Embarrassment of Pandas
4-8-5 animal haiku for the club challenge12 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hah!
Delightful, June!
And these fluffy bundles do look as if they are in the mix of pandemonium! They think they are crows, eh? Even better!
Loved your presentation!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Hah!
Delightful, June!
And these fluffy bundles do look as if they are in the mix of pandemonium! They think they are crows, eh? Even better!
Loved your presentation!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed this fun little piece on pandemonium! And for the postive feedback.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, I absolutely loved this one June, you made me smile, these are inventive words and you nailed this one, how very clever, this is a lot of fun, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Ha ha ha, I absolutely loved this one June, you made me smile, these are inventive words and you nailed this one, how very clever, this is a lot of fun, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed this fun little piece on pandemonium! And for the postive feedback.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Cute image and
nice presentation, June.
-I didn't know what
a group of pandas was called;
now the poem makes more sense.
-You wrote a good haiku with
good seasonal and nature imagery.
-A good satori line, too.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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-Cute image and
nice presentation, June.
-I didn't know what
a group of pandas was called;
now the poem makes more sense.
-You wrote a good haiku with
good seasonal and nature imagery.
-A good satori line, too.
-Well done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed this fun little piece on pandemonium! And for the postive feedback.
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You are very welcome, Janice.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Whee!!! What a delight...an embarassment of Pandas...love it. Pandas are some of my favorite people! And look at them in that tree - how precious. I find this poem well-written, unique and wonderful!!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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Whee!!! What a delight...an embarassment of Pandas...love it. Pandas are some of my favorite people! And look at them in that tree - how precious. I find this poem well-written, unique and wonderful!!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed this fun little piece on pandemonium! And for the postive feedback.
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You are more than welcome! I tried to find some pandas, but Walmart was out...have to try the nearest tree.
Comment from L. Kalere
What unique names for a group of pandas! Where in the world did they come up with "embarrassment" and "cupboard."
I love your 4-8-5. It's creative, educational, and as cute as can be. I don't give out many sixes to short poems, but I am this time. Best of luck in the Haiku club contest.
Linda
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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What unique names for a group of pandas! Where in the world did they come up with "embarrassment" and "cupboard."
I love your 4-8-5. It's creative, educational, and as cute as can be. I don't give out many sixes to short poems, but I am this time. Best of luck in the Haiku club contest.
Linda
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2021
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I'm glad you enjoyed this fun little piece on pandemonium! And for the postive feedback.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Embarrassment of Pandas
by June Sargent
hahahaha.... an embarrassment of pandas is the best group name I read so far... so cute... good choice.
I never end a line with a preposition. I would change it like this...
an embarrassment
of pandas think they are crows -
pandemonium
good syllables count and connection between lines. pandemonium is a great satori line.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Embarrassment of Pandas
by June Sargent
hahahaha.... an embarrassment of pandas is the best group name I read so far... so cute... good choice.
I never end a line with a preposition. I would change it like this...
an embarrassment
of pandas think they are crows -
pandemonium
good syllables count and connection between lines. pandemonium is a great satori line.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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I agree - it?s much better with the revision. So glad you enjoyed this fun piece! I loved all the entries. But pandas are my favorite.
Comment from juliaSjames
You had me at embarrassment of pandas. But the entire write is a hoot. I live near DC. Fingers crossed when conditions allow I'll be able to see the ones in the zoo.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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You had me at embarrassment of pandas. But the entire write is a hoot. I live near DC. Fingers crossed when conditions allow I'll be able to see the ones in the zoo.
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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Thank you for sharing your insights! Glad you enjoyed this fun piece!
Comment from Mark D. R.
June,
You created a great and funny idea of combining the crows and pandas. Your last line is perfect! You chose the best collective word of the three possibilities for your illustration and verse.
In my view, portrait or landscape, it appears that there is a return inserted between your last two lines - intended or not?
Mark
P.S. There are many good entries for Gypsy's Haiku writing club. Some of the collectives I know. I had posted one a while ago about a rhumba of rattlesnakes.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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June,
You created a great and funny idea of combining the crows and pandas. Your last line is perfect! You chose the best collective word of the three possibilities for your illustration and verse.
In my view, portrait or landscape, it appears that there is a return inserted between your last two lines - intended or not?
Mark
P.S. There are many good entries for Gypsy's Haiku writing club. Some of the collectives I know. I had posted one a while ago about a rhumba of rattlesnakes.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2021
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I would love to see a rhumba of snakes - with music in the background. lol Thank you for sharing your insights and for the generous rating! It was a fun challenge. And I did like the embarrassment of pandas - play on words with pandemonium.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is too cute. I didn't know the group name for pandas was embarrassment, but I like it. They seem enormously cute to me, and your contribution to the club is a hoot.
A most delightful read today. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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This is too cute. I didn't know the group name for pandas was embarrassment, but I like it. They seem enormously cute to me, and your contribution to the club is a hoot.
A most delightful read today. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2021
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So glad you got a kick out of this piece! I think pandas have way too much fun to ever feel embarrassed. I love these little clowns!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a precious picture, June. I enjoyed reading your haiku for the club. Great satori. I believe you are missing the connecting verb between lines 1 & 2. In your notes you could explain that embarrassment means a group of pandas.
an embarrassment
of pandas think they are crows - [lacks the wings of crows to fly]
pandemonium
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
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What a precious picture, June. I enjoyed reading your haiku for the club. Great satori. I believe you are missing the connecting verb between lines 1 & 2. In your notes you could explain that embarrassment means a group of pandas.
an embarrassment
of pandas think they are crows - [lacks the wings of crows to fly]
pandemonium
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2021
