Narcissistic Desire
a senryu for the contest9 total reviews
Comment from Valerie Fish
Have been browsing through your work June, love your style. This one did make me smile. Clever connection of reflection and clearly, and that final pause adds to the effect. Well Done.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Have been browsing through your work June, love your style. This one did make me smile. Clever connection of reflection and clearly, and that final pause adds to the effect. Well Done.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2021
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Glad you got the gist of the narcissist trying to kiss his reflection! Thanks for dropping by to share your insights.
Comment from Laurie Holding
Using the daffodil as your artwork was a stroke of genius! Unlike so many Haikus or Senryus, this piece encourages readers to actually think...do you love me because I'm me? Or is something much more base involved, like how you feel about yourself when you're around me? Or do I just make you look good? I loved everything about this Senryu, and hope you win the prize. You have my vote!
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Using the daffodil as your artwork was a stroke of genius! Unlike so many Haikus or Senryus, this piece encourages readers to actually think...do you love me because I'm me? Or is something much more base involved, like how you feel about yourself when you're around me? Or do I just make you look good? I loved everything about this Senryu, and hope you win the prize. You have my vote!
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thank you for your insightful review! And for the generous rating and vote. I?m glad you got the gist of what I was trying to convey.
Comment from Bonnie Seach
Emotive and descriptive. Format perfect.
The artwork adds import to the poem. NPD is a serious personality disorder. Often it is a tributary to addiction. These people are the product of early trauma. An 8 month old baby can grow into this state of mind if neglected and deprived of it's basic needs for natural development. However, they are emotionally and mentally toxic, and can be dangerous. A victim invariably needs counselling.
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Emotive and descriptive. Format perfect.
The artwork adds import to the poem. NPD is a serious personality disorder. Often it is a tributary to addiction. These people are the product of early trauma. An 8 month old baby can grow into this state of mind if neglected and deprived of it's basic needs for natural development. However, they are emotionally and mentally toxic, and can be dangerous. A victim invariably needs counselling.
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thank you for your insightful review! I?m glad you got the gist of what I was trying to convey. NPD is serious and sadly is getting more common these days.
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I understand the condition. They do know what they are doing. They feel the need to have power over others to deal with their insecurities
Comment from Wendy G
Well written, and a lovely image - the reflection making it very suitable to accompany your entry. The words are well chosen, apt for your theme. Best wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Well written, and a lovely image - the reflection making it very suitable to accompany your entry. The words are well chosen, apt for your theme. Best wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 02-May-2021
reply by the author on 03-May-2021
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Glad you got the gist of what I was trying to convey in a few short lines. Thanks for taking the time to read and share our thoughts.
Comment from juliaSjames
I wouldn't have grasped the layered meaning of your write without reading the author notes. I just didn't pick up on the hint in the artwork.
Well written with the sardonic undertone that's one of the hallmarks of senryu.
Good luck in the contest.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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I wouldn't have grasped the layered meaning of your write without reading the author notes. I just didn't pick up on the hint in the artwork.
Well written with the sardonic undertone that's one of the hallmarks of senryu.
Good luck in the contest.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
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You're welcome, poet
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written senryu. Lovely overall presentation background colour and font. Beautiful photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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This is a nicely written senryu. Lovely overall presentation background colour and font. Beautiful photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to share your thoughts on this senryu!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Bahahahaha, oh my goodness, this made me laugh so hard. What a perfect entry for the Write a Senryu prompt.
Good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Bahahahaha, oh my goodness, this made me laugh so hard. What a perfect entry for the Write a Senryu prompt.
Good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to share your thoughts on this senryu!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
So much is said within these few words and hearts are broken in the process, when we look back at broken relationships we see things much more clearly, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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So much is said within these few words and hearts are broken in the process, when we look back at broken relationships we see things much more clearly, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to share your thoughts on this senryu!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading and reviewing your well-thought out contest entry, Mystery Author. I knew as I read this that it was about narcissism and about the Greek mythological figure. The image is beautiful. Your words paint a great picture fitting that theme. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your well-thought out contest entry, Mystery Author. I knew as I read this that it was about narcissism and about the Greek mythological figure. The image is beautiful. Your words paint a great picture fitting that theme. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 01-May-2021
reply by the author on 01-May-2021
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Thank you for dropping by to share your thoughts on this senryu!
