Mitchell
a fifty-word story16 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Fun story in the limited word format. Should have been a contest entry. Great alliteration with the "M's". This was indeed a messy situation. Mitchell outdid himself with the numerous wives and deserved retribution. What ensued was so appropriate, evenif messy. judi
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
  |
Fun story in the limited word format. Should have been a contest entry. Great alliteration with the "M's". This was indeed a messy situation. Mitchell outdid himself with the numerous wives and deserved retribution. What ensued was so appropriate, evenif messy. judi
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
-
Ouch. I have trouble re-reading it. Thank you, Judi, for giving it a look. Bill
-
You're very welcome. Have a great weekend. judi
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Now here we have a situation! One can only imagine the reaction and as a result the solution. How could anyone think they could get away with such blatant sins.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
|
Now here we have a situation! One can only imagine the reaction and as a result the solution. How could anyone think they could get away with such blatant sins.
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
-
Solutions are sometimes painful.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
First, the alliteration is perfection. I love the names that you created to keep the story fun and flowing. A fifty-word story is hard to work with but you did it in a very entertaining write.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
 |
First, the alliteration is perfection. I love the names that you created to keep the story fun and flowing. A fifty-word story is hard to work with but you did it in a very entertaining write.
Good luck in the contest.
Regards,
Mary
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
-
Thanks, Mary.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Bill,
Nice tongue in cheek alliteration poem. You're on of the best alliteration poems on this site.
I like the humor and the sound of this lovely work.
Best wishes
Good luck in the contest.
Stay well.
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
|
Bill,
Nice tongue in cheek alliteration poem. You're on of the best alliteration poems on this site.
I like the humor and the sound of this lovely work.
Best wishes
Good luck in the contest.
Stay well.
Cindy
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
-
Thank you, Cindy, for the great review. Bill
-
You?re welcome, Bill.
Cindy
Comment from kahpot
Love the humor and the continuous alliteration throughout, your chosen artwork and your last few lines give the image of very painful, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
|
Love the humor and the continuous alliteration throughout, your chosen artwork and your last few lines give the image of very painful, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
-
Thank you, kahpot.
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
Mashed it with a mallet, eh? Must have been a madhouse. Mighty bad manners, though.
I imagine Mitchell and Millicent might have finally made up, but my mind tells me he'd guard his manhood more carefully.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
|
Bill,
Mashed it with a mallet, eh? Must have been a madhouse. Mighty bad manners, though.
I imagine Mitchell and Millicent might have finally made up, but my mind tells me he'd guard his manhood more carefully.
Thanks!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
-
I think I'd call it quits.
Comment from lyenochka
Yikes! Well, that sounds like a painful way to stop the polygamy - or was he monogamous in many different places? Fun M-alliteration flash fiction and hope it's not about anyone you know.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
|
Yikes! Well, that sounds like a painful way to stop the polygamy - or was he monogamous in many different places? Fun M-alliteration flash fiction and hope it's not about anyone you know.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
-
Can you imagine? Ouch.
-
Actually, I can't really imagine...
Comment from damommy
It's hard enough to tell a story in fifty words without the added burden of all the alliteration here. That's quite a feat, and it was a enjoyable read. Great name of the several wives. I guess he learned his lesson.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
|
It's hard enough to tell a story in fifty words without the added burden of all the alliteration here. That's quite a feat, and it was a enjoyable read. Great name of the several wives. I guess he learned his lesson.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
-
He learned the hard way for certain.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill, I love the names that you have to invent just to keep the meter going in this particular poetic dance.
But I do think, Ms Muffin Moototoot, Has mashed the English language Into a mess, equal Mitchell's manhood.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
|
Dear Bill, I love the names that you have to invent just to keep the meter going in this particular poetic dance.
But I do think, Ms Muffin Moototoot, Has mashed the English language Into a mess, equal Mitchell's manhood.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
-
Thank you, Suzanna, for the great review. Bill
-
Dear Bill, Are you not going to reply to what I did to poor Mitchell?s manhood .
Comment from Mastery
Very well done, Bill Then alliteration alone is super. Telling a complete story in fifty words is no easy feat. I have never tried it and had it turn out a swell as you did here. Alright Alright Alright. LOL Bob
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
|
Very well done, Bill Then alliteration alone is super. Telling a complete story in fifty words is no easy feat. I have never tried it and had it turn out a swell as you did here. Alright Alright Alright. LOL Bob
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
-
Thank you, Bob.
