Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Football Chapter 15 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Leann DS
Excellent. And I wanted to let you know that when I saw this was yours, I got kind of excited to read. :-) I'm really enjoying this. Thank you for sharing. Hugs and blessings to you.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Excellent. And I wanted to let you know that when I saw this was yours, I got kind of excited to read. :-) I'm really enjoying this. Thank you for sharing. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sankey
Thanks again, you did really well through here. Still keeping my interest as I hope you are other readers. I could not find one itty bitty spag through here this morning. Well done keep it coming.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thanks again, you did really well through here. Still keeping my interest as I hope you are other readers. I could not find one itty bitty spag through here this morning. Well done keep it coming.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Gabriel introduces all his coaching staff, and the various sports that the students can be involved in, including the new girl's cross country which Katherine is charged with Gabriel gives Katherine an oversized T shirt to wear. Well don Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : It('s) may be a little large.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Gabriel introduces all his coaching staff, and the various sports that the students can be involved in, including the new girl's cross country which Katherine is charged with Gabriel gives Katherine an oversized T shirt to wear. Well don Barbara, blessings Roy
Typo : It('s) may be a little large.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the catch. I have removed that pesky 's'.
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Well done Barbara
Comment from BethShelby
So much has gone on it feels like the school year should be half o er but it really just getting started. You pack a lot into each of your chapters. I'm enjoying this an looking forward to seeing how the girls cross-country will workout.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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So much has gone on it feels like the school year should be half o er but it really just getting started. You pack a lot into each of your chapters. I'm enjoying this an looking forward to seeing how the girls cross-country will workout.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Another well written classic. You are doing well in keeping with rules of the world you've created.
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"We did, and I do. I won't talk about it. I wish I could've spent a few minutes alone with him." Gabriel started to walk away.
- this is an odd thing for him to say. Kat, never said it was her husband who didn't want to do it. And, What would've Gabe said to her husband, "Go home and screw your wife! Do it twice."
No man who likes a woman would. The last thing he wants or to think of is someone else doing her more than he has or at all.
I would consider removing this sequence.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Another well written classic. You are doing well in keeping with rules of the world you've created.
notes:
"We did, and I do. I won't talk about it. I wish I could've spent a few minutes alone with him." Gabriel started to walk away.
- this is an odd thing for him to say. Kat, never said it was her husband who didn't want to do it. And, What would've Gabe said to her husband, "Go home and screw your wife! Do it twice."
No man who likes a woman would. The last thing he wants or to think of is someone else doing her more than he has or at all.
I would consider removing this sequence.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I have rewritten that sentence about 7 times. I 'm still not happy with it. I think I'll take your advice and just omit it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
H Barbara, this is another great chapter and the story is moving on. I liked it. Now, I found the following that doesn't make a lot of sense: 'I'd never I'd have met him.' I'm not quite sure what the sentence should say. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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H Barbara, this is another great chapter and the story is moving on. I liked it. Now, I found the following that doesn't make a lot of sense: 'I'd never I'd have met him.' I'm not quite sure what the sentence should say. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I've changed that sentence so many times. I hope I have it correct, now. Thank you for pointing it out.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Barbara, It was not until Gabe made all these announcements that I realized how big this fictional high school of yours is, Have you decided on how many students, I'm going to be involved in the life of Katherine's four sons?
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Dear Barbara, It was not until Gabe made all these announcements that I realized how big this fictional high school of yours is, Have you decided on how many students, I'm going to be involved in the life of Katherine's four sons?
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I'm guessing a little under 2000 students. I hope you're involved with Katherine's boys. They're important to the story. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Like magnets with increasing forces Katherine and Gabriel seem to be drawing closer with every segment. Well, all but when she saw him without clothes. Although, if I were a betting man, it was probably more attracting than repelling. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Like magnets with increasing forces Katherine and Gabriel seem to be drawing closer with every segment. Well, all but when she saw him without clothes. Although, if I were a betting man, it was probably more attracting than repelling. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I have a feeling you're correct about the towel incident, but Katherine will never admit it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
I love the way Coach Gabriel is written. I wish that there had been a coach Gabriel in my life when I was in school at any level. I believe that my life might have taken a different direction, definitely a better direction. This is a wonderful story.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I love the way Coach Gabriel is written. I wish that there had been a coach Gabriel in my life when I was in school at any level. I believe that my life might have taken a different direction, definitely a better direction. This is a wonderful story.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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It has been a continuing pleasure.
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I get suggests from reviewers that I need to spice things up a little. I don't want to and it reviewers like you that make me feel I'm on the right track. Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
I'm glad Gabriel emphasized to the students at the pep rally that it's a good idea for them to become involved in some extracurricular activity, even if it isn't sports. Most schools have a great number of options for the students. The teachers certainly deserve credit for taking on the responsibility of sponsoring the clubs. It means a lot of extra hours for them. I don't know how Katherine's going to do it. She'll be so busy with coaching the girls' track team, plus she has her family and her classes to think about. The pressure's really going to be on for her. I'm eager to see how she survives it all. judi
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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I'm glad Gabriel emphasized to the students at the pep rally that it's a good idea for them to become involved in some extracurricular activity, even if it isn't sports. Most schools have a great number of options for the students. The teachers certainly deserve credit for taking on the responsibility of sponsoring the clubs. It means a lot of extra hours for them. I don't know how Katherine's going to do it. She'll be so busy with coaching the girls' track team, plus she has her family and her classes to think about. The pressure's really going to be on for her. I'm eager to see how she survives it all. judi
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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We'll see what happens. Thank you for the kind review.
