Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

You have used some good literary techniques. Without them this poem would be one-dimensional. I love the alliteration. It becomes onomatopoetic. The f's and s's give the sense of the sound slashing swords make. The assonance creates the oo & ahs while watching sword work.

 Comment Written 04-May-2021

Comment from Erika Seshadri

Excellent

Bahahahaha, omg. I'd give this six stars if I could, but I blew through them all on Sunday like a kid with a handful of quarters at the arcade.

Predicting this to win, I am.

Have a great evening.

 Comment Written 04-May-2021

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
as well as the haiku.
-I like how Darth addresses
the Jedi.
-A good satori line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-May-2021

Comment from Bonnie Seach

Excellent

Hukai for star wars? It is descriptive and forceful. I try to understand why violence should be glorified. I fail. I admire the ability to make it sound spiritual. Joy to you

 Comment Written 04-May-2021

Comment from Kerry L Batchelder

Excellent

I like the color change in the wording to compliment the brilliant illustration. Excellent poem depicting the power and force of the saber. Great work!

 Comment Written 04-May-2021