue, it looks like the writer has a fun sense of humor and I imagine the story must have been a hoot. Sorry I missed all but the tail end.
Some notes, if I may?
1.) Where did I go? What did I do? I did the right thing___I lied.
--> this confused me for a bit - I thought the 'I' was all the same - all Q. But it finally clicked that it's someone else who talked about the scene later. Maybe start a new paragraph with the new 'I' to show it's different
or :
-->Q asked (me all) the appropriate questions(: ')Where did I go?(' ')What did I do?(') I did the right thing___I lied.
--> so it shows that this is someone else retelling the events. Make sense?
2.) A currier presented Gladys with the keys, compliments of Publishers Clearinghouse. As instructed, the currier sent a picture of Gladys
--> I think these should be 'courier'?
Thanks so much!
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thanks for all the help. I get to close to see the obvious, sometimes.
Comment from DentedSyke
Well, you just keep on delivering the goods. Unique characters, believable dialogue, story movement; it's all there - again. You have a masterful touch with paragraph length, and this separates you from others. Keepon writing this great stuff!
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Well, you just keep on delivering the goods. Unique characters, believable dialogue, story movement; it's all there - again. You have a masterful touch with paragraph length, and this separates you from others. Keepon writing this great stuff!
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thanks so much. I appreciate the review. You give me hope.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Leann DS
I am a little bummed that it's over, but you did a nice job wrapping it up. I was trying to think if I had any questions that you left unanswered, but... know. Great job! Thanks for sharing. It's been a fun ride.
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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I am a little bummed that it's over, but you did a nice job wrapping it up. I was trying to think if I had any questions that you left unanswered, but... know. Great job! Thanks for sharing. It's been a fun ride.
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thanks for staying with me.
