Sunken Secrets
Shipwreck5 total reviews
Comment from Lane Jennings
This 5-7-5 poem raises an interesting point. How do you pronounce the possessive of Jones--Jones' or Jones's? In rhythmic terms the extra syllable works fine here and keeps the predominant trochaic beat dancing along right to the end. I also like the pause between lines 2 and 3 that underscores the parallel between the secrets kept by the sea itself and those who sail there. English language haiku offer many opportunities for variations that enhance the interest of the form--as this poem shows.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
This 5-7-5 poem raises an interesting point. How do you pronounce the possessive of Jones--Jones' or Jones's? In rhythmic terms the extra syllable works fine here and keeps the predominant trochaic beat dancing along right to the end. I also like the pause between lines 2 and 3 that underscores the parallel between the secrets kept by the sea itself and those who sail there. English language haiku offer many opportunities for variations that enhance the interest of the form--as this poem shows.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. In everything I've ever heard the pronunciation has always been Jones'. I was of the impression that when a words ends in S then the extra syllable shouldn't be used.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Sunken Secrets, has the right set up and dives deep for the contents of a dead man's chest which lies on the sandy bottom.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
This 5-7-5, Sunken Secrets, has the right set up and dives deep for the contents of a dead man's chest which lies on the sandy bottom.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thanks very much for your review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine -5-7-5 full of mystery and intrigue and few words described a sinister scene, much enjoyed and good luck with the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
A fine -5-7-5 full of mystery and intrigue and few words described a sinister scene, much enjoyed and good luck with the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very nicely done. I think your poem does a wonderful job of describing those "ocean mysteries". I like how you formatted this poem. Very creative and well written.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
Very nicely done. I think your poem does a wonderful job of describing those "ocean mysteries". I like how you formatted this poem. Very creative and well written.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from T B Botts
Ohh, good poem. I love the ocean and almost everything about it. Hopefully I'll never be consigned to Davy Jones's Locker. I spend a lot of time on the boat in the summer. For fishermen, the secrets are hopefully well kept. Mysteries indeed. Well done.
Tom
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
Ohh, good poem. I love the ocean and almost everything about it. Hopefully I'll never be consigned to Davy Jones's Locker. I spend a lot of time on the boat in the summer. For fishermen, the secrets are hopefully well kept. Mysteries indeed. Well done.
Tom
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. I wish the ocean would release the secrets of how to catch its fish!!