Severed'
If love is absent, then hate is abundant.5 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This really hit me on an emotional level, it's very powerful. There is a lot of pain in this verse, but also some hope at the end. I think this is brilliant. Thank you for sharing. :)
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This really hit me on an emotional level, it's very powerful. There is a lot of pain in this verse, but also some hope at the end. I think this is brilliant. Thank you for sharing. :)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
Comment from Stephen Force
This good poem, it evokes a visceral response. Your selection of an illustration was well chosen; it compliments your inspiration nicely. I have a question was the word deadens or deadness? Nice job. Steve
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This good poem, it evokes a visceral response. Your selection of an illustration was well chosen; it compliments your inspiration nicely. I have a question was the word deadens or deadness? Nice job. Steve
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
Comment from Bonnie Seach
There is pain in this poem. An overwhelming sadness at being rejected. Forgiveness immediately quells pain. Try that please! Hatred is a cesspool of destruction. It consumes everyone until nothing is left. Forgiveness is the rescuer, restorer and redeemer. Forgiveness is a product of love and love never fails. This poem has typos and spacing issues. With editing I believe it will be a major contender. Success to you
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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There is pain in this poem. An overwhelming sadness at being rejected. Forgiveness immediately quells pain. Try that please! Hatred is a cesspool of destruction. It consumes everyone until nothing is left. Forgiveness is the rescuer, restorer and redeemer. Forgiveness is a product of love and love never fails. This poem has typos and spacing issues. With editing I believe it will be a major contender. Success to you
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thank you bonnie I really appreciate your comment.
Comment from Begin Again
Your written words are filled with sadness, loneliness and regret... things that the person fears can never be changed and desiring them to be what they are not. Definitely forlorn -- Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Your written words are filled with sadness, loneliness and regret... things that the person fears can never be changed and desiring them to be what they are not. Definitely forlorn -- Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thank you carol I really appreciate your response.
Comment from Dilettante junior
This is a fine poem. I believe the verses have deep meaning inside of them of what it feels like for care or love to be unrequited. It is powerful on its own. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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This is a fine poem. I believe the verses have deep meaning inside of them of what it feels like for care or love to be unrequited. It is powerful on its own. Keep it up!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 05-May-2021
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Thank you ...ill try.
