Olden Times
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Comment from AnnaLinda
Joan,
As Helen mentioned, the picture for the club is not showing up.
None the less, your poem stands strong on its own. Sorry you
have a newbie to offer you 3 stars on this.
" gracios " is that a Spanish version of gracious?
Anyway, I'm happy I stopped by and hope this 5 star review
helps wipe away the low star rating showing up.
AnnaLinda
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Joan,
As Helen mentioned, the picture for the club is not showing up.
None the less, your poem stands strong on its own. Sorry you
have a newbie to offer you 3 stars on this.
" gracios " is that a Spanish version of gracious?
Anyway, I'm happy I stopped by and hope this 5 star review
helps wipe away the low star rating showing up.
AnnaLinda
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thanks, Anna, for the nice review. I appreciate your comments.
No to your question. I will correct the misspelling.
Glad you liked it
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
Hi Joan,
Was this for the Picture Club? Somehow the picture didn't come through. Anyway, I see you wrote a Tyburn-like poem but you used adjectives not just -ing words and you placed them in different places in the two longer lines. Yes, like seemed slower in the "olden days" but they also couldn't get a lot done because just eating required a lot more work.
One typo:
Moved slower; more gracios than today (gracious)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Hi Joan,
Was this for the Picture Club? Somehow the picture didn't come through. Anyway, I see you wrote a Tyburn-like poem but you used adjectives not just -ing words and you placed them in different places in the two longer lines. Yes, like seemed slower in the "olden days" but they also couldn't get a lot done because just eating required a lot more work.
One typo:
Moved slower; more gracios than today (gracious)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Helen
You?re right, this was posted for the picture this club. This is the first time the artwork didn?t post correctly.
Yes, they did have to work harder back then. Maybe that made them more humble and thankful
Joan
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I'm sure that's very true. Although the stress level of war and barbarian raids must have been terrible! Great job with this poem. I like how your first four lines are only four words. Does a great job of emphasizing each word.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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I'm sure that's very true. Although the stress level of war and barbarian raids must have been terrible! Great job with this poem. I like how your first four lines are only four words. Does a great job of emphasizing each word.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Thanks for reading and reviewing this poem. Glad you liked it
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Comment from Ozymandias504
Not great but not bad. Given the limited format I should say I am more impressed. With brevity, it told a complete story. The last line was the bit that brought my score down. I would rewrite that and see what you have.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Not great but not bad. Given the limited format I should say I am more impressed. With brevity, it told a complete story. The last line was the bit that brought my score down. I would rewrite that and see what you have.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
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Thanks for the honesty. I will work on the last line
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