Bye Bye Biggie
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Surfing Broadway"Young love and old wounds revisited.
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Lin, This is another very well written instalment to your story. As always it is sharp, observant, blunt and to the point all of which underline the tragedy that is unfolding. It deserves a six, and here it is. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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Hi Lin, This is another very well written instalment to your story. As always it is sharp, observant, blunt and to the point all of which underline the tragedy that is unfolding. It deserves a six, and here it is. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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6! Wow. That's pretty fantastic in my world. Thanks for the encouragement. I'm making it up as I go. I have to live the scene in my mind, then write it. That's for continuing to read.
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I do exactly the same, making it up as I go. Of course in my novel I have to stay with the facts. but I make up everything around those.
Comment from Leann DS
A well done chapter with interesting and effective dialogue. I like the flashback part that precludes the present day scene. I may have missed something in a previous chapter, but why is she sneaking him away? Nick, I mean. Did I miss something?
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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A well done chapter with interesting and effective dialogue. I like the flashback part that precludes the present day scene. I may have missed something in a previous chapter, but why is she sneaking him away? Nick, I mean. Did I miss something?
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 02-May-2021
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She has better plans for him. True give-a-way is he knows Biggie was pregnant and he has a child. Thank you so much for reading. I really need to know if I'm leaving something out or confusing the reader. Hard for me to tell since I know what happens in the end. Your help is much appreciated.
