Old Quince Tree
Tanka 5/7/5/7/7 for Contest20 total reviews
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting concept of poetry Made me laugh a first then I understood the depth. I was thinking about how the wife and I worked so hard to a certain apple tree grown and baring when it was it 5 year old the termites killed the thing .
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Interesting concept of poetry Made me laugh a first then I understood the depth. I was thinking about how the wife and I worked so hard to a certain apple tree grown and baring when it was it 5 year old the termites killed the thing .
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Ben. It's always good to hear from you. I appreciate your time and review.
Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, and quite touching, if I'm understanding its meaning; I am the world's worst poem-meaning-figure-outer, so one never knows what the hell I think it's about!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, and quite touching, if I'm understanding its meaning; I am the world's worst poem-meaning-figure-outer, so one never knows what the hell I think it's about!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Sometimes, I share FS posts with my wife. She agreed that this was very nice! I like the idea of the branches leading upward and the ashes by its roots.
Good use of the Tanka format to express a most meaningful poem.
Mark
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Gypsy,
Sometimes, I share FS posts with my wife. She agreed that this was very nice! I like the idea of the branches leading upward and the ashes by its roots.
Good use of the Tanka format to express a most meaningful poem.
Mark
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Mark, I'm honored that you shared it with your wife and she approves. :) I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from Sharon Davis
Afantastic tanka that embodies the essence of the emotionally-charged symbolic value of the Quince tree- a live never ending. I enjoyed reading this poignant and heartfelt work. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Afantastic tanka that embodies the essence of the emotionally-charged symbolic value of the Quince tree- a live never ending. I enjoyed reading this poignant and heartfelt work. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Hello, Sharon, I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
It's so sad when our dear ones pass on, like my son in law's father died a couple of days ago, and he can't get home, because he lived in Indonesia, there is no air transport between our country and theirs, because of the virus, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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It's so sad when our dear ones pass on, like my son in law's father died a couple of days ago, and he can't get home, because he lived in Indonesia, there is no air transport between our country and theirs, because of the virus, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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I'm sorry for your family's loss. I hope your son in law gets home soon. Roy, I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
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Bless you Gypsy
Comment from Leann DS
Oh my! I was not expecting that ending. Grabbed me. Well written with a very clear picture for my brain. Love this! Thank you for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest. Hugs and blessings.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Oh my! I was not expecting that ending. Grabbed me. Well written with a very clear picture for my brain. Love this! Thank you for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest. Hugs and blessings.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for the exceptional review and six stars! You are very kind. I'm glad you like it. :)
gypsy
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You might want to thank mastery/Bob. I totally forgot that I could even give six star ratings, until a couple weeks ago. Ha ha hugs.
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Yay bob! LoL
Comment from juliaSjames
Gypsy, this is beautiful, poignant, evocative. I can see the tree laden with golden fruit. Symbol of love.
Excellent tanka with an amazing pivot. Like the tree, its development is natural and graceful.
The only reason I didn't award six stars is the use of "by" in the final line. Something more specific is called for I think.
What about
"and your ashes bless its roots'"
Good luck in the contest, my friend
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Gypsy, this is beautiful, poignant, evocative. I can see the tree laden with golden fruit. Symbol of love.
Excellent tanka with an amazing pivot. Like the tree, its development is natural and graceful.
The only reason I didn't award six stars is the use of "by" in the final line. Something more specific is called for I think.
What about
"and your ashes bless its roots'"
Good luck in the contest, my friend
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Rules of Tableau is five syllables a line
Thank you for the review and feedback
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This is tanka Gypsy. Just suggesting to replace "by" with "bless"
Hugs
Julia
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Oh, sorry. Today I wrote two poems about quince trees...I got confused. I like the change because bless reflects bheaven.... I changed it. Thank you.
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No worries.. Just about to review your tableau poem :-))
Julia
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written tanka poem. It has a Beautiful overall presentation and font choice. Nice photo to compliment your poem as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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This is a nicely written tanka poem. It has a Beautiful overall presentation and font choice. Nice photo to compliment your poem as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Hello, Joanne, I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
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Comment from lyenochka
This is such a skillfully written tanka. You tell us an entire life story in this tanka, starting with the planting of the tree and it transitions to the yard, foreshadowed by the branches stretching to Heaven, and going to the roots where the ashes of the beloved, who's now in Heaven.
I think you'll do well in the contest!
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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This is such a skillfully written tanka. You tell us an entire life story in this tanka, starting with the planting of the tree and it transitions to the yard, foreshadowed by the branches stretching to Heaven, and going to the roots where the ashes of the beloved, who's now in Heaven.
I think you'll do well in the contest!
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Hello, Helen, I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem. It's always good to hear from you.
Gypsy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Gypsy. The words plus picture pair nicely. Your tanka is well-composed and the words create great imagery. I could see this as I read. Your words create a great, but somber, mood. Best wishes.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Gypsy. The words plus picture pair nicely. Your tanka is well-composed and the words create great imagery. I could see this as I read. Your words create a great, but somber, mood. Best wishes.
Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for the exceptional review. You are very kind. I'm glad you like it. :)
gypsy
