Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 115 "Another Bang-Up Beginning"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
18 total reviews
Comment from mobileliz
Well done, good flow and no typos. Real situations with real outcomes. Nothing seemed forced or unnatural. It was more than "just the facts", the writer added opinions and personal feelings. I liked it.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Well done, good flow and no typos. Real situations with real outcomes. Nothing seemed forced or unnatural. It was more than "just the facts", the writer added opinions and personal feelings. I liked it.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the review and comments. I appreciate you reading this. I don't think you are a regular reader of my story but I do hope you come back again.
Beth
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I just joined FanStory. I'm not anyone's regular reader, Yet. I hope to change that in the future.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Kids are always into something. LOL They keep us on their toes, even when they get older, don't they? I am enjoying reading these memoirs. Thank you for writing them and continuing to share.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Kids are always into something. LOL They keep us on their toes, even when they get older, don't they? I am enjoying reading these memoirs. Thank you for writing them and continuing to share.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you Barbara. Yes our guess our kids will be a part of our life as long as we life. They make life interesting. When they screw up they say it not my fault. You didn't teach better. We they succeed, we seldom get the credit. I glad you are enjoying reading this
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, as usual I love it and I read everything with great interest. At this point in time, everybody in your family seems to run into one problem after the other. Fortunately nobody gets seriously hurt. That is the most important. I did smile when I read about Glen cutting of his cast three times. Why would he do that? It just doesn't make sense. Can't wait to see what's next. I'm so enjoying this. I'm always looking forward to a new chapter. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Hi Beth, as usual I love it and I read everything with great interest. At this point in time, everybody in your family seems to run into one problem after the other. Fortunately nobody gets seriously hurt. That is the most important. I did smile when I read about Glen cutting of his cast three times. Why would he do that? It just doesn't make sense. Can't wait to see what's next. I'm so enjoying this. I'm always looking forward to a new chapter. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. Have you even worn a plaster cast. They are miserable. I wanted to cut mine off. My son had one on his wrist once and he cut it off, so I can understand but it didn't help get Glen well. It took him three months to heal.
Beth
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I will admit, I never have. I can't begin imagine the discomfort. But I still wouldn't tamper with it. The healing would be my priority. LOL
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow! That was a terrible year for you and your family. Automobile accidents, broken bones, travel. company. Busy year. You would think Glen knew better than remove those braces. Sounds like Murphy settled in to stay for a while.
Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Wow! That was a terrible year for you and your family. Automobile accidents, broken bones, travel. company. Busy year. You would think Glen knew better than remove those braces. Sounds like Murphy settled in to stay for a while.
Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the review. The years has more bad moments to come. Thanks for sticking with me. I really appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from AnnaLinda
Beth,
A lot happened in this year. I have read this in two stages. I hope I remember the first half. I better go review it. Oh wait, your ankle
healed pretty well, but Glen kept cutting off his plaster cast...until
he was finally given a fiberglass one.
This seems funny now:
"They were kissing, or something of that nature, and failed to realize the car was not in gear"
Then Evan revving the engine and waking up the neighbors...
Then finding rusty nails with the new metal detector...
Two different auto accidents - After struggles with auto insurance companies - all was ok...no bad injuries? That's fortunate.
This was smart of Evan:
"You sold some timber from our place in Mississippi. After getting bids, you sold the trees for $13,500. which certainly helped with our living expenses"
You mentioned your cedar siding getting old looking. Yeah, our house with the first husband had cedar siding. I think he sprayed some kind of
clear sealer on it every few years. How did the paint over it look?
Well, I think I will be on my way now. I enjoyed my visit and found this to be well written. I'm wondering if you should have a couple for zeros after "13,000." and then a comma in that above sentence.
Until next time,
AnnaLinda
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Beth,
A lot happened in this year. I have read this in two stages. I hope I remember the first half. I better go review it. Oh wait, your ankle
healed pretty well, but Glen kept cutting off his plaster cast...until
he was finally given a fiberglass one.
This seems funny now:
"They were kissing, or something of that nature, and failed to realize the car was not in gear"
Then Evan revving the engine and waking up the neighbors...
Then finding rusty nails with the new metal detector...
Two different auto accidents - After struggles with auto insurance companies - all was ok...no bad injuries? That's fortunate.
This was smart of Evan:
"You sold some timber from our place in Mississippi. After getting bids, you sold the trees for $13,500. which certainly helped with our living expenses"
You mentioned your cedar siding getting old looking. Yeah, our house with the first husband had cedar siding. I think he sprayed some kind of
clear sealer on it every few years. How did the paint over it look?
Well, I think I will be on my way now. I enjoyed my visit and found this to be well written. I'm wondering if you should have a couple for zeros after "13,000." and then a comma in that above sentence.
Until next time,
AnnaLinda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the in depth review. You don't have to take so much time with these reviews. FanStory only requires a little over two lines. I appreciate it but going to a lot of trouble is going to burn you out on this site. I don't want that.
Beth
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Beth,
I enjoyed my visit.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This has a title that covers starting the year with a number of bangs. It certainly wasn't the best year for you and your family. So many mishaps.
Yet, there was a lot going on, still. A very active family indeed. All the traveling back and forth leaves you prone to various accidents. Still, it didn't stop anybody.
Ralf
Note:
We hoped (you'd) would>> 'you'
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This has a title that covers starting the year with a number of bangs. It certainly wasn't the best year for you and your family. So many mishaps.
Yet, there was a lot going on, still. A very active family indeed. All the traveling back and forth leaves you prone to various accidents. Still, it didn't stop anybody.
Ralf
Note:
We hoped (you'd) would>> 'you'
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the review and for the comments. Yes 1990 was a year we wouldn't soon forget. There is a lot that still happens before this years ends.
Beth
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow, Beth, that was certainly a great start to that year! Could anything else possibly go wrong? Two cars wrecked, broken leg, ankle, torn ligaments, are just a few things to kick it off!! I'm hoping the rest of the year went well, and Don did get around to proposing. Lol. I wait to read more. This is going to be such a wonderful book to leave the family and those of generations to come. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Wow, Beth, that was certainly a great start to that year! Could anything else possibly go wrong? Two cars wrecked, broken leg, ankle, torn ligaments, are just a few things to kick it off!! I'm hoping the rest of the year went well, and Don did get around to proposing. Lol. I wait to read more. This is going to be such a wonderful book to leave the family and those of generations to come. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you for a great review and excellent comments. 1990 was quite a year and it continues to be. Stay tuned.
Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
As always, there is so much going on in your lives, and your kids seem to generate as much excitement as ever. Between the two of you and your offspring, you had more than your share of mishaps and car wrecks, but fortunately, no total catastrophes; God was good. I actually did run out of sixes this time, but your chapter is as good as ever!
I found some minor errors, and here is my list of suggestions:
Carol told him, "We're not paying for another cast, if you have to go through life as a cripple.
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Carol told him, "We're not paying for another cast, if you have to go through life as a cripple." [you need a paragraph break here]
Months later, Glen was still going to specialist ...
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Months later, Glen was still going to a specialist ...
At one a.m the second week of the New Year,
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At one a.m, the second week of the New Year,
Glen insisted they park it once they got home.
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Glen insisted they park it, once they got home.
Lenny was still working part time at Toy R Us.
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Lenny was still working part time at Toys R Us.
Connie was able to start a saving account.
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Connie was able to start a savings account.
On this trip, They met most of Glen's family.
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On this trip, they met most of Glen's family.
Connie and Lenny went to the Prom together in April.
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Connie and Lenny went to the prom together in April.
riding in a limo, a fancy meal and all that went with it,
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riding in a limo, eating a fancy meal and all that went with it,
'cow tipping',
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"cow tipping," [both times]
'snipe hunting',
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"snipe hunting,"
Christi thought she wanted to be a Chiropractic assistant ...
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Christi thought she wanted to be a chiropractic assistant ...
The first Chiropractor she was interviewed by,
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The first chiropractor she was interviewed by,
you sold the trees for $13,500.
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you sold the trees for $13,500,
I was also having car problems so some of the money went for that.
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I was also having car problems, so some of the money went for that.
For several weeks, you limped around unable to straighten your leg without pain.
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For several weeks, you limped around, unable to straighten your leg without pain.
He told you that you'd torn a ligament and that you needed surgery ...
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He told you that you'd torn a ligament and that you needed surgery, ...
...to get the pressure down enough to proceed.
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...to get the pressure low enough to proceed.
The doctor cleaned out the torn ligament and some arthritic damage ...
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The doctor cleaned out the torn ligament and some arthritic damage, ...
Lenny is Connie's boyfirend.
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Lenny is Connie's boyfriend.
Other's mentioned:
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Others mentioned:
Marabeth is my mother first cousin.
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Marabeth is my mother's first cousin.
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I think relationships provided a tremendous source of uncertainty in the lives of your family members--not that they always realized it! It was something that was out of your hands, unlike the finances, which, while challenging, you had more experience with, and control over.
I think you were right about the "cow tipping" -- a load of manure!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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As always, there is so much going on in your lives, and your kids seem to generate as much excitement as ever. Between the two of you and your offspring, you had more than your share of mishaps and car wrecks, but fortunately, no total catastrophes; God was good. I actually did run out of sixes this time, but your chapter is as good as ever!
I found some minor errors, and here is my list of suggestions:
Carol told him, "We're not paying for another cast, if you have to go through life as a cripple.
-->
Carol told him, "We're not paying for another cast, if you have to go through life as a cripple." [you need a paragraph break here]
Months later, Glen was still going to specialist ...
-->
Months later, Glen was still going to a specialist ...
At one a.m the second week of the New Year,
-->
At one a.m, the second week of the New Year,
Glen insisted they park it once they got home.
-->
Glen insisted they park it, once they got home.
Lenny was still working part time at Toy R Us.
-->
Lenny was still working part time at Toys R Us.
Connie was able to start a saving account.
-->
Connie was able to start a savings account.
On this trip, They met most of Glen's family.
-->
On this trip, they met most of Glen's family.
Connie and Lenny went to the Prom together in April.
-->
Connie and Lenny went to the prom together in April.
riding in a limo, a fancy meal and all that went with it,
-->
riding in a limo, eating a fancy meal and all that went with it,
'cow tipping',
-->
"cow tipping," [both times]
'snipe hunting',
-->
"snipe hunting,"
Christi thought she wanted to be a Chiropractic assistant ...
-->
Christi thought she wanted to be a chiropractic assistant ...
The first Chiropractor she was interviewed by,
-->
The first chiropractor she was interviewed by,
you sold the trees for $13,500.
-->
you sold the trees for $13,500,
I was also having car problems so some of the money went for that.
-->
I was also having car problems, so some of the money went for that.
For several weeks, you limped around unable to straighten your leg without pain.
-->
For several weeks, you limped around, unable to straighten your leg without pain.
He told you that you'd torn a ligament and that you needed surgery ...
-->
He told you that you'd torn a ligament and that you needed surgery, ...
...to get the pressure down enough to proceed.
-->
...to get the pressure low enough to proceed.
The doctor cleaned out the torn ligament and some arthritic damage ...
-->
The doctor cleaned out the torn ligament and some arthritic damage, ...
Lenny is Connie's boyfirend.
-->
Lenny is Connie's boyfriend.
Other's mentioned:
-->
Others mentioned:
Marabeth is my mother first cousin.
-->
Marabeth is my mother's first cousin.
***
I think relationships provided a tremendous source of uncertainty in the lives of your family members--not that they always realized it! It was something that was out of your hands, unlike the finances, which, while challenging, you had more experience with, and control over.
I think you were right about the "cow tipping" -- a load of manure!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much Mary Kay. As usual, you help means so much to me. Like I said, you don't need to worry about not having six stars. What you do means so much more to be than the stars. I assume everyone had heard of "cow tipping" and "Snipe hunting". I love you're comment about it being load of manure. LOL
Beth
Comment from Sankey
This was a great read except for the confusing bit. The following is quite confusing. "We're not paying for another cast, if you have to go through life as a cripple.("??) Since Glen's dad was a doctor, and he was studying to be a nurse, you would have thought, he'd have known better. Months later, Glen was still going to (the)specialist with a leg that wouldn't heal properly.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This was a great read except for the confusing bit. The following is quite confusing. "We're not paying for another cast, if you have to go through life as a cripple.("??) Since Glen's dad was a doctor, and he was studying to be a nurse, you would have thought, he'd have known better. Months later, Glen was still going to (the)specialist with a leg that wouldn't heal properly.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm sorry that confused you. Because Glen wouldn't wear the brace long enough for his leg to heal, It begin to look like he was never going to heal. Carol was tired of having to pay to have braces put on when he wouldn't wear them. Another reader said I need a page break there so maybe that helped make it clearer. I did put "the" in as you suggested.
Beth
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There needed to be a closing of the expression marks after her comments too will go look again, just up at approaching 5 am Saturday, here.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant line: Getting in bed with that cast [omit comma] made me feel like I was sleeping with a tree. Lots of amorous action in this one! No wonder Evan's blood pressure is through the roof.
you would have thought [OMIT COMMA] he'd have known better.
It was the next evening [OMIT COMMA] before he could get someone over with a tow truck [OMIT COMMA] to pull his car off our neighbor's trees.
they were either at his house [OMIT COMMA] or ours.
you sold the trees for $13,500 [COMMA] which certainly helped
you needed surgery [COMMA] which could be done as an arthroscopic procedure
work [a while=>AWHILE or FOR A WHILE]
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Brilliant line: Getting in bed with that cast [omit comma] made me feel like I was sleeping with a tree. Lots of amorous action in this one! No wonder Evan's blood pressure is through the roof.
you would have thought [OMIT COMMA] he'd have known better.
It was the next evening [OMIT COMMA] before he could get someone over with a tow truck [OMIT COMMA] to pull his car off our neighbor's trees.
they were either at his house [OMIT COMMA] or ours.
you sold the trees for $13,500 [COMMA] which certainly helped
you needed surgery [COMMA] which could be done as an arthroscopic procedure
work [a while=>AWHILE or FOR A WHILE]
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for the great review and the comma help. You were the first with these suggestion and I've corrected them all. I think I've already nominated you, but I'll check.
Beth
