Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Lord Dredd"Dawn of Chaos
8 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
Fantastic thoughts and imagery. Spooky, scary and effective in making me feel uncomfortable.
A little more structure would help. IMHO. I found it difficult to read, not knowing where to pause and which words to emphasise.
Fantastic ideas. A novel approach which I appreciate.
JT
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Fantastic thoughts and imagery. Spooky, scary and effective in making me feel uncomfortable.
A little more structure would help. IMHO. I found it difficult to read, not knowing where to pause and which words to emphasise.
Fantastic ideas. A novel approach which I appreciate.
JT
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thanks for that shout, thinking at least the attempt was appealing,. Thanking you for your direct sincere points, giving thoughts to those conveyances l.
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I did not mean to hurt your feelings. I truly believe you are a creative person. A big Australian shout out to you. He original and never change. Jacqueline
Comment from gramalot8
This was a very interesting read. It was a very different style of poem. I did get the visual that you were painting with your words. There's always a bit of horror when vampires are involved.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This was a very interesting read. It was a very different style of poem. I did get the visual that you were painting with your words. There's always a bit of horror when vampires are involved.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Glad certain aspects in this write were found appealing, thanking you for your generous rate.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is true horror expressed through these rather disjointed sentiments. I actually think your style adds more force to the words and the theme, contrasting this vampire with normal dwellers above ground. Leaving the reader in no doubt as to this creature's murderous potency. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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This is true horror expressed through these rather disjointed sentiments. I actually think your style adds more force to the words and the theme, contrasting this vampire with normal dwellers above ground. Leaving the reader in no doubt as to this creature's murderous potency. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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You're a dear, as most of my writes, needing refinements. Glad that certain aspects were found appealing to your interests.
Comment from w.j.debi
Interesting form. It took me a moment to catch on to what was meant, not knowing where one sentence/thought started and the next began. It adds to the mystery and makes the villain (I am assuming the vampire is a villain) seem more sinister.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Interesting form. It took me a moment to catch on to what was meant, not knowing where one sentence/thought started and the next began. It adds to the mystery and makes the villain (I am assuming the vampire is a villain) seem more sinister.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2023
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Yeah, done some adjustments sense. I'm glad, dispute those fails, you found appealing aspects in this read. Thanking you for your generous rate and encouraging comments.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This image is so terrifying: "
He dresses black into the night blend unseen, hunting every bend for red drink, sucks blood, sinks teeth trend into firmly stopping hunger." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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This image is so terrifying: "
He dresses black into the night blend unseen, hunting every bend for red drink, sucks blood, sinks teeth trend into firmly stopping hunger." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Glad certain aspects detailed in this write were appealing to your interests, thanking you for generous rate and warm thoughts.
Comment from oliver818
This is an interesting poem, I enjoyed reading it. The imagery is spooky but fun. I particularly enjoyed the last paragraph. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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This is an interesting poem, I enjoyed reading it. The imagery is spooky but fun. I particularly enjoyed the last paragraph. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 07-May-2021
reply by the author on 09-May-2021
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Thanking you for that generous rate, and your welcomed comment.
Comment from DentedSyke
I really enjoyed the disjointed style of writing you employ. It works. However, it does make it difficult to understand what you want to convey. Perhaps it's just my prejudice against this style, but I feel like you could make your story clearer with a more structured approach. Still, a fine piece.
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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I really enjoyed the disjointed style of writing you employ. It works. However, it does make it difficult to understand what you want to convey. Perhaps it's just my prejudice against this style, but I feel like you could make your story clearer with a more structured approach. Still, a fine piece.
Comment Written 07-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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No. I have my struggles writing, appreciating your shout and generous rate.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Jessica Weiss
Ok super creepy. And good image to stick with it. Ooof seriously gives me the heebee-jeebees. I don't like reading it. But that's a good thing, that means it's effective writing. Five stars and probably better for a horror fan.
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Ok super creepy. And good image to stick with it. Ooof seriously gives me the heebee-jeebees. I don't like reading it. But that's a good thing, that means it's effective writing. Five stars and probably better for a horror fan.
Comment Written 07-May-2021
reply by the author on 10-May-2021
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Glad certain aspects prevailing this write were found interesting, thanking you for generous rate plus touching thoughts.
