Glen Allen Gluttony
Most of us have this sin at times.20 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Most of us have this sin at times.
Glen Allen Gluttony
Poor Glen Allen :( what a horrible predicament. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Most of us have this sin at times.
Glen Allen Gluttony
Poor Glen Allen :( what a horrible predicament. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you for stopping by, Gypsy. Your review is much appreciated.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! This is a very creative story/poem about gluttony, one of the seven deadly sins. It is skillfully composed with a rhyming pattern that is smooth, consistent and easy to read, not to mention humorous. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Wow! This is a very creative story/poem about gluttony, one of the seven deadly sins. It is skillfully composed with a rhyming pattern that is smooth, consistent and easy to read, not to mention humorous. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you very much for your marvelous review of GLEN ALLEN. I am delighted you enjoyed the rhyming and the humor.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Author,
THANK YOU! I had gone through the whole list of Deadly Sins contest entries, save one. I was becoming quite depressed. Don't tell anyone else, but I was quite depressed about the choices!
THEN - I opened the page to your entry. HUZZAH! The picture was a doozy. The whole presentation was delightful. Now way, I thought to myself, that the poem can match THIS beginning. But it DID! It was funny and so tongue-in-cheek (or was that chicken-in-cheek? I get confused).
The rhymes were clever and unexpected and the whole thing shared a very funny but real warning. We certainly do not want to end up like this. Oh, my - and his poor MOM!
hahahaha There was a lot to enjoy and smile about here. THANK YOU! And thus, you have my vote.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Dear Mystery Author,
THANK YOU! I had gone through the whole list of Deadly Sins contest entries, save one. I was becoming quite depressed. Don't tell anyone else, but I was quite depressed about the choices!
THEN - I opened the page to your entry. HUZZAH! The picture was a doozy. The whole presentation was delightful. Now way, I thought to myself, that the poem can match THIS beginning. But it DID! It was funny and so tongue-in-cheek (or was that chicken-in-cheek? I get confused).
The rhymes were clever and unexpected and the whole thing shared a very funny but real warning. We certainly do not want to end up like this. Oh, my - and his poor MOM!
hahahaha There was a lot to enjoy and smile about here. THANK YOU! And thus, you have my vote.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Hi robyn. I am so pleased you enjoyed my poem so much. It was fun to write. Many thanks for your praise and your vote.
Comment from equestrik
This is a well put together entry for the deadly sins contest. Your picture goes perfectly with your writing and your poem expresses your thoughts well.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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This is a well put together entry for the deadly sins contest. Your picture goes perfectly with your writing and your poem expresses your thoughts well.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Thank you. Your review is much appreciated.
Comment from Aussie
I don't know the glutton you are writing about. Definitely not in modern day from the cracks in the painting. A very different subject matter you have written about. I like that you found something new. Reminds me of King Henry V111 he was the worst kind of pig. Thanks for sharing. Weightwatchers would be thrilled! Hee, Hee.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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I don't know the glutton you are writing about. Definitely not in modern day from the cracks in the painting. A very different subject matter you have written about. I like that you found something new. Reminds me of King Henry V111 he was the worst kind of pig. Thanks for sharing. Weightwatchers would be thrilled! Hee, Hee.
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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I think a guy like Glen lives perpetually. He does remind one of Henry VIII. Many thanks for your review.
Comment from karenina
Oh! This is RICH! I laughed out loud...then read it out loud and it was funnier still! Just the perfectly honed bit of edgy satire and flat out wit to make me cringe, remembering some of those Thanksgivings when...
Well, I will spare you the gluttonous details! This has GOT to be a contender! Dear mystery writer... Great Job!
Karenina
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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Oh! This is RICH! I laughed out loud...then read it out loud and it was funnier still! Just the perfectly honed bit of edgy satire and flat out wit to make me cringe, remembering some of those Thanksgivings when...
Well, I will spare you the gluttonous details! This has GOT to be a contender! Dear mystery writer... Great Job!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-May-2021
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
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I am so pleased my poem made you laugh out loud at you enjoyed my dark humor. Many thanks for sharing.
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While I have felt really "darkly humorous" after helplessly overconsuming my unfair share of a Thanksgiving feast... the reading of this allowed me to reflect, repent, and then guffaw!--Karenina
Comment from Ben Colder
The old boy would be better off weighing in on weight watchers. LOL. Poor guy, but I have seen people like this or close be. Thanks for sharing. My best to you.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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The old boy would be better off weighing in on weight watchers. LOL. Poor guy, but I have seen people like this or close be. Thanks for sharing. My best to you.
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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I doubt Glen ever considered dieting. Many thanks for sharing my poem, Ben.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
hahahaha, oh my goodness. This has me laughing so hard, and I love that there's a photo so we can see Glen Allen in all his gluttony.
This part cracked me up:
Came way too big and early too,
then sucked her dry 'til she was dead.
His poor, poor mama, lol.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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hahahaha, oh my goodness. This has me laughing so hard, and I love that there's a photo so we can see Glen Allen in all his gluttony.
This part cracked me up:
Came way too big and early too,
then sucked her dry 'til she was dead.
His poor, poor mama, lol.
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Your pleasure in reading my poem really makes my day, Erika. I am delighted I could make you laugh.
Comment from roof35
You have chosen one of the most common of deadly sins these days. All one has to do to see it is look around. This is an excellent entry for the Deadly Sins contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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You have chosen one of the most common of deadly sins these days. All one has to do to see it is look around. This is an excellent entry for the Deadly Sins contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you for your kind praise of my poem. Indeed gluttony can be seen everywhere.
Comment from Vanna1
Good presentation you really created an image of a slob., I k know there has been people in history that have eaten themselves to death. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Good presentation you really created an image of a slob., I k know there has been people in history that have eaten themselves to death. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you, Vanna. Indeed Glen is a slob few would care to meet.
