Life is Short
Contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
This made me laugh out loud. Cleverly written, and much enjoyed. If you can write a poem about the life of a fly you can write about anything, haha! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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This made me laugh out loud. Cleverly written, and much enjoyed. If you can write a poem about the life of a fly you can write about anything, haha! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you so very much! I'm glad you liked my poem. I am practicing for my Grand, inspirational villanelle on boogers. Ha ha thanks again. Hugs.
Comment from Wendy G
Clever poem on a not so pleasant subject. Hence you have done it in a humorous fashion. The close-up image is quite dramatic, and catches the attention. Good wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Clever poem on a not so pleasant subject. Hence you have done it in a humorous fashion. The close-up image is quite dramatic, and catches the attention. Good wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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Thank you, Wendy, for your complementary review and comments. They are much appreciated. Hugs.
Comment from LisaMay
I've had to eat 'shit' far too often - I wonder if I am actually a house fly?
You have provided a distastefully accurate life cycle of this insect in a poetic presentation with good rhyming.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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I've had to eat 'shit' far too often - I wonder if I am actually a house fly?
You have provided a distastefully accurate life cycle of this insect in a poetic presentation with good rhyming.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
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LOL thank you, I think.
Chances are great that you are not a house fly, as you have created many stellar pieces of writing which denotes that you did not die immediately after you ate shit. :-) Yay. I'm glad you're not a housefly.
Comment from Chris Fruge
I thought this was a really clever poem about something I wouldn't have considered. The rhyming was spot on and gave it a lighthearted touch. Nice job
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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I thought this was a really clever poem about something I wouldn't have considered. The rhyming was spot on and gave it a lighthearted touch. Nice job
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate your review and comments. Hugs.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, clear and creative. Thank you for
the author's notes - I now know how to pronounce this word! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is creepy and compliments the
words of this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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The author's words are engaging, clear and creative. Thank you for
the author's notes - I now know how to pronounce this word! The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork is creepy and compliments the
words of this poem.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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:-) Thank you so much for your kind review. Hugs.
Comment from L. Kalere
Oh my ... this is one of those guilty pleasures. I couldn't help but laugh. You really made good use of Eat shit and die! Creative? For sure (and instructive).
Loved it,
Linda
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Oh my ... this is one of those guilty pleasures. I couldn't help but laugh. You really made good use of Eat shit and die! Creative? For sure (and instructive).
Loved it,
Linda
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Thank you. I'm glad that you liked it. I actually had a great time riding it too. Hugs.
Comment from lancellot
Yes, this is certainly true, but you left the parts where they are annoying as hell. This is very well crafted, has some biological science, and humor too. I guess in the end this post proves that if you have talent you can write about anything.
Good entry.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Yes, this is certainly true, but you left the parts where they are annoying as hell. This is very well crafted, has some biological science, and humor too. I guess in the end this post proves that if you have talent you can write about anything.
Good entry.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much! Your comments have lessened my insecurity for a minute, and they are much appreciated.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I wonder that's where the phrase "Eat shit and die" comes from?!
I enjoyed reading your poem about the life of a house fly.
Well rhymed and well paced through the stages of the fly's life.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Hello :)
I wonder that's where the phrase "Eat shit and die" comes from?!
I enjoyed reading your poem about the life of a house fly.
Well rhymed and well paced through the stages of the fly's life.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Ha ha! If it is not where it came from, we could start a rumor and just say that it is. :-) Thank you so much for your encouraging review. Hugs.
Comment from Susan Newell
This now works well.
This would be a cute poem, except for the fact that pupae is the plural of pupa, and larvae is the plural of larva, and you are writing the pom in the singular. You may have to think about how to adjust it.
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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This now works well.
This would be a cute poem, except for the fact that pupae is the plural of pupa, and larvae is the plural of larva, and you are writing the pom in the singular. You may have to think about how to adjust it.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Thanks for letting me know that. I fixed it.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Jay Squires
I don't know who you are. Your anonymity is safe with me. I'll tell you what you are though: you are a bloody genius! This poem is a standout and sure to win the contest.
The life of a
Common house fly:
First I eat shit,
And then, I die.
Oh, my! That is too good!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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I don't know who you are. Your anonymity is safe with me. I'll tell you what you are though: you are a bloody genius! This poem is a standout and sure to win the contest.
The life of a
Common house fly:
First I eat shit,
And then, I die.
Oh, my! That is too good!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much! You totally made my day. Greatly appreciate the six stars. I'm so excited. Thank you again and hugs.
