Globe trotter
playwords on several countries15 total reviews
Comment from Xenia Escobar
I liked the play on words with several countries. Being that I am Panamanian, this line "I wear a panama on the canal." threw me off. I get your playful play on words, but I was not really feeling this one line. I like the little shout out to Panama as well as other countries. It did not necessarily make me smile in a humorous sense, but I like the diversity of the piece. Good luck in the competition!!!
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I liked the play on words with several countries. Being that I am Panamanian, this line "I wear a panama on the canal." threw me off. I get your playful play on words, but I was not really feeling this one line. I like the little shout out to Panama as well as other countries. It did not necessarily make me smile in a humorous sense, but I like the diversity of the piece. Good luck in the competition!!!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2021
Comment from Brett Juliet
Your poem puts a smile on one's face ð??? starting with the titled reference to the Harlem Globe trotters ( intention or unintentional ). Although uneven in rhythm scheme your poem has a playful flow and towards the end an established rhythm. Your use of connotation such as " I break China in Beijing" gives strength to the sound and rhythm. Overall, smiled and thoroughly enjoyed your well-travelled poem! ð???â??ï¸?
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Your poem puts a smile on one's face ð??? starting with the titled reference to the Harlem Globe trotters ( intention or unintentional ). Although uneven in rhythm scheme your poem has a playful flow and towards the end an established rhythm. Your use of connotation such as " I break China in Beijing" gives strength to the sound and rhythm. Overall, smiled and thoroughly enjoyed your well-travelled poem! ð???â??ï¸?
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
Comment from Pj Dennison
I gave your poem an excellent as it is very interesting, witty and clever. I was trying to determine your rhyme scheme and there seems to be a couple going on but I don't know if there is a term for that type of scheme. Anyway, it all worked. I hope to see your work again one day.
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I gave your poem an excellent as it is very interesting, witty and clever. I was trying to determine your rhyme scheme and there seems to be a couple going on but I don't know if there is a term for that type of scheme. Anyway, it all worked. I hope to see your work again one day.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
Comment from Jill McCauslin
This certainly made me smile. I especially like the first half of the poem where you keep including the names of different places. That worked really well. Very clever.
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This certainly made me smile. I especially like the first half of the poem where you keep including the names of different places. That worked really well. Very clever.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha you made me laugh so hard and I could fallow you around the globe -
In Ulan Bator, I search the big mogul
I eat turkey in Istanbul.
I break china in Beijing
I wear a panama on the canal.
In India, I taste Darjeeling, - Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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Ha, ha you made me laugh so hard and I could fallow you around the globe -
In Ulan Bator, I search the big mogul
I eat turkey in Istanbul.
I break china in Beijing
I wear a panama on the canal.
In India, I taste Darjeeling, - Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2021
Comment from royowen
Well done, this a marvellous poem, by using the letter I in all the lines, you gave a great allusion of a travel poem with some marvellous places sewn into the poem, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
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Well done, this a marvellous poem, by using the letter I in all the lines, you gave a great allusion of a travel poem with some marvellous places sewn into the poem, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem is witty and uses different countries and items that are related to them in some way to describe where the speaker has been. But in the end there is a twist that these places were just seen in movies not really visited.
Good luck, keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
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This poem is witty and uses different countries and items that are related to them in some way to describe where the speaker has been. But in the end there is a twist that these places were just seen in movies not really visited.
Good luck, keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Apr-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This humorous poem, Globetrotter, starts out with a cool idea which may have lost fuel as you neared the finish. There may be cultural connections that are beyond me to infer.
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This humorous poem, Globetrotter, starts out with a cool idea which may have lost fuel as you neared the finish. There may be cultural connections that are beyond me to infer.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2021
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I'm not sure about he humor aspect of this. I think you may want to read it to someone and see their reaction. Now form wise, The rhyme scheme was hard to follow. It seemed random or changing. I suggest a structured and consistent method.
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Hmm, I'm not sure about he humor aspect of this. I think you may want to read it to someone and see their reaction. Now form wise, The rhyme scheme was hard to follow. It seemed random or changing. I suggest a structured and consistent method.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
Comment from Earl Corp
What do you mean by left me as a tartar? You looked like you had some fun writing this. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
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What do you mean by left me as a tartar? You looked like you had some fun writing this. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
