It's not me.
The one missing is me.2 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
very imaginative. I never thought of that half-sleep at the ring of the alarm in this fashion. However, you're also talking about when you're up - with the hot coffee. hmmmm. It must take you awhile to get "unfuzzy" in the mornings. And then... you're totally gone.
well, not totally. here you are. :)
Welcome back!
Neat, different write!
katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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very imaginative. I never thought of that half-sleep at the ring of the alarm in this fashion. However, you're also talking about when you're up - with the hot coffee. hmmmm. It must take you awhile to get "unfuzzy" in the mornings. And then... you're totally gone.
well, not totally. here you are. :)
Welcome back!
Neat, different write!
katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 07-May-2021
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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Thank you so much, Katharine for reviewing my poem.
I should have posted as sleep walking, you are very kind,but fuzzy I have never been,I love to write and see where it takes me.Thanks again.
Comment from DentedSyke
I'll say that the imagery and the fright is portrayed clearly. Dreams are funny things, and can be at once frightening and comforting. I do take issue with some of the grammar. I'm a stickler for certain elements, among those:
After a good nights (night's) sleep
It was to (too) late now,
There are others, but suffice it to say that this takes away from the good work you have shown. You have talent, but focus on message and clarity. Keep writing!
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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I'll say that the imagery and the fright is portrayed clearly. Dreams are funny things, and can be at once frightening and comforting. I do take issue with some of the grammar. I'm a stickler for certain elements, among those:
After a good nights (night's) sleep
It was to (too) late now,
There are others, but suffice it to say that this takes away from the good work you have shown. You have talent, but focus on message and clarity. Keep writing!
Comment Written 07-May-2021
reply by the author on 07-May-2021
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Well thank's for reviewing my little dream,I was asleep so please
forgive the grammar,when I was in school we only had a piece of coal and a flat rock, we had to turn the coal in every day so no home work.
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Okay, that's funny!
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I would not take issue with the grammar Dented, playtime let's skip
school today, and have some fun.
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Skipping school is a specialty of mine.
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I love you already Dented,I am only 74, but I love to write I'm not very good on the computer, and at this age I will push forward thank you for reviewing.
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Thanks so much, John. Really.
