Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Wow. Sorry I didn't get over to this in the contest. I'm glad to see this in the top awards. Congratulations! A beautiful short verse poem. Blessings,
Sally :))

 Comment Written 20-May-2021

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reply by the author on 20-May-2021

No problem Sally. I just like that you like my posts - contest or not!

Mark

reply by Sally Law on 21-May-2021

I agree. Blessings for your day! Sal :))

Comment from Janaethepoet

Excellent

I like this poem. I have experience with getting my heart broken and this poem reminds me of the moments when I feel depressed and do not want to speak and that's when the silence gets the loudest.

 Comment Written 20-May-2021

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reply by the author on 20-May-2021

Hi Janae!

Pleased you liked my short Senryu-like post. Enough persons also thought it was worthy of their vote, which earned me a 2nd place (tie)! My poetry wheelhouse does not include long verses and most typically I write with 5-7-5 syllable lines.

Mark

Mark

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I like this because of the stark contrast portrayed between the silence of the person's departure, and the deafening, overwhelming impact of the loss. Well written.

 Comment Written 19-May-2021

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reply by the author on 20-May-2021

Wendy,

I appreciate your support and comments for this contest post. Typically, I write in 5-7-5 syllable lines. Longer poetry types are not in my bailiwick.

Mark

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I felt the pain in these words as you describe heart break and silence following departure, I have known those feelings and could identify with these words, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 19-May-2021

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reply by the author on 20-May-2021

Dolly,

I hope that it did not make you sad. I am pleased with how you responded to my contest post. Others favored it, which earned me a 2nd place (tie) in the 3-5-3 contest.

Mark

Comment from tempeste

Exceptional

Ciao poet!

You now have 4 votes!

Your six word poem speaks volumes.

If a relationship is to flourish , both need to be willing to talk matters out when something is wrong

If a partner is confronting the other but instead of replying remains silent

..this shows that person is not willing to hear your discomfort or pain ..

that person acts deaf and that person's silence is hurtful .. shows he or she doesn't care ..

Its a oxymoron ..seeing lack of sound/ noise IS silence so I canā??t be deafening ..

... the saying is a contradiction that emphasise how the choice to be silent, lip-tight in an argument can be worse than hurtful words .

I confess I use to use this method on my pets .. if one did something naughty I would swallow my anger and for the rest of the day I would ignore the culprit .. I could see my silence hurt more than a yell, a spanking or any other kinda of punishment like no daily walk etc.

This is an excellent entry ..

 Comment Written 19-May-2021

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reply by the author on 19-May-2021

THANK YOU Tempeste for your commentary on my short poem. You likely spent more time responding to it than I did in creating it (-; Thanks too for your vote.

Everything is appreciated.

reply by the author on 20-May-2021

Your 4th vote helped me to earn a 2nd place (tie) finish. THANKS!

reply by tempeste on 21-May-2021

Ciao!

I know you don?t mind but I was hoping you would win the blue ribbon without having to share it.

Keep safe!

Comment from equestrik

Excellent

Your writing along with your visual is sobering. Good emotion displayed and a good write for the 3-6-3 contest. It causes one to pause and consider, I like that.

 Comment Written 19-May-2021

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reply by the author on 19-May-2021

THANK YOU for your nice comments for my post. I typically use FanArt for all my poems.

Comment from C. F. Rogers

Excellent

I love your approach for this 3-5-3. Sometimes silence is the most damaging thing that can happen when hearts are torn. Silence can go from something that people share with one another in intimate moments, to absolutely no communication. You conveyed a broken heart beautifully.

 Comment Written 19-May-2021

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reply by the author on 19-May-2021

THANK YOU CFR!

So pleased you liked the approach I took. I take only credit for my words. The FanArt illustration gets plaudits from me.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear Mystery Writer,

As it stands now, this poem can be considered a senryu. They do not have to conform to the strict 5/7/5 format. As long as they are less than 17 syllables and in a short/long/short format - you got it!

Thanks!

 Comment Written 19-May-2021

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reply by the author on 19-May-2021

Robyn,

You are right - this poem has a Senryu feel. I may edit my subtitle based on your review. Sometimes my go to Haiku should just become short-long-short lines and not strictly follow the 5-7-5 syllable format.

reply by the author on 20-May-2021

Robyn,

I am happy placing 2nd in this contest, but still do appreciate your review and suggestion.

Mark

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Very well said, yes a broken heart can result in deafening silence along with the pain, great artwork chosen for this piece, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 18-May-2021

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reply by the author on 18-May-2021

So pleased with your review for this 3-5-3 contest entry. Glad you also liked the FanArt illustration.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is an excellent 3-5-3 poem and entry for the contest.
Nice use of sound, or the lack of sound, to convey the meaning
of a broken relationship.
Excellent choice of painting from Fanart.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert

 Comment Written 18-May-2021

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reply by the author on 18-May-2021

Robert,

THANKS!

Pleased you liked my overall presentation for this 3-5-3 contest. I do like the conciseness of this poem format.