Reviews from

Warm Summer Night

Tanka for the Japanese Poetry Club Event

14 total reviews 
Comment from karenina
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This is sultry and translucent and warmly reminiscent of recent passion...and oh so tastefully rendered I have to smile.

Only you could pull this off, Gypsy.

It's innocent and light...

Karenina

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2023

reply by the author on 06-Dec-2023
    Thank you for digging my old poems. God bless you and your family.

    Love,

    Marival

    Love and hugs

    Marival
reply by karenina on 07-Dec-2023
    It was a delightful
    gift of an afternoon
    I gave myself!

    Hugs!
Comment from Mark Schardine
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warm summer night
soaked with alluring ripe blooms --
moonbeam on bare skin
reflects on shiny sweat beads
remnant of our lovemaking

A person remembers a joyful event, and the reader asks when it took place. Perhaps yesterday, perhaps decades ago, but the vivid memories remain.

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words, my friend.

    Gypsy
Comment from juliaSjames
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Sensual tanka in the traditional style..The aftermath of lovemaking is beautifully and tastefully rendered..The reader is capable of filling in the picture. But the words help ;+))

Thanks for sharing Gypsy..

Stay safe healthy and blessed

Julia

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 21-Apr-2021
    Hello, Julia, I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.

    Gypsy
Comment from kahpot
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How beautifully presented, your words are full of romance, seduction, and anticipation, as we see and read how nature inspires and encourages, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Debra White
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Hello Gypsy :)
I really enjoyed your Tanka.
You paint quite the picture with your words!
The moonlight reflecting on sweaty naked skin is a lovely observation. Beautiful presentation.
Best wishes, Debra

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Gloria ....
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This is sensuous in a reserved, modest way, which I am guessing is the format for Imperial Court Tanka.

I do have a question. Can one person write from the perspective of both lovers, or are the tanka usually done by two people?

Looking forward to participating in your new Japanese Poetry Club. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 20-Apr-2021
    Tanka in the imperial court was a gift among lovers. After a night of lovemaking each one would write a tanka for the other. You could do a pair, first the woman and then the man...just an idea. I never thought about it. It would be cool. Give it a try if you are up to it.

    Thank you very much for your review and feedback.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by Gloria .... on 20-Apr-2021
    Great, after I clear a few other things up, I will definitely give this a go, and see what happens. Thanks. :))
Comment from Mike Stevens
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and if you change 'Moon beam ' to 'open laughter at bare skin,' I could have written this poem; then I could relate better to it!

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    Mike - Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A sensual and rather naughty write filled with passionate embrace and togetherness, naked under the stars and moon, an ambient write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This Tanka speaks a nice visual painting of summer night and wonderful expression of warm night of summer, well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from Eternal Muse
Exceptional
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Oh, how stunning and beautiful, I am glad I have a six left. Your poetry always amazes me with its power and elegance. There is no match for you on the site in their ability to write a Haiku.

Beautiful.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars. I really appreciate your kind words. I'm honored.

    Gypsy