Sweet Intoxication
Use these words contest10 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A lovely poem, well thought through and well constructed. Your image is a very appropriate one to support your theme. I liked the swap quatrain style for this piece - it suited well. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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A lovely poem, well thought through and well constructed. Your image is a very appropriate one to support your theme. I liked the swap quatrain style for this piece - it suited well. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to review. I was wondering if you could tell me why you felt this poem needed work, as you assigned it only 3 stars. You must have some suggestions in mind. It would help if you could point them out.
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Oh I am so sorry. That was not intended at all! I meant to give it five stars. I will go back to it and correct it immediately. So very sorry.
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I believe I have fixed it. Could you please let me know if what I did has not worked. Thank you. Again, apologies
Comment from equestrik
The presentation here of your picture as well a your writing is a lovely one for the contest. i appreciate your authors notes as well to explain the structure.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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The presentation here of your picture as well a your writing is a lovely one for the contest. i appreciate your authors notes as well to explain the structure.
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review. Your positive feedback means a lot. Glad you enjoyed this fun piece!
Comment from mobileliz
Beautiful words and lovely picture. You managed to use all the words in a coherent story without making them sound forced. It wasn't as easy as it looked. Good job
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Beautiful words and lovely picture. You managed to use all the words in a coherent story without making them sound forced. It wasn't as easy as it looked. Good job
Comment Written 13-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review. Your positive feedback means a lot. Especially the generous rating! Glad you enjoyed this fun piece!
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you're welcome
Comment from Patty Palmer
Well done! I love the poem about the hummingbird using all of the words directed to include in your poem. Good luck with the contest. By the way, I really like the picture of the hummingbird. It enhances your poem beautifully.
Patty
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Well done! I love the poem about the hummingbird using all of the words directed to include in your poem. Good luck with the contest. By the way, I really like the picture of the hummingbird. It enhances your poem beautifully.
Patty
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to read and review. Your positive feedback means a lot. Glad you enjoyed this fun piece!
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You're welcome!
Patty
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fun write and you fulfilled the brief by using all the words here, humming birds have to consume a lot of food for energy as they rarely sit still--
to help with meter, I suggest an additional word here:
(with motivation for (her) food)
love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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A fun write and you fulfilled the brief by using all the words here, humming birds have to consume a lot of food for energy as they rarely sit still--
to help with meter, I suggest an additional word here:
(with motivation for (her) food)
love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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I think that?s a great suggestion. Thank you for the feedback!
Comment from Laurie Holding
Nice work on this piece that has so many restrictions on you as a poet! You've captured the essence of the hummingbird in your words and in your beautiful accompanying art, so bravo to you! Good luck in the contest, and I hope to see the voting booth so that I can vote for you. Best of luck, and thank you for this marvelous coffee break in my day.
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Nice work on this piece that has so many restrictions on you as a poet! You've captured the essence of the hummingbird in your words and in your beautiful accompanying art, so bravo to you! Good luck in the contest, and I hope to see the voting booth so that I can vote for you. Best of luck, and thank you for this marvelous coffee break in my day.
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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So happy this put a smile on your face today!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, you've touched on one of my favorite subjects - the precious little hummingbird! And you've also described him and his activities really well. This was a fun poem. The required words were used subtly and didn't stand out like they can often do. Nice job. Good luck!
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Well, you've touched on one of my favorite subjects - the precious little hummingbird! And you've also described him and his activities really well. This was a fun poem. The required words were used subtly and didn't stand out like they can often do. Nice job. Good luck!
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to read and and share your insights! I love hummingbirds and am happy you enjoyed this light-hearted piece. Looking forward to summer!
Comment from Begin Again
A very sweet and pretty contest entry that appears to have met all the requirements of using certain words and a rhyming pattern. As for me, I just the thought of watching the tiny hummingbird fluttering about in search of it's dinner. Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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A very sweet and pretty contest entry that appears to have met all the requirements of using certain words and a rhyming pattern. As for me, I just the thought of watching the tiny hummingbird fluttering about in search of it's dinner. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you! I'm glad you ejoyed this light-hearted piece that captures the sights and sounds of summer.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Lovely embroidery with the choice words:) "
With motivation she found food
That put her in a happy mood
and constant undulation
She found food with motivation" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Lovely embroidery with the choice words:) "
With motivation she found food
That put her in a happy mood
and constant undulation
She found food with motivation" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Thank you for reviewing my poem. I noticed that this piece merited only three stars - can you suggest how I could have improved this swap quatrain? Any help you offer would be much appreciated.
I did check the guidelines for reviewers and three stars indicate that a piece is below average and needs work. To be fair to me as a fellow writer, I would like to know why you feel this poem was below average. And how would you have changed the poem to improve it. That is what a reviewer is supposed to do, according to Tom.
Comment from DentedSyke
Good stuff. You used the six words effectively; there was no forcing (except a little with motivation, and you did a fine job with an awkward word, compared to the rest) of meanings or situations. This is a tough format, but you pulled it off. Nice!
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Good stuff. You used the six words effectively; there was no forcing (except a little with motivation, and you did a fine job with an awkward word, compared to the rest) of meanings or situations. This is a tough format, but you pulled it off. Nice!
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Yeah - the word motivation was a tough one to include. After trying three different formats, I thought the swap quartrain worked the best. Thanks for the positive feedback!
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