In Kneed of Freedom
Prisoner Prose7 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
LOL I didn't see that ending coming. It certainly was a surprise but makes a lot of sense. I'm sure the prisoners do get restless. They put a cast on my arm when I broke my wrist. It drove me so crazy that I was back at the hospital having then take it back off. They finally just put a splint on it that I could adjust to let some air in. That was only three years ago when I was 62. LOL
Patty
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LOL I didn't see that ending coming. It certainly was a surprise but makes a lot of sense. I'm sure the prisoners do get restless. They put a cast on my arm when I broke my wrist. It drove me so crazy that I was back at the hospital having then take it back off. They finally just put a splint on it that I could adjust to let some air in. That was only three years ago when I was 62. LOL
Patty
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this flash in which you allowed us to believe in a literal prison but the surprise was it wasn't the kind we were thinking off. It is probably almost as real. I've had my leg encased in a plaster cast before and my own feeling ere a lot like the ones you expressed her. Nice contest entry.
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I enjoyed this flash in which you allowed us to believe in a literal prison but the surprise was it wasn't the kind we were thinking off. It is probably almost as real. I've had my leg encased in a plaster cast before and my own feeling ere a lot like the ones you expressed her. Nice contest entry.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is very interesting. If you can give voice to objects, animals and emotions why not to legs. I think the short story is well written but I do have small suggestion. I think the payoff or the twist is a bit long. The surprise should be quick and at the very end. IMO
Good entry and good luck.
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Hmm, this is very interesting. If you can give voice to objects, animals and emotions why not to legs. I think the short story is well written but I do have small suggestion. I think the payoff or the twist is a bit long. The surprise should be quick and at the very end. IMO
Good entry and good luck.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
Comment from Wendy G
This is clever and imaginative, and quite original. Your story has been well written, and I like the last few words as a fitting climax. Best wishes for the contest.
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This is clever and imaginative, and quite original. Your story has been well written, and I like the last few words as a fitting climax. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, you have discarded your plaster cast, glad your leg is now free. Your title should read (Need) not (KNeed) ? A fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Ha ha ha, you have discarded your plaster cast, glad your leg is now free. Your title should read (Need) not (KNeed) ? A fun post, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. I purposely spelled the title as kneed as a reference to the leg that has become free
Geoff
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How clever, I bought that might be the case x x x
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant play on KNEED/need ingenious take on the theme--this may be a winner! (I was expecting this to be about the trial of Derek Chauvin for kneeing Floyd yo death.)
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Brilliant play on KNEED/need ingenious take on the theme--this may be a winner! (I was expecting this to be about the trial of Derek Chauvin for kneeing Floyd yo death.)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Thanks for your review. Too much Floyd stuff around, no need for me to add to the pile.
Geoff
Comment from LisaMay
You wrote a suspenseful story with a lovely feeling of anticipation at being free at last. (And now you'll have all those rehabilitation exercises to do before you have a leg to stand on securely.)
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You wrote a suspenseful story with a lovely feeling of anticipation at being free at last. (And now you'll have all those rehabilitation exercises to do before you have a leg to stand on securely.)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
