Old Quince Tree
Tanka 5/7/5/7/7 for Contest20 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
branches extend to heaven
and your ashes by its roots
You show an impressive mastery of the tanka form with this poem. We see a beautiful love story, and feel gratitude to you for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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branches extend to heaven
and your ashes by its roots
You show an impressive mastery of the tanka form with this poem. We see a beautiful love story, and feel gratitude to you for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review, six stars, and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I love this poem and I can feel your deep feeling toward your deceased lover one, your former husband. You did a great job connecting the heaven with ashes using the branches.
Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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I love this poem and I can feel your deep feeling toward your deceased lover one, your former husband. You did a great job connecting the heaven with ashes using the branches.
Well done.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars. Have a weekend, Lisa.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gert sherwood
Gypsy your Tanka 5/7/5/7/7 for Contest about the
Old Quince Tree
Is beautify of how you tell us that it was plantedold quince tree plant
long ago to mark our love
in your first home's yard --
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Gypsy your Tanka 5/7/5/7/7 for Contest about the
Old Quince Tree
Is beautify of how you tell us that it was plantedold quince tree plant
long ago to mark our love
in your first home's yard --
Gert
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Gert.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so welcome Gypsy Blue
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You are most welcome Gypsy
Gert
Comment from Marigo J. Stathis
Great imagery, that follows an interesting form (the Tanka). There is an entire life of "firsts" that you convey in few words: a first home, a first planting, and then a (presumably) first death of the loving couple that follows, years later. Interestingly (and perhaps ironically), especially in ancient cultures, quince trees were a symbol of love that brings good health. You connect the branches and roots of that tree to the divine. I can't wait to read your other work. This particular poem is spellbinding! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Great imagery, that follows an interesting form (the Tanka). There is an entire life of "firsts" that you convey in few words: a first home, a first planting, and then a (presumably) first death of the loving couple that follows, years later. Interestingly (and perhaps ironically), especially in ancient cultures, quince trees were a symbol of love that brings good health. You connect the branches and roots of that tree to the divine. I can't wait to read your other work. This particular poem is spellbinding! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your time and kindness.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Marigo J. Stathis
Great imagery, that follows an interesting form (the Tanka). There is an entire life of "firsts" that you convey in few words: a first home, a first planting, and then a (presumably) first death of the loving couple that follows, years later. Interestingly (and perhaps ironically), especially in ancient cultures, quince trees were a symbol of love that brings good health. You connect the branches and roots of that tree to the divine. I can't wait to read your other work. This particular poem is spellbinding! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Great imagery, that follows an interesting form (the Tanka). There is an entire life of "firsts" that you convey in few words: a first home, a first planting, and then a (presumably) first death of the loving couple that follows, years later. Interestingly (and perhaps ironically), especially in ancient cultures, quince trees were a symbol of love that brings good health. You connect the branches and roots of that tree to the divine. I can't wait to read your other work. This particular poem is spellbinding! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your time and kindness.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debra White
Hello Gypsy :)
Just, wow....!
The depth of this tanka is such that it's difficult to put into words how it made me feel.
It is beautiful in word and presentation, and the imagery is gorgeous.
Thank you for writing it and sharing.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Hello Gypsy :)
Just, wow....!
The depth of this tanka is such that it's difficult to put into words how it made me feel.
It is beautiful in word and presentation, and the imagery is gorgeous.
Thank you for writing it and sharing.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Debra, I appreciate your exceptional review, kind words, and six stars... It's always good to hear from you.
Gypsy
Comment from Dilettante junior
Good job with your poem. You chose a nice image, with a nice font and background. You also got all the syllables right. Your ideas are shown in a clear way. Good luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Good job with your poem. You chose a nice image, with a nice font and background. You also got all the syllables right. Your ideas are shown in a clear way. Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Wendy G
This is quite striking, with the switch from considering the branches extending to heaven and then the blessing of the roots with the ashes, religious terminology for the tree, top to bottom. I really like it.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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This is quite striking, with the switch from considering the branches extending to heaven and then the blessing of the roots with the ashes, religious terminology for the tree, top to bottom. I really like it.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought renewed life here in your few words, the cycle that means natured will always win as we have a zest for life. It is when we give up that we die, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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You brought renewed life here in your few words, the cycle that means natured will always win as we have a zest for life. It is when we give up that we die, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
This is really a fine tanka. The minimalist artwork is apropos to focus attention on the poem.
The tree that could be metaphorical or real, or both extends into heaven while blessed by the loved one's ashes.
Wishing you great good luck in the contest. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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This is really a fine tanka. The minimalist artwork is apropos to focus attention on the poem.
The tree that could be metaphorical or real, or both extends into heaven while blessed by the loved one's ashes.
Wishing you great good luck in the contest. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much, Gloria. It's always good to hear from you. I appreciate your time and review.
Gypsy
